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Matsu's Holocron Casing

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Emberlene's Daughter, The Jedi Generalist
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To sub the casing for Matsu's holocron being constructed in the codex
  • Image Source: Hogfather
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: My Subs
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PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
STANDARD FEATURES
ADVANCED SYSTEMS
STRENGTHS
  • Exotic Matter: The ethereal nature of the metal makes it near weightless despite being and looking dense within the pocket dimension of dream. In realspace it can be grasped and there is a steady supply able to be used by Krass. When experimenting with the extent the design that has been refitted.
  • Advanced Systems: Designed with several notable systems installed on the shipsto improve their capabilities and turn the jedi into a needed operational fighter.
    • Saotome Advanced Tracking System: Designed to give hyperspace tracking capabilities to the ships systems.
    • Advanced Whammy Drive: Whammy Drives create an interdicition pulse that can trip the safeties of ships hyperdrives stalling them. They can't keep a fleet from jumping but for a moment those within range of the pulse can be stalled.
    • Saotome Car'das: Designed for micro jumps with high levels of precision and capabilities.
    • Cater Phalanx: Designed to strengthen the shielding of a squadron. A small team can bunch together and project a shield over themselves for additional protection.
    • Kyberite: Designed as the exterior of the jedi grandmasters holocron itself. The plate on the back of a giant space turtle held up by cragmaloids that have been carved uses the crystals to mimic the crystalline lattice of the holocron.
    • Self Repairing: Designed like a Quellian ship the hull of the platform repairs itself over time and will maintain itself for thousands of years.
    • Advanced Hyperdrive: Designed with an experimental hyperdrive that is meant to give them some of the fastest flight times across all of the galaxy.
    • Saotome Rhion: For the more limited production ships, the Rhion can upgrade and repair a ship by grabbing materials and breaking them down.
    • Sasori Kalantas: Terraforming towers developed on the platform and deployed but also being used to make the temple aareas and mountain, lake regions lush and full of life.
  • Exotic Matter: Altered at the molecular level and force enhanced to be force enhanced to be highly protective.
  • Cold Storage: Designed to hold jedi craft for them to use on missions and store ships recovered from enemy forces within a safer area.
WEAKNESSES
  • Neural Net: THe neural net of the academy allows connecting and automating a number of systemsbut for a skilled hacker who can get itno the biocomputers can hack it and cause havoc.
  • Protective Qualities: Largely non protective in qualities as it doesn't fully adhere to the rules of physics. The metal looks dense and like it would be highly protective but it isn't.
  • Exotic Particles: Largely unknown and not seen in the galaxy before. It isn't invincible nor is it really strong but it reacts violently near dark and anti-matter which can disrupt and destroy it or even cause it to rupture and disintegrate.
  • Sleg: A powerful energy enhancer, the sleg absorbs and channels the excessive heat generated by the chassis of the speeder. Making them maintain a stronger level of power but also increases the chances that they could explode from the heat.
  • Hive Minded: A benefit in some ways allowing the ships to heal each others internal systems itself but it also means that they share pain. A strange effect is choushin ships can refuse to attack each other.
  • Orissa: Designed with the Orissa that is a solid plate covered in drop pods reducing underside defenses and cannon.
DESCRIPTION
Designed by Matsu as well something no one else has seen. Using the knowledge she learned from the discplates station a megastructure allowing refugees to have a place in the galaxy. THey created a similar plate for the silver jedi's grandmaster. IN this case on carved cragmaloids that would sit atop the lightspawn species that came from Ahch-To... a massive spaceborne turtle that travels around the galaxy making sure her holocron itself is not in a singular space. The location always being able to change. The design of the dome and the plate working with a crystal lattice to contain her holocron and allowing the lush and fertile land to be a location several million could live comfortable lives. The fruits of her life as it were while tending to the temple at its center. SMaller vilages around it and a massive contained lake that functions like an ocean. THe envinronmental system similar to the high plane in how it is able to shift and terraform itself as needed to provide seasons and better weather conditions. More work going into the location itself as the casing of the holocron was more important to get prepared for the contents and method of travel.
 
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Ravenfire

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Matsu Ike Matsu Ike

Hi Great Sub

Couple things here that I can see

Is this a military Station or Civilian Station? Given the sizing I am guessing its meant to be a Civilian station but in that case you are technically breaking the rule below by having a hanger space with starfighters which would be combat capacity.
  • Civilian vessels/stations are defined as having an armament rating of 'None' and, if they have a hangar rating, should not be able to field a compliment of starfighters in a combat capacity.
Secondly according to another sub reviewed by the Factory Admin we don't allow for Nexi to exist on ships, I would extend this to include space stations as well.
 
Ravenfire Ravenfire | Matsu Ike Matsu Ike

I saw this submission in conjunction with the codex submission that was made recently and am pulling it accordingly.

This is not a station since it is capable of movement, in fact from reading the connected codex submissions that is the point of it. You even mention in your submission that it is "a massive spaceborne turtle that travels around the galaxy" A space station is a structure that is designed to remain in place, such as an orbital trade port, or a combat station, while they may be capable of some small movement to maintain and correct their position they are not intended to move around the galaxy, that is the purview of ships, which is what I'm classing this submission as.

As such it can only be 10km as per the production and fielding table.

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I'm also not entirely sure why a species that naturally travels through hyperspace needs a hyperdrive. Or a shield designed to boost the squadron, or materials designed to grab materials and repair and upgrade or metals deigned for heat exchange in the chassis of the speeder.

But, the largest concern I have with this submission is how much of a copy this whole concept is from Terry Pratchett's Discworld. Building on the back of a giant turtle that moves through space is too on the nose and moves into the cross-over RP.

As such I'm going to deny this submission. You may resubmit a submission that corrects these issues.
 
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