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Planet Review Caradim

ᴡᴀʀ'ꜱ ᴄᴜꜱᴛᴏᴅɪᴀɴ
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To detail one of the first planets even taken by the Bryn'adûl.
  • Image Credit: X
  • Canon: N/A
  • Permissions: N.A
  • Links: [Embedded Throughout]
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Caradim
  • Demonym: Draelvasier
  • Region: Wild Space
  • System Features: Three Moons: Prag, Krag and Drak.
  • Location: Caradim Hex
  • Major Imports: Weaponry, Metals, Military infantry
  • Major Exports: Drones, Verikast Metal, Malabast
  • Unexploited Resources: Lithium, Tungsten, Dioxide
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: 2x Standard
  • Climate: Super-heated desert climate
  • Primary Terrain: Volcanic/deserts
  • Atmosphere: Type II
LOCATION INFORMATION
  • Capital City: Diracka
  • Planetary Features:
- Volcanic Range: Across the second largest continent on Caradim, in the west of Caradim is a massive range of volcanoes stretching for miles. These volcanoes are also home to indigenous creatures used by the Bryn'adûl to syphon the energy of the continental volcanic activity, powering all the Bryn'adûl facilities on the planet.
  • Major Locations:
- Diracka: Diracka is the name given to the primary Bryn'adûl Super-Construct located on Caradim. This Super Construct took on the name of the large 18.3 million kilometre continent, as within recent months it has encompassed nearly the entirety of it. Accounting for nearly five times the amount of facilities and defences as a standard Super Construct. This place is home to billions.
- Kada-Sael: Kada-Sael is the secondary Super-Construct located on Caradim, a standard facility stretching over nearly fifty percent of the continent.
- Islands: The rest of the planet is dotted by islands, uninhabited by the Bryn'adûl and left to the devices of the various fauna on the planet.

POPULATION
  • Native Species: Extint
  • Immigrated Species: Draelvasier
  • Population: Heavy
  • Demographics: 100% Draelvasier
  • Primary Languages: Draelvasier
  • Culture: Draelvasier Culture, Meritocratic, Militant and Occult.
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: The Bryn'adûl - An occult and meritocratic militant governing body lead by the Ish'makra Council & the Chieftain of the Bryn'adûl.
  • Affiliation: The Bryn'adûl
  • Wealth: N/A - Wealth or Material value is not a concept shared in Bryn'adûl Society
  • Stability: High
  • Freedom & Oppression: This in truth is down to perspective, to those outside of the Draelvasier might see their lives as imprisonment. However to Draelvasier they see their regimented and purposeful lives as true freedom from the weaknesses of fleeting existence.
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: This world is home to a Military Super-Construct located on its sole piece of terrain, essentially it is a fortress world.
  • Technology: Advanced/Bio-tech, force based technology of Drael origin.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION :
Caradim was once home to six billion people, an outskirt world that acted as a smugglers hideout and a massive goods and supplies transportation station, the planets major cities were once massive space-ports that held orbital ports, tethered by sky-hooked space elevators. Caradim was also home-base for initial resistance groups that bombed Draemidus Prime after the Bryn'adûl originally returned to known space. Caradim and all her people, everything they ever built were eviscerated from the face of the planet.

The world has been under Bryn control for many years, terraformed into one of their primary core worlds.
 
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Zeradias Mant

Democracy Dies in Darkness
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[member="The Matador"]

GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Corpses are a highly unusual thing to import or export. Please elaborate as to the reason for this somewhere in the sub.
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • 'Standard' is not an appropriate description for climate. Per the template, "Temperate is Earth-like. Make notes of anything substantially different yet similar to Temperate. Add Controlled for when most of the climate is controlled by technology. Use words such as Arid or Frozen to describe single biome worlds."
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • You mention 'Erebor', but I have no idea what that is. Please add a link or explain somewhere in the sub.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
  • Please make sure the following questions are answered: How was the planet discovered? How was planet settled? When was it settled? Why was it settled? What major events specific to the planet helped shape its inhabitants to what they are today?
  • Please explain the absence of any native species as it appears to be quite a bountiful planet.
 
ᴡᴀʀ'ꜱ ᴄᴜꜱᴛᴏᴅɪᴀɴ
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[member="Zeradias Mant"]
Use of corpses elaborated upon in military, explaining their use in necromancy by other planets under the rule of the ancient eye.

Geographical information updated.

Edited the history, let me know if that's acceptable.
 

Zeradias Mant

Democracy Dies in Darkness
Writer
[member="The Matador"]

It talks about exporting bodies but says nothing about why they would be imported. On that note though, please touch on the role of 'undead' soldiers and necromancy in the Ancient Eye's military. Are they the main force of their fighting force, supplementary, etc etc.

The sub should not have any real world references, including mention of Earth. Gravity is okay as Standard. Climate should be something like Temperate or Frozen if its a single biome, or if there's multiple, list them.

Who were these Jedi? Did they rule from Nibelungen or Caradim? Where did the Ancient Eye come from? What was the transition of power like? Was it a swift military defeat, was there a surrender, etc etc. How are independent and oppressed people content with their situation with low standards of living, average technology, and what sounds like conscription? What kind of oppression are they subject to? Are there pockets of resistance that have risen from time to time? You speak of warlords and priests, here's a good place to explain that further. The planet is thousands of years old, spare no detail!
 
ᴡᴀʀ'ꜱ ᴄᴜꜱᴛᴏᴅɪᴀɴ
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[member="Zeradias Mant"]

Made some edits. Including changing it from imports to exports, as they export bodies from the arenas.
Edits regarding the bodies, and the use of undead.
Also made some edits in the history.
Been busy today, let me know if you need more information or further elaboration.-
 
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