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Submission Name: Leonina Varkathras
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Additions to Possesions and Historical Information. Edit in Skills.
Reason for Modification: Update character a bit.
Modification:


In Role, change this:

  • Role: Order of Fire equivalent of a Jedi Guardian, swordmistress, instructor.

to this:

  • Role: Order of Fire equivalent of a Jedi Guardian, swordmistress, instructor. 2IC of the Order.


In Notable Possessions add:

Leonina possesses a suit of Centurion Battle Armour. She owns a crossguard lightsabre with a dual phase mode, bifurcating cyclical ignition and other standard lightsabre systems.


In Skills, change:

this:
  • Force Sense

to this:
  • Battlemind

change this:
  • Breath Control

to this:
  • Force Resistance

In Personality add:


As is common among members of the Order of Fire, Leonina has both an Order rank and a military rank. As an officer she is serious and rather by the book, but not a martinet. She values initiative and quick thinking, but expects discipline. Gloryhounds, cowards and blood knights get short shrift from her. The same applies to sadistic and cruel beings. The Cathar does not glorify war, but views it as necessary to avert greater evil. However, she regards those who use it to commit atrocities as abhorrent. She realises that innocents die in war, but draws a distinction between collateral damage that is an unfortunate byproduct of war and willfully massacring civilians and the like. This is connected to her experiences during the Republic-One Sith War.


While Leonina has drifted from Jedi orthodoxy and now espouses views that are closer to Potentium or certain Grey Jedi beliefs, she still stays away from the darker aspects of the Force. She regards the Dark Side as something that is more internal, rather than being some of kind of demon that pounces on naughty Force-users. But this does not mean that darkness does not exist. Her views can cause friction with the more darksided members of the Order. However, Leonina is not preachey or a missionary, she simply expects her subordinates to comport themselves as professional soldiers and disciplines those who do not. She stresses personal responsibility on all levels. Leonina is a soldier, so she will kill in battle. However, she kills in hot blood, not in cold blood.


In Historical Information add:


Leonina has risen through the ranks of the Order of Fire and Firemane to become an officer with the rank of Colonel. This makes her one of the Order's most senior officers, right after Siobhan Kerrigan herself. She supervises many of the day-to-day affairs of the Order and is one of its most visible leaders. While she does not possess the raw power of some other Mistresses of the Order, she is a constant, steady and level-headed presence. She works long hours and has a good eye for detail. Her new role has also broadened her horizons, enabling her to develop her skills as a commander.


Siobhan trusts her, regarding her as loyal and competent. While being a senior officer means that Leonina spends more time behind a desk than she would like, she commands field operations in person whenever practical. Although she has adjusted to military life and does not wish to return to the Jedi, she remains in contact with her friend Phylis. Recently, she led the Order of Fire contingent during Firemane's expedition to the lost planet of Tephrike.
 
Submission Name: Tecuanimeh
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Update Equipment and Strengths/Weaknesses.
Reason for Modification: Got new stuff. Reassessed unit a bit.
Modification:


In Equipment, add:


In Strengths and Weaknesses, change this:

  • Composed of Force-sensitive Xioquo. The Tecuanimeh focus on Cryomancy, Force Concealment, Telekinesis, Force Flash and in using the Force to generate regular darkness, providing concealment. Their members are Apprentices or Knights.

to this:

  • Composed of Force-sensitive Xioquo. The Tecuanimeh focus on Cryomancy, Force Concealment, Telekinesis, Force Flash and Force Cloak. Moreover, they can use the Force to generate regular darkness to conceal themselves. Their members are experienced Knights. However, they are trained for stealth, subversion and assassination, not frontline combat. They also do not carry lightsabres and lack strong defensive abilities.
 
Submission Name: Red Fang
Reason for Modification: Recent look into gear has revealed Omnibreakers are now denied I wish to remove them to protect my unit. Also changing of allegiance means the users of this unit have changed.
Modification: Removal of Omnibreakers and replace with Beskad for each member. Change Affiliation to Aedan Miles and Yasha Cadera.

Submission Name: Clan Akaata Militia
Reason for Modification: Change of allegiance means change of who can make use of this unit.
Modification: Change Affiliation to Aedan Miles and Yasha Cadera.
 
[member="Siobhan Kerrigan"] Updated, however, I wanted to confirm that the sections on "Personality" and "History" were simply to be added to the existing content. I added both pieces to the end of each part. Please let me know if this is not correct and I'll adjust it accordingly as soon as possible.

[member="Karrigan'Xalda"] Updated.

[member="Aedan Miles"] Updated
 
Submission Name: Alexia Zarides
Link to Submission: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/123054-alexia-zarides/
Summary of Modification: Move to pre-Codex.
Reason for Modification: A lot of time has passed since the character was submitted. I would like to overhaul the submission to reflect IC development. This includes promoting the character to Knight, updating backstory and abilities. Thus it is best for me to make the edits myself rather than making a long list, and for the submission to be judged anew.
Modification:

Move to pre-Codex
 
​Submission Name: ​The Draelvasier
​Link to Submission: X
​Summary of Modification: ​Adding a image to the submission. below the name title and before the details as shown below.
Reason for Modification: ​I like the image as a general presentation of the species.
Modification:

The Draelvasier
yefim-kligerman-darkelffacesketch-yk-001.jpg

[Source: Dark Elves by Yefim Kligerman - Artstation]

Image Credit: X
 
Submission Name: ​Praedilacyt Wyrm
​Link to Submission: ​X
​Summary of Modification: ​I just noticed I had them at the wrong size. Wish to enlarge them to the preconceived height.
Reason for Modification: ​I wish to change the length and height.
Modification:

Average height of adults: 40m
Average length of adults: 200m
 
Submission Name: Caerith Stradon
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Update Equipment. Edits in Strengths and Weaknesses.
Reason for Modification: Got new stuff. Reassessed unit a bit, as they are intended to be a single unit of specialists.

