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Approved Starship Herevan-class, Space Station

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HER WORSHIP'S STATION
NATASI J. FORTAN
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a unique space station that fits with First Order lore, and adds a new role-play element to Dosuun.
  • Image Source: DMADBI#Citadels, Astrahus,(x) (x), // Pavel Savchuk, Artstation (x)
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: Solarium Glasteel (x)
  • Primary Source: Galidraan I, Galidraan II
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
STANDARD FEATURES
  • Auxiliary Systems:
    • Auxiliary Power Generator Systems
    • Auxiliary Power Converter and Control Systems
    • Systems Control Center
    • Supplemental Power Control Center
    • Reserve Power Generator Systems
    • Emergency Back-up Power Generator Systems
    • Auxiliary Reactor Control Center
    • Auxiliary Core Coolant Systems Management
    • Auxiliary Shield Power Management Systems
    • Emergency Shield Operations and Power Management System
    • Emergency Command Operations Center
    • Emergency Disengagement Systems
    • Emergency Intrepid Hull Deployment Systems
    • Emergency Life Support Systems Management
    • Emergency Power Capacitor Control Systems
    • Escape Pod Control Systems Management
    • Automatic Failsafe and Containment Systems Management
    • Communication Systems:
    • Coordinated Command Integration Encryption Suite
    • Encrypted Communications Suite, Short-Range Encrypted Data Network
    • Fleet Control Data Exchange Network
    • Hyperwave Communications and Encryption Network
    • Interfleet, Intrafleet Communications and Encryption Network, and Key Systems[
    • Long Range Communications Management Systems, Encryption Key Systems
    • Standard Communications Management Suite
  • Flight Systems:
    • Flight Control Navigational Systems Suite
    • Primary Flight Controller Management Systems
    • Secondary Flight Controller Management Systems
    • Propulsion Systems Control Suite
    • Sublight Systems Control Suite
    • Flight Control Power Conversion Systems
    • Hyperlane Navigational Systems
    • Galactic Hyperspace Holosuite Systems
    • Hyperdrive Power Control Systems
    • Jump Point Navigational Control Systems
  • Engineering Systems:
    • Primary Power Management Control Suite
    • Secondary Power Management Control Suite
    • Power Conversion Systems Control
    • Reactor Core Control System
    • Core Coolant Management Suite
    • Fail-Safe and Containment Systems
    • Reactor Disengagement Systems
    • Engineering Control Suite
    • Secondary Reactor Control System
    • Secondary Core Coolant Management Suite
    • Secondary Reactor Disengagement Systems
    • Shield Generator Power Management Suite
    • Weapons Power Generator Management Suite
    • Life Support Systems Management
    • Hazard and Damage Control Management Systems
    • Holosuite Power Systems Management
    • Tractor / Pressor Beam Power Control Systems
    • Reactionary Repulsor Power Generator System
    • Waste and Hazardous Waste Management Systems
    • Primary Shield Generator Power Systems
    • Capacitor Control Systems Suite
    • Secondary Shield Generator Power Systems
    • Dedicated Power Blackout Power Generator
    • Secondary Power Conversion Systems Control
    • Secondary Engineering Control Suite
    • Dedicated Weapons Power Generator Systems
    • Back-up Dedicated Weapons Power Generator Systems
    • Emergency Fail-Safe and Containment Systems
    • Safety Management Suite, Escape Pod Power Reroute Systems
  • Tactical and Security Systems
    • Redundant Shield Management Systems
    • Swarm Targeting and Tracking Sensor Systems, Full Range
    • Semira Defensive Systems Management
    • Shield Capacitor Power System Management
    • Shield Management Systems and Power Conversion
    • Shield Booster Management Systems, Tertiary Shield Generator
    • Tactical Analysis, Computer-Aided Targeting Systems
    • Target Range Finder, Computer Aided Systems
    • Automated Target Lead, Lock-On System Management
    • Automated Reload and Internal Temperature Check Systems
    • Automated Weapons Waste Disposal Systems
    • Weapons Control and Munitions Management Systems
    • Weapons Waste Containment and Hazard Control Management
    • Nova Shield Management Systems
  • Sensor Systems:
    • Multi-Directional Long Range Sensor Arrays
    • Navigational Sensor Arrays and Control Suite
    • Short-Range Tachyon Sensor Network
    • Long Range Gravitational Mass Sensor Suite
    • Starship Signature Identifier Scanning Systems, Full Range
    • Full Range Hyper-Navigational Sensor System
    • Cargo Sweep and Identifier Scanning System, Standard Range
    • Full Range Planetary Scanner, Lifesigns Identifier System
ADVANCED SYSTEMS
STRENGTHS
  • Rebranded Offense: The best offense, is a great defense, and furthermore with twenty-four squadrons to her credit, Her Worship’s Station is able to withstand quite a bit of damage and dish out the damage that she’s given, in return.
WEAKNESSES
  • No Escape: Unfortunately, Her Worship’s Station suffers from both low maneuverability and speed. Coupled with the absence of a hyperdrive, means that Her Worship’s fate rests where she lay. It makes her not only vulnerable but a rather easy target for those looking to settle a score.
DESCRIPTION
Officially it is the Herevan-class, First Imperial Military Station Natasi Josephine Fortan, unofficially it is Her Worship’s Station Natasi Fortan, or simply known as Fortan Station. A monumental effort from the First Order as it begins to re-establish itself. Once more, Ariel Yvarro tapped the companies of Primo Victorian Shipwright and Aurora Industries to construct the station. Unable to secure her mother’s plans for the then planned Galidraan Mk III Defense Station. Ariel pulled from the archives, on the Galidraan Mk I and Mk II Command Stations.

