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Approved Planet Atrisia V (Rei'izu) (canon)

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To flesh out the Atrisi system
  • Image Credit: N/A
  • Canon: Rei'izu
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: N/A
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Atrisia V (Rei'izu)
  • Demonym: Atrisian
  • Region: Core World
  • System Name: Atrisian System
  • System Features: The Atrisian System is a 9 planet solar system organized around a single star (Atrisi). Inner planets are terrestrial in composition, with the outer planets being gas giants and ice giants. Atrisia V is the fifth planet and furthest from the sun in the system. With 4 moons that are being terraformed as part of the Jishi era's restructuring of the entire system. With many of the initiatives the planet and its moons have an Anshin class sphere that is used for living population and organization as well as defensive measures. The mega structure can develop and serve as a tertiary shipyard or manufacturing hub.
  • Location: Chaos Map
  • Major Imports: Citizens: Encouraging its people to settle and colonize the world.
  • Major Exports:
  • Unexploited Resources:
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: Twice Standard
  • Climate: Cooler weather with strong winds that move through canyons and can knock fighters and some ships around.
  • Primary Terrain: Mountains, and canyons with stone and rope bridges over massive chasms of mist.
  • Atmosphere: Type I
LOCATION INFORMATION
  • Capital City: Yojou
  • Planetary Features: Mountain cities connected with spanning bridges formed from robe and metal... sweeping fields of flowers, temples and snow capped mountains that surround valleys filled with villages. An Anshin duel hybrid dyson sphere that protects the world and contains the spirit connected to it.
  • Major Locations:
    • Atrisian Transportation Network Hub: Created and connected to the Atrisian network of advanced transportation.
    • Shinsui Temple: Housing the sacred mirror the temple itself is massive to house it. WIth the main hall allowing the flawless kyber mirror thaat stands ten men high and wide... with space for one to meditate and many to kneel in front of it. The ancient force user seat of power served in time more as a place of tradition then power.
    • Yojou: The capital of the planet and main space port that has been restored by the AAtrisian Commonwealth over time. As one of the few colonies they haad in the system previously.
      • Moga River: Carving through the bottom of the massive chasm dividing the ward from the temple.. the river is cold and deeper then many know with a strong current that pulls one under fast if they fall in.
      • Pilgrims' ward: Housing for those visiting the world... the ward has three walls enclosing it against the large open area with a bridge that leads to the temple and great mirror. Usually used by those visiting the world rather then those who live on the world.
    • Hemalayaa: Isolated temple teaching a hybrid form of Zeltron and Atrisian force traditions creating a temple dedicated to creating force families and forming unions between powerful bloodliness.
  • Temple Nexus:
    • Force Nexus:
      Intent: To codexify the lore of the planet
      Nexus Name: Shinsui Temple
    • Nexus Alignment: Light: Confined to the temple itself around the kyber mirror. A self defense of it saw the planet vanish when sith forces tried to use the mirror for twenty years.
    • Size: Small
    • Strength: Strong
    • Accessibility: Open for all but using the mirror itself is trricky as thw witch couldn't connect to it leading to frustrration but when struck by the lord of the sith it showed him what the sith could become causing him to forsake his brothers and sisters and strike them, their apprentices and soldiers down.
    • Effects: Intense visions that are deeply personal to the ones who touch it.
  • Planetary Nexus:
    • Force Nexus:
      Intent: To balance the more stranger aspect of the world
      Nexus Name: Rei'izu Nexus
    • Nexus Alignment: Neutral
    • Size: Planetary
    • Strength: Weak
    • Accessibility: Spread across the entire planet. It has waned over the centuries becoming much weaker then when it was at its peak tens of thousands of years ago. ANyone on its surface can feel it in the back of their mind.
    • Effects: Pervasive presence of something on the edge of ones vision... inky shadows at the edge of ones vision... a feeling of deja vu and low voices coming from shadows.
POPULATION
  • Native Species:
  • Immigrated Species:
  • Population: Moderate
  • Demographics: Atrisian Izu: Largely human and Togruta with Twi'lek settlers. The Togruta after having Hauntress and Kaine attempt genocide years before were offered a place to settle by a former emperor. To distinguish the planets name within the system is used and given to the residents being encouraged to settle on the planet.
  • Primary Languages: Basic, Atrisian Script
  • Culture: Dedicated and celebrated for its staunch traditions. the Atrisians of the world hold the core of their beliefs that they brought over from Atrisia and adapted them to the world itself with temples and shrines. THe cities use the latest in terms of living modules and terraforming technologies to protect and preserve the world while above they use the ANshin to handle the flow of commerce and visitors. The Atrisian's have invited a few species to the world and the main draw being the mysterious and ancient mirror that is on the world but no ones knows if it was brought there... made here or made offworld and brought to the temple. With the workers and farmers producing on the world and sending it up to be added to the Anshin's commerce for the world aand the credits made used to buffer and give the planet the credits it needs to continue to improve upon itself.
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: Constitutional Monarchy
  • Affiliation: Atrisian Commonwealth (Planetary Government)
  • Wealth: Wealthy: Largely backed up by the Atrisian Commonwealth as one of its in system colonies. The planet uses the Anshin to sell many of the food and livestock produced across the rest of the galaxy at a steep mark up for freshness.THey are one of the bigger worlds for farming as well as mining operations within the Commonwealth itself.
  • Stability: High: Adopting the Commonwealth model and housing across the planet several of the Sansin as their local leaders. The Commonwealth colony is under the control of the emperor and empress who give them the support and protection with the advanced sphere system and security network.
  • Freedom & Oppression: Free within the bounds of the Commonwealth, the world itself is largely for priests and force users to meditate and it shows with minimal settlements that are highly populated and allowing a more free entry into the temples and the planet.
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: The planet itself doesn't have its own military instead operating under the protection of the Atrisian Defense force and serving as one of the primary sources for ore and resources used in the construction of ships. Its cloning facilities are protected even more providing crew to the mines and ships.
    • Atrisian Defense Forces The royal navy is the primary military forces defending the stations and planet with it being the most internal and insulated with its own contingent of living areas and the terraformed moons that house science and military personnel.
  • Technology: Galactic standard. Atrisian manufacturing businesses included the powerful Sasori Research corporation, one of the largest in the galaxy. It also has the industrial endeavors of the Commonwealth behind it which produces much of its own high end technology in system.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
An ancient world from the Old Atrisian Empire... long lost with a Strangeness. The Chi-Oni have tales of its and stranger parts of it like the kyber mirror that was created and wars between ancient warlords and their warrior servants on the different moons. Their actions in the wars and on the planet changed the system in some ways as they were attacked... their civilization nearly destroyed and for millions of years what happened on the world was long long. Until the jedi found it... reviving many of the temples and drawn to the mysterious mirror that was on the world. The Chi-Oni having found it but not making it and building the temple around the massive piece of kyber crystal. As the force users battled on the world it became a capital for another empire seeking to rule within the core worlds at the time.

