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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: Akhuul Sautra
  • Affiliation: Faction-Sith Order (independent warlord, Akhuul Sautra)
  • Market Status: Closed-Market
  • Model: N/A
  • Production: Unique
  • Material: Derumium
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: Mobile Capital [Space Station] (Military)-has hangarbays to dock spacecraft belonging to Derumic Androids, housing for Derumic Androids, and acts as the refuge and home of the ancient Sith Lord Akhuul Sautra. Functions as a mixture of a giant carrier and capital ship.
  • Length: Diameter of 60,000 meters
  • Width: Diamter of 60,000 meters
  • Height: Radius of 30,000 meters
  • Armament: Average
  • Defenses: Extreme
  • Hangar Space: Extreme: 11
  • Hangar Allocations:
  • Maneuverability Rating: Very Low
  • Speed Rating: Very Low
  • Hyperdrive: World Engine
STANDARD FEATURES
ADVANCED SYSTEMS
  • Derusphere Shield-shield system
  • Specter Repulsor Engines-used to make adjustments of position when in real-space
  • World Engine-hyperdrive system and power core
  • Thrones of Sautra Vokh-manually operated security system, network access for highest ranking Derumic Androids, and resting points for Lords and Akhuul
  • Crypt Barracks-storage for lower ranking Derumic Androids not required to be patrolling the station or guarding chambers.
  • Laboratories of Sautra Vokh-chambers within the station that are the workspaces for the Derumic Android Scribes and their respective Slaves where they perform their duties of archiving information into the Sautra Vokh databases, maintain everything on the station, and occaisionally conduct experiments with spare scraps of Derumium in the realm of Sith Alchemy.
  • Armories of Sautra Vokh-storage for any Derumium-based weaponry on Sautra Vokh within chambers across the inner portions of the station that is not in current use from active Derumic Androids.
  • Sautra Vokh Archives Gallery-the area of concrete display for anything in the Sautra Vokh Archives. While the archives are actually digital, the gallery chamber is home to terminals where one can access the archives, as well as display cases for any relics collected. In current times (as of this post) the only artifacts would be personal ones from Akhuul's ancient estate, yet room can be made to house other artifacts collected in his travels to preserve Sith history.
  • Lords' Sanctums-these chambers stationed near the "polar" regions of the station (North, South, East, and West) function as places of residence for the Derumic Android Lords, yet have the appearance of a mixture of throne rooms and shrines.
  • Akhuul's Sanctum-the personal chamber of Akhuul Sautra himself on this station that functions as his place of residence, located more "North" on top of the central portions of the station. Looks more like a throne room and shrine to Akhuul.
STRENGTHS
  • House of Sautra- this is the station that took on the name of the planet that Akhuul Sautra built his estate on, and moved all his assets to. Every ship, Derumic Android, and every bit of Derumium based technology is housed and utilized on this station.
  • Laborynthine Layout- the interior is designed with the same prescise complexity of the ancient Sith tombs with various passages, chambers, and secret corridors making it very difficult for invaders to navigate quickly and easier for the Derumic Androids to defend.
  • Derusphere Shield- this station is equipped with the large field variant of Derusphere shield technology allowing for much damage to be deflected.
  • Storage- the station is designed to carry all of Akhuul's ships, including the larger command vessels.
    • Fighters and Shuttles go to the regular hangars while the Venerable-Class Command Cruiser and the Reaver-Class Corvettes integrate with the structure when docked.
    • Its primary defense is having the carried vessels conduct combat while the station remains in the background of the battle.
  • Material Benefits: the station, and all technology stored on it, is made out of Derumium, making all benefits of the material apply to the structure of the space station and all technology equipped by it.
    • The structure of the station is capable of withstanding great amounts of damage.
    • Derumium can be repaired using Sith Alchemy, and much concentration from a given force user, allowing any portion sustaining relatively light-to-average damage to be mended back into a prestine condition.
  • Protective Batteries- in order to defend the station from attackers and environmental hazards that manage to get through the shield, the station is equipped with batteries of Derumic Cannons as a last resort defense.
  • Quiet- as very large space stations go, it is very stealthy due to the quiet engines it uses to adjust its course, as well as the technology of the Derumic Androids hardly producing much noise in the void of space.
    • The station is extremely hard to detect using auditory detectors.
WEAKNESSES
  • Extremely Irreplaceable- as the largest feat of engineering out of Derumium, this station can not be replicated with how little Derumium remains if it is destroyed beyond repair.
  • Very Cumbersome- due to its size, the station moves very slowly and is not very maneuverable.
    • The Specter Repulsor Engines equipped are used for slight adjustments in its course but are useless for making elaborate maneuvers.
  • BIG Target- the station is massive, making it hard to hide and easy to hit.
  • Important Target- if this station gets destroyed, all Derumic Androids are likely to become neutralized or left to the mercy of a given enemy.
    • Usually the higher ranking androids stay aboard, and thus would likely get destroyed with the station if the station is destroyed.
  • Integrated Vulnerability- the larger ships that are integrated into the structure of the station when not in use would be prone to being destroyed with the station.
    • While the ships are either disconnecting or reconnecting with the station, both station and ships are extremely vulnerable.
  • Too Effective Shields- due to the nature of Derusphere Shields, whenever the Derumic Cannon batteries have to fire at threats outside of the shield barrier, that area of shield will have to go down for the volley.
    • For when threats are within the shield, if the batteries miss, they may hit the shield with the bolts reflecting back.
  • Technologically Stagant- while the Derumium-based technology and structure of the station is capable of standing up to many threats of the modern galaxy (times as of this post), it is no longer considered as advanced as it was when it was first constructed.
    • Improvements to the station are almost completely impossible without arduous research and effort.
    • While the rest of the galaxy advances in technology, Sautra Vokh and all the technology found on it, will remain the same as it has always been.
DESCRIPTION
In the times before the Great Hyperspace War, an ancient Sith Lord named Akhuul Sautra, discovered a material he had called Derumium on a remote planet he claimed for his estate called Sautra Vokh. Over the years, the planet of Sautra Vokh was strip-mined of all the Derumium, rendering it uninhabitable for most organic lifeforms. Akhuul's estate constructed weapons, starships, various technological gadgets and systems, and the Derumic Androids, from the unique metal. However, the crowning achievement of all these innovations was a space station the size of a small moon designed to carry his fleet in the case of retreat from Sith Space, and to act as the seat of his power. He then gave it the name of the planet he was ruling, Sautra Vokh.

