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Approved Planet Yesmireen

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Y E S M I R E E N

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Out of Character Information

Intent: To create a planet for future Role Play
Image Credit: Here || ArtStation | Drock Nicotine || Dividers, Top Emblem and Edits by Myself
Canon: N/A
Links: Muzutsi | Midwan | Wiri | Galacot City | Serin | Molgeth

Permission(s): N/A
General Information
Planet Name: Yesmireen
Demonym: Yesmiri
Region: Inner Rim
System Name: Yesmir
System Features:

  • 8 planets (1 inhabited/7 uninhabitable)
  • Asteroid belt between 6th and 7th planets
  • Yellow Dwarf star (Yesmir)
Location: Inner Rim | Taloraan Hex
Major Imports:

  • Luxury Items
  • Food Stuffs
Major Exports:
  • Raw Materials
  • Technology
  • Weapons
Unexploited Resources:
Geographic Information
Gravity: 0.7 Standard - 1.9 Standard (98% Earth on average; gravity fluctuates based upon neuranium deposits)
Climate: Temperate (varies based on region)
Primary Terrain:

  • Dessert
  • Mountains
  • Plains
  • Forests
  • Rainforests
  • Oceans
  • Tundra
  • Glaciers
  • Lakes
Atmosphere: Type I
Location Information
Capital City: Galacot City
Planetary Features:

  • Myak - Largest moon; terrestrial with breathable type-I atmosphere. Myak has rather temperatures and often experiences winter blizzards and summer lightning storms.
  • Rogarf - Smallest moon; rocky and arid with no atmosphere and an inability to support any forms of life.
  • Rings comprised of various asteroids and debris caught within the planet’s gravity. The remnants of two lost moons also help to form this belt around the planets. These moons were destroyed by impacts of celestial bodies (aka comets)
  • Serin- Light Side Nexus
  • Molgeth - Dark Side Nexus
Major Locations:
  • Muzutsi- Muzutsi is a wasteland of Yesmireen which houses the ruins of an old civilization whose population has since vanished from the planet. Overall, the area is desolate with a terrain similar to the dry, cracked red rock of Geonosis. The crumbling architecture of the ruins here is the only thing that would really catch one’s eye.
  • Dzis iw Witsiza - A sprawling forest, the area almost seems to carry an enchanted vibe to it. The forest teems with life, be it various forms of flora or fauna.
  • Midwan - A relic of a bygone past, Midwan is a large temple constructed by Sith that once dominated the planet. Its remarkable construction has allowed it to endure the test of time, even amidst the strange gravity present here that causes certain formations to float aloof in a circle around the temple.
  • Wiri - A massive ancient city constructed hundreds of years before the rise of the Galactic Empire under Palpatine, Wiri is a true marvel among this world fuel of history. It is positioned mere kilometers from the fading Nexus, Molgath, and is seemingly constantly under the ominous veil of smog or fog. Visual perception of this city makes it appear nefarious and malignant, catering to the dark desires of evil and nothing more.
  • Galacot City - The capital of the planet Yesmireen, Galacot City is a sprawling metropolis that caters to a wide variety of different interests. There is a heavy military presence throughout the city and is overwhelmingly dominated by Humans. Alien species are few and far between here and often seen performing the less than desirable tasks and jobs that come with being a functioning city.
Force Nexus: Yesmireen possesses what might be labeled and appear and seem to be two separate Force Nexuses, but in truth they are but remnants of an ancient, far more powerful Nexus that once existed in the planet’s past, Myrigoth. A neutral Nexus known as Vyxtal, it was succumb to the brutality of cataclysm which almost took the world so long ago while creating the jagges rings of rock and ice around the planet. Vyxtal unfortunately was only ever seen by the first species to develop on the planet and when this cataclysm took the nexus and split it, the species of alien bipeds died with it - ran extinct to the volatile nature of the galaxy and that which rendered the planet uninhabitable for nearly a millennium.