Then the world disappeared for the longest time... something happening as it vanished from the system similar to the Cularin system under the darkstaff. Historians who have investigated the world have come back with... not much... something happened to it when it disappeared. The witch who came with the dark lord and overtook the planet merging with it by the accounts of her daughter who used it and the world returning to the Atrisian system. For thousands of years it lay quiet after the empire fell as short lived as it was and the world was largely forgotten until early Atrisian scientists found it discovering the mirror in a temple and making a small outpost on the planet. The centuries of learning what they could only were minor as there wasn't much funding for excavation as wars came and the republic fell.

Still years would go on and the work that went into the planet was beneficial to the Commonwealth as it improved and fidning the old outposts and framework for structures allowed them to rapidly rebuild on the world turning it into one of several planets they were terraforming for habitation by the Atrisian population. The temple itself was made open to the public as the mirror was an oddity that few could really match and jedi teams were welcomed to try and explore or explain it. Carbon dating to get an idea of its age as well as force users to try and suppress the spirit on the planet that could be felt and would torment when it could. The witch was still bonded to the world though her influence waned in the lightside of the force blocking her at times.

The Commonwealth continued on the world as the Jishi era came to be and unsure how to best utalize it turned it more into a spiritual retreat for force users. Designated for them as opposed to the moons and other planets in the systems that are for colonies and their general population of citizens.
 
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Under Review Junko Ike Junko Ike

It's cool to see Visions content being brought to Chaos, and you found a good way to do it (the Cularin example was clever). I have just a few things to check with you about before I approve this.

  • Force Nexus: Codex Judges have to be extra careful about planetary nexuses and their effects. I'd like to ask you to expand on the planetary nexus's Effects with at least a few more sentences. What does it mean to be connected to the Witch's spirit and worlds? Does she appear as a vision to people on the planet, or show them visions or other worlds? How often does she appear? Does she appear to everyone, to everyone who is Force-sensitive, or only to some people? If she tries to influence Force-users, what does she try to make them do? Is she helpful, evil, or somewhere in between? Can she affect the physical world, or only influence minds? Can Force-users contact her to ask for help or information?

  • Demographics: I need a little more here. Is the population mostly Atrisian Human, with some Twi-leks and Togrutas, or is it a pretty even mix? Why are there a lot of Twi'leks and Togrutas but not many other species? Are there non-Atrisian Humans? Are there other species as well, just not very many, or is the population exclusively those three species?

  • Major Imports: Why are citizens a major import? Is the Commonwealth encouraging people to settle here?

