Good Morning
Ben Craig
I have looked through the submission and have a few points I would like to raise with you before we can go forward with it.
Image Credit
The current link provided takes us to an image, but not to the original source of the image. I've looked around the internet for you and have found the original creator of the image
here. Please update the link.
Affiliation
I noticed that you have listed both yourself and The Directorate as having affiliation over this fleet, however according to the factory rules, in particular the starships table which I have linked below, this submission can't have a personal affiliation.
As you can see an individual is unable to have a fleet at all and as such I'll have to ask you to remove the link to yourself from this submission. While the fleet might be for your use, it is a Directorate Fleet and not a personal one for yourself.
Fleet Symbol
While you have provided a colour scheme for your fleet, that is not the only thing requested by the template here. I have quoted the relevant section of hte template below.
Please include either an image or a description of what the fleet sigil or logo looks like here as well. If you are providing an image then please remember to credit the image correctly.
Headquarters
Please provide a link to the wookiepedia page for Jakku which can be found
here.
Reputation
I'm going to expand on this section a little bit, what you've provided in essence is a description of the fleet, however this is not what the template asks for. I have quoted the relevant text below.
What do the members of the Directorate think of this fleet? How do the crews onboard the ships see it? I notice you said that the Directorate's enemies are unaware of it, however later on in the submission you state:
Placing a major fleet in orbit of a planet and having it patrol the surrounding areas would mean that it's presence would be difficult to hide from both the enemies of the directorate and any third parties who might spot it and spread rumours about it, or tell Republic or Grayson Imperium officials. As such, it might make more sense for you to take out the part about the fleet's existence currently being unknown to the Directorate's enemies.
Lead Ship
I'm afraid that you can't use the Princeps as part of this fleet as it currently stands, there are two reasons for this which I will go through with you here.
1) Size
If we refer back to the factory's table of ships, which I have included below again, you will see that a Company or a Minor Faction is able to field combat ships of 3km which have limited production and unique ships of 5km. The Princeps is a Semi-Unique ship, and therefore it will be judged by the closest category, which in this case is limited. That imposes a size limit on the ship of 3km, however, the Princeps is 4,750m long, which makes it too larger to be used in this fleet submission.
2) Permissions
While I have reviewed the permissions you have provided it does not appear that the permissions provided allow for the use of the current Princeps sub.
I have included a screenshot from the auction page above. As you can see, the bid for the actual ship was rejected, instead, Maracel Yorkell II's company, Yorkel Industries was provided with a licence to produce the ship itself. This does not mean that you are able to use the original submission, but isntead must submit a new submission under the new company. It must be noted here that this may not be a copy and paste of the original submission, while it may be based on the original submission the submission must be your own, the original princeps should be provided in the links and the auction thread should be provided as a permission.
Composition
This fleet is also too large. According to current Chaos rules only a major faction may have a large fleet and the fleet you're fielding here is pushing on towards that. I have quoted the relevant section from the
rules on Major Factions below:
Currently, your fleet consists of the following:
Pellaeon III Class Star Destroyer: 1500m x 7 = 10,500m
Compellor Class Star Cruiser: 850m x 8 = 6,800m
Tyrant II Class Cruiser: 900m x 4 = 3,600m
Impellor Class II Carrier Cruiser: 1000m x 4 = 4000m
For a total meterage of 24,900m
As you can see this is a larger fleet than that which some major factions field. Therefore I'd recommend you scale down the size of your fleet, and mark it as a large one.
Also, please remember as per the template:
Members
Please could you provide a link to your character profile here.
Please look through the points above and tag me back when you have made the necessary changes to the submission.