As the seat of power for the ancient Sith Lord, Sautra Vokh is home to various chambers that are all for the purpose of supporting Akhuul's powerbase. At the core of the station is the World Engine, the station's hyperdrive and power core that has kept it hidden for the thousands of years after the Great Hyperspace War. In circles around the core, in the middle layer, are Crypt Barracks halls where the unneeded Derumic Android Soldiers, Slaves, and Officers are housed until the time to be used. The laboratories and archives of the Scribes proliferate the inner chambers with hidden passageways linking them outside of the main corridors. Numorous armories store the weapons used by the Derumic Androids that are not awakened are scattered around the middle layers of the station with the more powerful stored weapons being located more inwards. Finally, there are the sanctums of the Derumic Android Lords and of Akhuul Sautra himself. These are located near the outer layers for the Lords to create a protective barrier of their presence. Meanwhile, Akhuul's sanctum is located near the core of Sautra Vokh for the security of the highest ranking Derumic Android. These sanctums are closer to throne rooms than living quarters with private meditation chambers for the Lords and Akhuul to continue to channel their hatred and hold onto the remnants of their forcepower as strongly as possible. These sanctums are also shrine-like for the given Lord they are designated to with various glyphs on the walls like tapestries detailing the histories of the sanctum's Lord, while also displaying any prescious items that may belong to said Lord.