  • Major Exports: Just a note that Stygium is a restricted material, so these exports can only lead to Semi-Unique factory subs at most.

Please reach out with any questions or concerns!
 
The Mongrel The Mongrel

Edited the importa/exports to make it a little clearer.

For the ones coming to the world the Togruta's world (pre-wipe) was attacked by Hauntress and Kaine ic years ago and a place was offered to the refugees and survivors by then Emperor Akio and the commonwealth to win political favor. So this is somewhat following through with it as well as yes encouraging people and refugee's to settle there.

For the nexus I tried to be vague with a reason... the witches soul on the planet becomes obscenely powerful aside from communication with the ronin/dark lord (yes the ronin is the sith lord hunting down all of the order he didn't kill) she could also resurrect the dead from across the galaxy, control people like puppets/suppressing thought and resurrect darkside phantoms that were more or less unable to be destroyed on the world when the ronin and party returned to the world. She also kind of could move a planet through space and time like the darkstaff. I agree it should have more but I am not sure how to make things like that fair for those on the world but I did add a couple of the effects they were sort of feeling.
 
Junko Ike Junko Ike

The Import and Export edits look good. For your information about the Togruta, could you please put that in the Demographics section, to explain the presence of Togruta? Please also expand on the Demographics section in the other ways I requested. It's still only two words, and does not answer the questions brought up in the template.

Demographics: I need a little more here. Is the population mostly Atrisian Human, with some Twi-leks and Togrutas, or is it a pretty even mix? Why are there a lot of Twi'leks and Togrutas but not many other species? Are there non-Atrisian Humans? Are there other species as well, just not very many, or is the population exclusively those three species?

The Witch's nexus has me a little concerned. Canon characters are not allowed on Chaos, so we have to be a little careful with the Witch; maybe we can be vague, mentioning a mysterious presence that merged with the planet, rather than explicitly calling back to a semi-canon character. If the Witch can do all the things you mentioned (raising the dead, controlling people, etc) then this is a Strong nexus, not a weak one, and probably too strong to be approved. Maybe we can say her power has diminished over time, as she faded into the Netherworld.

I'm still confused as to what the witch wants, and what effects her presence has in the Nexus. Why does she lure people to the planet? Does she try to contact or dominate people, or does her spirit just create the strange phantoms and shadows out of the corners of people's eyes that you mentioned? Does she appear to people, or is she too scattered across the whole planet?
 
The Mongrel The Mongrel

edited it in sorry I thought I had and yes I tried to have it become weakened over time and distance.. as she is spreading herself across an entire world as opposed to most darksiders who woluld bond to an object.

As to her motivations.. I read the book and it is unclear in some ways. She at times wants the ronin to die so leads him to other sith so that they can kill him, sends resurrected beings to attack him... but also wants him to return to the world as she send a phantom to guide him back to the planet to meet his daughter. In the conversations the ronin and her have she muses about killing him but wants to know what he saw when he touched the mirror that led to him instead trying to kill all of the sith. She both wants to protect and care for her daughter using the world sort of like the mother/ship in Nightflyers (book not the show) creating force wraiths that farm and get her food and water so she is not alone, attacks anyone who comes to the world but also makes them forget they were there and will let them go. The characters talk about her as this monster who brought the dead back to life to bolster the sith armies but the Ronin (who is the dark lord, her lover) treats it more like she was just misunderstood and that isn't correct. So you never get a clear picture of who or what she was/wanted. The motivation changes almost by the chapter and depending on who she is communicating with through the force or through a puppet her demeanor and attitude change. With the one jedi lord she is more seductive wanting him to send her the ronin but also keep teaching his students and making them the next generation of sith who would fight the other jedi, with Kaoru (the parasol sith from the episode she wants her to hurt and drag the ronin back to her and will take control of her body to do it) with the ronin she offers advice, with the traveler she has him guiding the ronin and the smuggler he is with to the world cause she has a cargo bay full of kyber which can bolster and repair the mirror.

So with all of that I would like to keep the nexus but totally get and understand the concerns so thinking about the edits. I am just going to layout the ideas and whatever you think needs to be changed let me know.

CHange from quasi-canon to vague presence on world
Explain that the power has waned over time as they slowly joined the force
Alter from small size to planetary
Keep strength weak to go with the waning
Avoid the capabilities aside from presence and shadows (no wraiths, moving the planet, phantoms to lure people)
 
Junko Ike Junko Ike

Okay, I think that will work. As long as the witch's presence remains something mysterious and indirect, building stories and adding to the spooky atmosphere instead of becoming a character, this should be fine. If it becomes a problem, we will move this planet back to review.

It looks like you changed that Nexus's size to Small, though. Shouldn't it still be Planetary?

Fix that and I will go ahead and approve this.
 

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