Serin
Intent: To create a minor Force Nexus to cater to the lore and conditions of the planet Yesmireen (LINK)
Nexus Name: Serin
Nexus Alignment: Light
Size: Small
Strength: Weak
Accessibility: Serin was only just discovered in recent years once scientists began to study and track the increasingly rarer Immerin people native to this planet. Nestled deep underground, the nexus is not easily accessed as anyone unfamiliar with the cavern system that runs beneath Yesmireen’s seemingly enchanted forest of Dzis iw Witsiza, could find themselves lost and possibly never again be able to see the light of the system’s star again. Even experienced cavers would find difficulty in reaching the Nexus as technology fails to work properly in both the forest above and the caverns below.
Effects: Serin appears to possess an emotional sway on those who pass her by. Her aura seems to relieve stress and soften moods, leading towards a rather relaxed or mentally rejuvenated state. It is said that if conflicting groups were to negotiate within its embrace, it would be only a matter of time before an amicable peace would be brought forward.

Molgeth
Intent: To create a minor Force Nexus to cater to the lore and conditions of the planet Yesmireen (LINK)
Nexus Name: Molgeth
Nexus Alignment: Dark Side
Size: Small
Strength: Weak
Accessibility: Unlike its sister, Serin, Molgeth is highly accessible to anyone and sits atop the surface of the planet. It resides as a pit in a sinister looking bog and is constantly emitting an ominous, thick, low hanging fog. It is not difficult to locate almost seems to draw people to it should they wander into the effects of its aura.
Effects: More than anything, Molgeth affects a person’s will or desire, infecting them with an infatuation for great power built upon a foundation of rage and passion. It corrupts the spirit in a gradual manner, the magnitude of this effect becoming stronger the longer one remains within its embrace. In all, like its sister Serin, Molgeth plays on the emotions and desires of those who wander into its embrace.

Population
Native Species:
  • Sentient (Fauna)
Immigrated Species:
Population: Moderate
Demographics: See Immigrate Species for percentage layouts for species known to inhabit the planet. Overall, the population here favors Human (or Near-Human) species in a hierarchical, caste-like system. In this sense, the planet carries a heavy sense of racism, where humans are seen as superior and are seated in every position of power. Other species are permitted to come to Yesmireen, but will only receive a “warm” welcome if they are of human or near-human descent.
Primary Languages:

  • Galactic Basic
  • Mando'a (remnant of Taung past - recovered texts)
  • Sith (remnant of Sith past - recovered texts)
Culture: The Yesmireen culture really is not what anyone would call 'special' or 'unique' in any regard. Instead the culture here is what many would consider oppressive where it is the will of the ruling class that ascribes everything that will ever be acceptable. These are not a religious or devout people and as such do not lean in any particular direction regarding such things. All religion is accepted, however, the ruling class here constantly keeps a close vigil over any conglomeration in order to immediately shut down any gathering that might pose a threat to their undisputed rule.
Government & Economy
Government: Constitutional Republic
Affiliation: Yesmireen
Wealth: High; The GDP of Yesmireen is earned largely though production, manufacturing and trade of its resources with outside systems.

