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Codex Denied Hal Yomin

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: Late 20s
  • Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User
  • Species: Zeltron
  • Appearance: The first thing that comes to everyone's mind upon meeting Hal: this is a guy who wants to be left alone. No, seriously. He dresses frumpy, slouches, doesn't look people in the eye—and don't even get me started on the anti-pheromone ointment. That stuff smells like bleach mixed with bug spray. If you look at him for longer than five seconds, you'll notice that he's actually kind of cute, in a skinny nerd kind of way. He has blue-black hair, a fuchsia complexion, and dark blue eyes... but if your gaze lingers on him he'll notice, open that handsome mouth of his, and say something rude to get you to stop staring.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Hallard Yomin; "Hal"
  • Loyalties: Inanna Hoole | His children
  • Wealth: He and Inanna pool their wealth, so he is essentially as rich as she is at any given time. He's not especially comfortable with the idea of being ultra wealthy, however, so he continues to live modestly and keeps most of the credits in the bank.
  • Notable Possessions: Personal computer with a keyboard. He and Inanna recently bought a house together.
  • Skills: He types. Sometimes he says things that are kind of witty.
  • Personality: Hal is as much a product of his species' telepathic abilities as any other Zeltron, but rather than becoming a lazy hedonistic airhead, he turned into a withdrawn, misanthropic loner. The pungent anti-pheromone ointment he applies regularly, along with his quiet nature and general avoidance of people, comes from a desire to maintain control over his emotions and his life. He doesn't want people fawning over him just because of the fumes his body produces, nor does he want to feel what others feel. Let them keep their privacy and let him be left alone. For this attitude, on Zeltros he would be considered almost antisocial; among other species he is merely a cantankerous hermit. He shuns most pleasures and vices, filling out his time with hard work and study instead. Getting him to come out of his shell is a job in and of itself, but if you are successful he will exhibit flashes of dry humor, high empathy, and hidden observational skills.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: Eyes and ears.
  • Combat Function: Hal in combat? Forget it, man. He's a pencil-pusher. Best he can hope for is noticing ahead of time that chit is about to go down and getting the hell out of there before it happens.
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
  • Non-Combatant: He can't fight and could be killed or captured very easily. Probably wouldn't do well under torture and interrogation, either.
  • Antisocial: He doesn't like talking to people unless absolutely necessary. He's there to work, not to make friends and small talk.
  • Puritanical: His flat refusal to take part in anything "fun" can come across as more than a little suspicious, especially to his fellow Zeltrons. He's also naturally more prone to temptation. Under the right circumstances, he could be made to have some fun... but the long-term consequences and shame that would arise from his failure to control himself would be especially painful for him.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Hallard Yomin, better known as "Hal" is the quintessential guy at the office who keeps to himself. Nobody knows much about him, even after they've worked with him for years, but since he doesn't bother anyone and gets so testy when other people bother him, no one has bothered to ask about his background.

Some information can be gleaned from his records. He was born on Zeltros, the second of four children, but spent a significant portion of his youth on Yavin. His family fled back to Zeltros once the Sith Empire took over Yavin. For whatever reason, Hal stayed behind, attending college even as the curriculum became tainted by Sith propaganda. Maybe that's why he has a master's degree in Art History, of all things.

How he wound up working as a common secretary for Niko Tolsto, one of the numerous lower-level minions in the employ of Moff Aerarii Tithe, is anyone's guess. In that role, responsibility for the content of various important contracts fell to him. He was the one who typed up the binding agreements for the colonization of Ord Tiddell, where he was unwittingly drawn into a sabotage attempt... if you could even call a handful of typos a conspiracy against the Empire.

Ah, who cares? Fed up with the Empire's crap, he resigned from Tolsto's service that very day and took up an offer to be Inanna Hoole's personal secretary, working from her office on Dromund Kaas. He has zero involvement in TSE politics, thankfully, and his current job is to help her write novels. That said, he probably didn't expect to wind up marrying her, but here we are. The two have adopted three children, two boys and a girl, and have retired to Erakhis to live out their lives together in relative peace.
 
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Zak Dymo

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Inanna Harth Inanna Harth

Just one comment.

Loyalties: @Inanna Hoole

Tags are not a substitute for links, as accounts can be renamed and the tags automatically change to match (which would have the effect of changing this NPCs loyalties without a submission modification). Please replace this with a link to your character biography.
 
Pre-Codex Template

Submission Name: Hal Yomin
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: He's being upgraded from secretary to husband, and needs several overall edits. May also add an image if I can find some decent art.

Submission Name: Miri
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Rewrite of historical information needed to reflect a recent retcon.

Submission Name: Dr. Raehith Daanruano
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Rewrite needed to reflect a recent retcon.

Submission Name: Project Warlock
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Rewrite of needed to reflect a recent retcon.

Don't forget to include a list of changes and tag a member of Codex Staff when you're ready.
 
Srina Talon Srina Talon John Locke John Locke

I know the Codex is still shut down, but since I am pretty much done with this, I'm going to list off all my changes here so I don't forget anything.

1. Role was changed.
2. Rewrote parts of the Appearance section.
3. Wording of the Wealth section changed.
4. Notable Possessions includes a link to a location sub.
5. Historical Information section now has a few sentences added as per RP progression.
 
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Inanna Harth Inanna Harth

There are a couple things with this submission that seem to be missing.

Under OOC you seem to be missing the Image Credit portion of the template. I am sure this is an oversight, but according to the codex guidelines you need to ensure every part of the original template is used. Even if there is no Image Credit you need to add it back and put N/A

The next issue is related. You use a youtube link in the submission. The clip comes from Superman 1978, so if you could use the image credit under OOC to link to the IMDB page for the movie that would be appreciated.

Once you take care of these couple of things this should be good to go.
 
CODEX ARCHIVAL TEMPLATE
Submission Name: Hal Yomin
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Archival: NPC is deceased.

CODEX ARCHIVAL TEMPLATE
Submission Name: Inanna Yomin
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Archival: NPC is now a PC.

CODEX MODIFICATION TEMPLATE
Submission Name: Pygar Hoole, Sith Changeling
Link to Submission: Here
Reason for Moving to Codex Modification: General overhaul/update.
 
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