Modification:


In Strengths & Weaknesses change this:

The Caerith Stradon are a unit composed of Force-Sensitive Eldorai of Knight or Apprentice level.


To this:

The Caerith Stradon are a unit composed of Force-Sensitive Eldorai with the skill levels of experienced Knights. Their skills lie in surprise, assassination and infiltration, but not in frontal assaults or brute force.


In Equipment, change this:

  • Reflec coated Duraplast armour.
to this:


In Equipment, add:


In Equipment, change this:


to this:

 
Submission Name: Geister
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Updates in Availability and Description.
Reason for Modification: Updating unit a bit. The unit has been utilised and developed in a number of rps, such as here, here and here. Thus a small upgrade seems in order.

Modification:


In Availability, change this:
  • Availability: Unique. The unit only has a dozen members. Ten are Acolytes, two are knights.

to this:

  • Availability: Unique. The unit only has a dozen members. All are experienced Knights.

In Equipment, add:


In Description, (second-last paragraph), change this:

The power level of the Geister ranges from Apprentice to low level Knight.


To this:

The power level of the Geister is that of experienced Knights.
 
Submission Name: Truthseekers
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Move to Pre-Codex
Reason for Modification: Reworking submission. The Truthseekers are investigators, not actual combatants, so I intend to adapt the submission to the NPC Group Template, as it is a better fit than the combat unit one.

Modification:

Move submission to Pre-Codex.
 
Submission Name: Order of Fire Silencers.
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Edits in Deployment, Strengths and Weaknesses. Equipment update.
Reason for Modification: Updating unit a bit. Reassessed unit a bit, as they are intended to be a single unit of specialists. IC rationale for expansion is that fo
llowing actions on Tephrike against many Force using enemies, Firemane recognised the utility of the Silencers and expanded their numbers, partly using new assets from the Eldorai and others living on the Ark ships."

Modification:

In Equipment, add:

In Deployment, replace this:

  • Deployment: Limited

with this:

  • Deployment: Minor


In Strengths & Weaknesses, add:


With this:

Their skill at Force Concealment also allows them to conceal their Force presence.
 
Submission Name: Darth Libertas
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Edits in Possessions, Skills, Personality and History.
Reason for Modification: Updating character.

Modification:


In Notable Possessions, add:

In Skills, add:

  • Crucitorn

In Personality, add:


Libertas' best minions are commanded by a fellow Twi'lek called Koanai Pann. She grew up in the same village as her master, was enslaved, but managed to break her chains. Unlike her master, she is a Non-Force-User. Libertas took a liking to her, especially after a Sith tried to kill the Twi'lek for 'getting uppity' but Koanai managed to turn the tables on them. Thereupon Libertas ordered her to terminate the Sith.


In History, add:


As part of her efforts to expand the Breakers of Chains, Libertas acquired a Mon Calamari called Nur Jahan as an apprentice. The young fish had been a slave, then part of an apocalyptic cult before realising that its leaders were frauds. Libertas sought to mould her into what she considered to be a true Sith, using her as an assassin. Nur Jahan proved herself by playing a leading role in overthrowing the corporate rulers of a remote colony.


As part of her partnership with Enyo, Libertas led an Iron Fist Consortium mission to infiltrate and eliminate a secret Archangel base. In the process, she made the acquaintance of Amara Zarides, one of Enyo's clone siblings, and Maris Fero, a young but dangerous ganger from Vorzyd who Enyo had taken under her wing. Libertas saw the potential that Maris could make a good Sith. Amara was uncomfortable around her because her template, Kaelin Isandros, had been a sadistic Sith. Ironically, Libertas had known Kaelin during their time in the service of the old Sith Empire and considered her a failure.


The mission was very dangerous, and it was revealed that Archangel was working on advanced war machines. This was proved correct when Archangel assaulted Enyo's group with its new designs, having entered into an alliance with the remnants of the Contingency. These wanted revenge on Enyo for betraying them. The losses sustained forced Enyo to enter into an alliance of convenience with Eldorai exiles, who had been targeted by Archangel as well. Libertas was part of the final battle when Archangel's old régime was overthrown.
 
Submission Name: Quas'Ziru
Link to Submission: Here
Summary of Modification: Edits in Skills and Combat Function.
Reason for Modification: Updating character. Swapping a power because I apparently mistook it for a different one.

Modification:


In Skills, add:

  • Summon Fear

In Skills, replace:

  • Crucitorn

with:

  • Control Pain


In Combat Function, add:

Ziru is skilled in the use Summon Fear. This is a very powerful ability, but also extremely complex and takes time to occur, requiring focus and concentration on her part. Thus she cannot use cast the spell on a whim without being able to devote full focus to it.
 
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