Stability: High; Since the coming of the Confederacy of Independent Systems, the totalitarianism that once was has been driven out, allowing for all citizens to have a voice and stance within the Republic of Yesmireen.
Freedom & Oppression: Freedom stretches large and vast across Yesmiri space with the implementation of the Constitutional Republic that is now the foundation of world. Any and all are given voices to express their own opinions and each among its peoples now celebrates the same opportunity as the rest.
Military & Technology
Military: Cities are highly fortified against infringing forces. More recently, the world was selected to play host to a body of the Confederacy's Armed Forces, further increasing the martial ability of the system. Even with the Governmental changes that have overcome the planet, Yesmireen still maintains heavy ties to its military, with a large percentage of its population having served in its military in at least some for or fashion. Some of the defenses that fortify the cities include substantially large military forces and perimeter defense measures such as:
Technology: Galactic Standard
Historical Information
A planet that has long sequestered itself from the greater political entities of the galaxy, Yesmireen is a planet of tremendous diversity. It has a varying climate as well as is covered in all kinds of flora and fauna; some even unique to this very world itself. However, Yesmireen’s state was not always such. Millennia before, the planet was cold and dark; possessing little atmosphere to trap the heat on the surface. As such, the surface was blanketed in thick sheets of permafrost and cracked rock. Much of the terrain and its vast network of mountains were carved into the very surface itself and massive glaciers would migrate across it. More unique, however, was that the terrain did not always seem to lay dormant along the ground. Instead, the planet carried about it, a curious nature. The gravity present was not consistent and instead saw itself fluctuating regularly.
Neuranium deposits beneath the Yesmireen’s crust played cruel tricks on the space time gravitational properties of the planet. The deposits and veins of this over dense ore stretched wildly across the planet. In moments gravity could shift significantly. The gravity shifts are so chaotic, in fact, that one could be standing in an are possessing 70% standard gravity and then 100 kilometers away find themselves in a catastrophically different, 190% standard gravity. Some scientists have credited these anomalies from the neuranium deposits as the source which allowed Yesmireen to evolve into the lush and diverse planet it is today. However, many others refute this idea in favor of other theories that have been brought to light over the years.
Refugees from the Great Hyperspace War were among the first to immigrate and settled the planet in recorded history. These Sith quickly dominating the indigenous Yesmiri species and eventually driving the primitive race to extinction. They built temples and other constructs as they grew in power and influence on the planet, and even discovered a font of power, Molgeth, which they exploited heavily. They drew on the Dark Side Nexus heavily, allowing their Kissai to expand their knowledge and influence over the Dark Side of the Force in ways they’d not dreamt possible prior. Free and unabated to their will, the Sith here sought to unlock an unending archive of knowledge and power which they might be able to use to exact their revenge upon the galaxy for their perceived defeat.
However, it seemed life always found a way to ruin certain plans of glory and triumph. And well, life would treat these Sith no differently. The migratory Taung arrived to Yesmireen and with them, they brought a new way of life. Initially, the two cohabitated peacefully on the planet, but this peace they held, was very brief. Fighting and all out war erupted between the two as each struggled to ascend to undisputed power over the over. Heavy losses would be dealt to both sides, leaving each species’ numbers on the planet dwindling. It’s not exactly known as to what drove the two species to be inevitably wiped from the planet, but as the Galactic Empire rose under Palpatine and the next wave immigrated to the planet, neither remained. Gone were the Taung and the Sith; their constructs and temples being the only proof of their existence there in the years before.
This new wave of arrivals brought more advanced technology to the planet and even began construction on cities that would cater to a more modern feel. They moved to map the planet and learn of their new home, its life and its resources. In their exploration, they discovered the remains of bygone civilizations and the font of power they heavily drained in their pursuits of greater knowledge and power. Molgeth had become significantly less than it had been, no longer teeming to the degree it had when the Sith had first taken to it. However Molgeth was not the only font in which they discovered. No. In fact, in one of the deep dives into the many caverns and caves that dug themselves all across the planet, the explorers and scientists came upon another bastion of power, this one as weak as its counterpart and likely why it had not been discovered before. So far from the surface, it would come as no surprise that there had been no trace of previous excavation or activity among its grounds. Serin lay untouched and untainted. A font of the Light Side of the Force.
This discovery opened a vast array of questions. Why was it here? What lead it so that this planet would possess two Force Nexuses? What effects would the two play in conjunction with one another?
As the many scientists dove into their research to try and answer these questions, they discovered a great number of things. For one, many would come to a conclusion that it was because of Molgeth and Serin that Yesmireen held such chaotic weather patterns. Storms that would seeming fabricate in clear skins and well out of the season that might seem appropriate for that weather to appear. It would even succumb to the periodic Force Storm that would ravage the surface of the planet below. Additionally, what has come to light in recent discovery is thus. Molgeth and Serin were not actually two completely separate Nexuses, but instead, one Nexus that found itself split. Long before any life found evolved on the planet, Yesmireen was chaotic and ever changing. A shifting blob of molten rock of massive sheets of ice. There were no rings. No moons or other satellites. What atmosphere did exist here was thin and acid, lacking any such revolution that might cater to life. It was simply violent and unlivable. What scientist discovered however, was something that had the potential to revolutionize their very way of analyzing the planet. Traces of elements not found anywhere inside their began to surface as excavation efforts penetrated deeper and deeper into the world's crust. Theories would arise that would lead them to a terrifying truth. Long before any life found a foothold. Long ago, it seems an astronomical object collided with the planet caused a great transformation in the system. Debris flung itself into the void around Yesmireen, but instead of escaping all together, was captured in the planet's gravitational pull encircling it the rocky rings it has today. Furthermore, the catastrophe changed, paved the way for life to eventually emerge on the surface.
Since this point, the planet has become what it is today. A fascist government built upon consumerism, but on the backs of this very prejudice society. A steady form of government did not come to present itself on the planet until after the events of the Gulag Plague. The current government actually came to be from the seizure of opportunity at the unfolding of the Netherworld event that saw so many vanish. Of which, many of those that did, were never again seen on Yesmireen's surface leaving the void of power that was seized by the currently philosophy of leadership.