Normally, this station is well hidden along the edges of the galaxy where not much happens and the presence of the station is either ignored or passed off as a ghost story by any spacers that escape witnessing it. Whenever fround, the Derusphere shield equipped to deflect potential attacks and environmental hazards in the void, appears almost like a crimson atmosphere.The dark Derumium makes the station appear shadow-like wherever it goes, yet the red glow from the inner portions of the station break through the dark shell like cracks. Squadrons of Crescent Fighters would patrol around the area wherever this station is deployed to provide farther reaching protection than the batteries of Derumic Cannons that function like defense turrets for the station. However, aside from the shield and batteries, the most effective defense of the station is the layout of the interior. The various hallways, corridors, and passages, linking the chambers and sanctums together are constructed in a labyrinthine manner making it hard for any invaders to navigate the station in a timely manner. Meanwhile, the Derumic Androids who have patrolled and inhabited this station for over thousands of years are able to naviagate the corridors with ease. The layout is as methodical and labyrinthine as the ancient Sith tombs on Korriban, yet cold and metallic.
 
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Ravenfire

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Hi there, I am going to be your judge for this submission.

1. Is this a station?
- Looking over this I see several points that mention that it is a space station, could you please clarify that throughout the sub so there is less confusion for anyone what this is as it is well into SSD territory in terms of ships. But I am aware that unique military stations made with a major faction technically have a unlimited sizing. Also make sure you list the faction as part of the manufactures, just to dot the i's and cross the t's as it were.

2. Ships attached to Hardpoints?
- So you mention in the hanger section of this submission, that there can be 5 larger ships attached to hard points of the station. Given the sizing's of them (as I found them in your primary sources) They should be fine but if you could just add them as separate links to the hanger fields and do the same for your fighters and dropships in their respective fields that would be great. Also up your hanger spacing to 14 in order to make the numbers all look right.
Eg:
Starfighters: 5 squadrons of (link here)
Support Craft: 4 squadrons of (link here)
Integrated Ships: 5 ships of (Link here) and (Link here) or even 3 ships of (Link here) and 2 ships of (Link here)

3. More Advanced Systems?
- You mention labs, armouries, archives and even a sanctum existing on this submission but they are all hidden in your description. Would you kindly just add them as well to your advanced systems so they are clear and easy to find for everyone.

4. Low Armament, Extreme damage?
- The submission you have listed as your cannons has the ability within them to as it is worded there, Shoots massive beams of energy at the target capable of annihilating organic targets almost entirely depending on the size of a target while greatly searing mechanical targets. This does not read as a low Armament worth rating. I would ask you to increase the rating to at least average or higher.

5. Balance?
- This submission is not balanced.
Unique -4
Low -1
Extreme +3
Extreme +3
Very Low -2
Very Low -2
All in all it is 3 ratings under balance, so to further the point of 4, I would raise your armament rating to average or higher.

6. Image?
So I took a look around for the image displayed on the reddit and I found that it came from Battlefleet Gothic: Armada 2 so if you would list that as the credit, either to its steam page or to here x that would be great. Also within that you only need to list the person who made the edit for you once.
 
Ravenfire Ravenfire

It is a station, I will do more to indicate that. I wrote in a few spots that it is a station, but will add more references to that where relevant.

I shall make the respective adjustment to hangar. Glad to know the balancing is good and is only in need of cleanup with presentation.

I can link those in the Advanced Systems section as you asked. I didn't know if that would have been appropriate due to them being codex subs.

I meant to write that as there aren't many equipped on the station compared to other military stations like it. I can make that more clear, or I can adjust that rating. Looking at the next edit, it seems as it would be best to increase the rating as you suggested.

That must have been a miscalculation on my part when I first started this. I will definitely take your suggestion.

I can do that for the image credit section.

Thank you for the notes. I will be sure to get to it as soon as I can, and will inform you when the adjustments are made.
 
Ravenfire Ravenfire

I have now made those edits you requested. Let me know if there is more, or better ways to impliment them. There are now more mentions of it being a station rather than a war ship. I added the chambers mentioned into the advanced systems section. I reorganized the hangar space section. I then also adjusted the balance according to your suggestion.

Again, let me know if there are any more adjustments you find necessary.

Thank you.
 

Ravenfire

King of Pumpkins
Moderator
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Looks good to me now. Just a quick thing as I'm approving this, if you start using any ships on the hard points for this space station that are bigger in size than the ones listed currently you might get pulled for a re-evaluation. Still a very cool concept so, Enjoy.

Approved.
 
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