They had been in their time hybrid military and civilian stations. The designs would be reworked and implemented in what was to be the ‘mother’ of stations. While Fortan Station draws from the most recent era of First Order history. It pushes forward in technology, outfitted with an array of defensive technologies and new artillery armaments. In addition to her armament and defenses, Fortan Station boasts twenty-four TIE Squadrons along with ten support squadrons of various types.

Her Worship’s primary mission, the defense of Dosuun. Second to this what seems to be a rather mundane mission, the acquisition and research of historical artifacts. During the height of the First Order, there had been a ‘Historical Recovery Division.’ When the First Order fell, the division went into some manner of disarray before being rebranded into the Society of Archaeological Research. The Society was founded by Dr. Audrey St. George one of the foremost archaeologists and librarians from the old Historical Recovery Division.

SOAR’s mission is to not only research the history of the Unknown Regions but to honor the past. A mission that they’re quite sure that Her Worship would have been most proud to have sponsored. SOAR does more than simple research, they work to understand the past and apply the lessons to today’s time and era.

For now, the Herevan-class Space Station serves a prototype for future investments into stations that may hold a purpose closer to the original Galidraan-class stations. Discussions among the Corps of Engineers, the Military, and the Government are in the works for bringing back other Fortan Era types of space stations in some form. Until such time the Moff Council is happy to see Fortan Station up and running.
 
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Always nice to see a new station being built. However we have a bit of issues to address.

Image Source: DMADBI#Citadels, Astrahus,(x) (x), // Pavel Savchuk, Artstation (x)
What is this Citadels tag? Was something just not put in the right place? Please fix or explain.


  • Manufacturer: Primo Victorian Shipwright, Aurora Industries
  • Affiliation: The First Order
Links required to the Factions and Company Pages. Not the Marketplace pages, Company.


Materials:
Intrepid Ablative Armor [Emergency]
Solarium Glasteel Viewports [Primary]

Gravitational Technology
Links are broken, please fix.


Height: 4,980m
  • Hangar Space: Very High
  • Hangar Allocations: 34 Squadrons
    • Starfighters: 24 squadrons
    • Support Craft: 10 squadrons

4500m [Base: 5 | Very Low: 11 | Low: 18 | Average: 25 | High: 32 | Very High: 39 | Extreme: 45]
Wrong size placement at 4,980. You be at the 4500 meter section with five more squadrons. I would use it wisely.


Let me know when you make the required changes. This was a lot of reading and I enjoyed it!
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I don't want to tell you how to do your job, but your demeanor could use some work. Next, the 'hashtag' is so you know where to look on a page with a bunch of pictures and sections. Hence, #Citadels so you know to look at the citadel section. Second, I have the option of adding the five additional squadrons should I choose. In any case, I've added the five squadrons to support, however; I am going to direct you to my first sentence. All other links should be fixed.

Listib Hibin Listib Hibin
 
I am one of those who is not technology savant when it comes to new social media things. Hashtags is something I barely understand nor have the idea to use simply due to not using Twitter or Facebook. So first, I give my apology for not understanding what that meant and hope you understand that mentality. I hate social media generally and people have to constantly educate me simply to just use a "Tweet" or to "Hashtag" an event which to me is just a hyperlink?


Second, you actually do not have that option. It must be stern and stone in place. Also bear in mind, you did not make the change as directed.

Height: 4,980m
  • Hangar Space: Very High
  • Hangar Allocations: 34 Squadrons
    • Starfighters: 24 squadrons
    • Support Craft: 10 squadrons

4500m [Base: 5 | Very Low: 11 | Low: 18 | Average: 25 | High: 32 | Very High: 39 | Extreme: 45]
That highlighted section saying Very High at 4500 meters....is your actual Very High. You need to change your numbers to match that which would be this.

  • Hangar Space: Very High
  • Hangar Allocations: 39 Squadrons
    • Starfighters: x squadrons (Insert Number)
    • Support Craft: x squadrons (Insert Number)
Your Height is what kicked into that equation. If you want to keep it at the lower number, then knock it down below 4500 meters. Otherwise, please fix it.

Last thing to mention is the comment. I am ignoring it for the better good of your submission. Don't do it again.


Let me know when you make the changes and we can push this right on through for approval!
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Listib Hibin Listib Hibin I'm going to say this as a former Factory Judge, your demeanor does need a lot of work. Nothing you've done has been in any sort of friendly demeanor. Again unless there's an unwritten update about squadron numbers, I don't understand why having less would suddenly equate to not having a balanced submission. Nothing you've done has been in the appropriate manner. And yes do forgive me for it being God knows how early in the morning that it escaped my view.

Again, the station is balanced as is, with or without the extra five squadrons. Now, I'm sure with my coffee that this now has the extra five squadrons you've been squabbling about. Lastly, while you wag your finger at me, and are in your place to ignore it. However, I'm still going to suggest you look at your demeanor. This entire set could've gone a lot smoother. I would suggest looking at your fellow judge Visanj T'shkali Visanj T'shkali I've always loved working with this judge.
 
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