Alien species here, in everything but name, were slaves to their human overlords.


These unfortunate misgivings and ill-intentions of the governance were not to be sustained. Not when the galactic superpower that was the Confederacy of Independent Systems moved closer and closer to spread an amicable justice throughout the galaxy at large and Yesmireen would prove to be no exception to that virtue. As the territory of Yesmireen fell into its embrace, the empirical and oppressive nature of the ruling class of Yesmireen would find itself challenged. And with an inspiring uplift of the many oppressed of the system, the fascistic Yesmiri governance soon found itself challenged. But with the Confederate backing given to the rebels of the world, the sitting rule stood little chance. In all but the blink of an eye, Yesmireen's whole stance, politically, was changed. Out were the days of oppression and disenfranchisement, paving way to liberty, justice and a freedom the world had not known since times well before technological advancement had ever reached its borders.

2 June 2020
  • Fixed links/formatting
7 March 2020
  • Added links to recently subbed species/resources
  • Adjusted formatting (coloring and art)
  • Edited population, government and economy, military and technology, and historical information based on changes made to planet.
  • Addressed various spelling/grammatical errors throughout submission.

 
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[member="Alden Akaran"] Hello! Sorry it's taken us so long to get to this, but let's get down to it. This is a very nice post altogether but there are some things we need to take care of.

1.

Alden Akaran said:
Alden Akaran said:
Just need to have Name directly after Planet and System to conform to the template. Just a required uniformity thing.

2.

Alden Akaran said:
Climate: Earth-like (varies based on region)
Earth-Like needs to be changed to Temperate. No Earth-specific references can be used to explain something, and Temperate is given as an alternative for climate.

3. The Force Nexus does NOT follow the template here. Even though you have links to Nexus that you have made in Submissions, you must follow the template for the planet as well with any and all information possible. You may combine the Nexus that you have made into this submission, but please follow the template as best you can.

4.

Alden Akaran said:
Native Species: Immerin
If you have a submission for this species, please link it. If you do not, you may come back later on and link it after you have made the species.

5. This is more of a suggestion, but could you please expand on the Military section so as to really cover what the planet's military is like. The phrase "heavily fortified" implies that there are specific defenses that are in place here and I would like to see what they are.

That's about it. Please take your time with these and get back to me so we can work on getting this approved.
 
[member="Lorale Farmar"], thanks for taking the time to review this, I know it's not exactly the simplest sub to look at.

I made the appropriate change to Climate as requested, however I would to ask for a couple bits of clarification if you would be so kind.



Lorale Farmar said:
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Alden Akaran, on 17 Nov 2019 - 09:36 AM, said:
Alden Akaran, on 17 Nov 2019 - 09:36 AM, said:
Alden Akaran said:
Just need to have Name directly after Planet and System to conform to the template. Just a required uniformity thing.
I'm not certain what is going on here; perhaps i am just looking at the template wrong or simply misinterpreting your request here. However, when I look at the template, I'm not seeing where you're referencing here. Planet and System appear to be listed whenever I open the post. I'm just confused as to what you're asking here is all. Thanks for any clarification you can offer.



Lorale Farmar said:
3. The Force Nexus does NOT follow the template here. Even though you have links to Nexus that you have made in Submissions, you must follow the template for the planet as well with any and all information possible. You may combine the Nexus that you have made into this submission, but please follow the template as best you can.
Before I really dive into this bit here, would you like me to just copy and paste from the approved sub(s) into here? And if so, would you like to have that placed into a spoiler to avoid the appearance of clutter?



Lorale Farmar said:
4.

Alden Akaran, on 17 Nov 2019 - 09:36 AM, said:
Native Species: Immerin
If you have a submission for this species, please link it. If you do not, you may come back later on and link it after you have made the species.
I've considered the idea of making a species sub for this species, and probably will in time, however I don't have anything ready to push for that at this moment. If it's okay, I'd rather leave this as is for now and come back and pull this sub for modifications when I have come around to creating an acceptable sub for this species

5. This is more of a suggestion, but could you please expand on the Military section so as to really cover what the planet's military is like. The phrase "heavily fortified" implies that there are specific defenses that are in place here and I would like to see what they are.
As far as this, I was hoping to keep it a little vague at the moment, as I have future plans to develop this planet and as such will submit sub mods as certain events occur.
 
[member="Alden Akaran"] Hello.

1. Sorry, it's a very weird thing. Basically you have Planet and System, but it needs to be Planet Name and System Name for complete uniformity to the template. That's literally all it is, sorry.

2. Unfortunately, I don't think that will pass by the higher ups. You will have to fill out the full template for Planet Creation 3.0's Nexus section. Since you have created subs for the Nexus on this planet, you can identify them in the template and what they both do and their strength and such, but you can't copy paste said subs.

3. You don't have to add the link to the species until you are ready to do so (i.e. when it's made and approved.)

4. Keeping it vague is fine if you plan on expanding it in future subs.
 
Actually, apologies. While it's okay keeping the Military section vague for future subs, we would still like to see maybe a basic indication of what's there like turbolasers and whatnot. Just for easier reference for everyone involved if this planet is used for said future subs are made.
 
[member="Lorale Farmar"],

Sorry about all the confusion, but I think that should be everything you pointed out. Thanks for all the assistance, I know this probably isn't the easiest sub in the world to work with. Please let me know if there is anything else
 
[member="Alden Akaran"] | [member="Lorale Farmar"]

Greetings,

Lovely submission, but, there are just a couple things to touch base on.

1.) Image Credit [Please sweep through your submission and make sure your images are properly credited. Here are some of them below.]

For the Header Image - You have it linked directly to the image itself, not where it came from. Please link this Deviant Artist.
For Dzis iw Witsiza - You don't seem to have credit for that at all. Please link to this Art Station page.
For Midwan - You don't seem to have credit for that at all. Please link to this Art Station page.
For Wiri - You don't seem to have credit for that at all. Please link to this Art Station page.
For Galacot City - You don't seem to have credit for that at all. Please link to this Art Station page.

Alternatively - If all of these images belong to Drock Nicotine you may simply credit his page.

2.) Affiliation: Independent - If this planet holds loyalty to themselves please be sure to add Yesmireen.

Otherwise - This is good to go. Tag me when the edits are made. Nice work!
 
[member="Srina Talon"],

That should be all the corrections you requested. I just changed out image links for the Actual subs on all but "Dzis iw Witsiza" as there is no location sub individually made for that Point of Interest

[member="Lorale Farmar"]
 
Submission Name: Yemireen

Link:
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: To finish broken links/Formatting
Please include a list of changes and tag a member of Codex Staff when ready.
 
I will be numbering my queries to make it easier to read.


1. In Out-of-Character Information, you need to add and fill out the Permission field. It comes above Links. If you have nothing to link there, just put N/A.
  • Permissions: [Please link any Marketplace purchase or similar approvals to use other Writers’ content as part of this submission.]
2.

Image Credit: Here || ArtStation | Drock Nicotine

Need a source link for the pic. You linked an Artstation page, but I can't find the ring pic there.

This seems to be the correct source link: https://www.deviantart.com/tobiasroetsch/art/The-Ring-55789457


3.

  • Serin- Former Light Side Nexus
This link in Planetary Features is broken. Also you say in the Serin submission, as well as further down in the Force Nexus section, that it is a light side nexus. So why is it called a 'former light side nexus' here?

4.
Native Species:
  • Immerin
  • Yesmirin (extinct)
Do the Immerin have a species sub?

5.
Government: Facism | Martial Rule
Affiliation: Yesmireen
Wealth: High
Stability: High
Freedom & Oppression: Oppressed and commerce heavy. Standard body of law, but favors the human and near-human population. Repercussions against infringements of the law are not equal between species, with humans and near-humans typically receiving less severe punishments.

I think you mean martial law when you say martial rule?

Also, while no one expects a political essay, could you please elaborate a bit on how the place is ruled? Fascism is an incredibly broad term...to a point where even academics can't agree on what constitutes a fascist ideology (as you can see here) and in popular discourse it's often applied to any vaguely right-wing, authoritarian government.

Like, is it a one-party state governed by a fascist party run by an absolute leader with a personality cult like Hitler's Germany? A right-wing military dictatorship with human supremacist beliefs? Or does big business pull the strings and just use the fascist movement as a front? Are aliens kept in ghettos/enslaved? Even Nazi Germany and Fascist Italy differed quite significantly even though both were fascist and the former was inspired by the latter (for one, Mussolini still had to put up with Italy having a King, while Hitler had no one above him from 1934 on).

You could also use this to expand on Culture a bit (like does the government leave common people alone provided they do not demand political rights, equality or similar or does it actively try to impose racial segregation, bombard people with propaganda and indoctrinate people from childhood? Do near-humans have to 'prove' that they are 'human' enough?).

Also please add some elaboration to Wealth and Stability. What causes the wealth? Does it essentially live off its resources such as Beskar by trading them with outside parties willing to ignore its sentient rights violations for business reasons (as so often happens in real life) ?And how is the wealth distributed?
  • Wealth: [ Poor, Low, Medium, High, Wealthy. Describe, briefly, why. ]
  • Stability: [ Low, Medium, High. Are there major issues causing unrest? Is this a planet of chaos or one of peaceful law-abiding citizens? Is it dangerous for travellers to visit or are you safe as an outsider? Describe the general feel and theme of any overarching government or rulers/leaders in this city. ]
6.

Also could you expand on History a bit? Right now it is rather ambiguous how the present government came to power. And how - if at all - was the planet affected by galactic events such as the Gulag Plague and the Netherworld Event?

Luca Donskoi Luca Donskoi
 
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Elpsis Kerrigan Elpsis Kerrigan

I think that should do it. Sorry, I didn't exactly touch anything content wise from the last approval (simply tried to fix broken links and formatting, which even then i seemed to miss one) haha. But I tried to elaborate where you asked and added the Permissions section as well.

Regarding the "Immerin" species link, I do not have a sub in for them currently. I do plan to in time, and will request sub mod here when that happens, but I was told it was okay to not have a link for them for now.
 
Luca Donskoi Luca Donskoi

Thank you for clarifying. There's just one point from my initial review that requires a response.

  • Serin- Former Light Side Nexus
Why is it a 'former' one?

You explicitly say it has a light side alignment in both the Force Nexus section and in the location submission itself. A nexus that used to be lightside but is not anymore would now be neutral or dark. And it is evidently still a nexus.
 
Elpsis Kerrigan Elpsis Kerrigan

Thanks for that. I'm not going to lie there, that was just a miswording that i forgot to remove from my original concept of the planet. As this was a planet i spent quite a bit of time on to make so naturally the idea shifted and changed over that time before I finally submitted it here. Sorry about that, but thanks a lot for all the help; it's definitely greatly appreciated.

I took out "Former" so I hope that fixes things
 
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