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Ken Skywalker | The Old Skywalker
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To make an NPC companion for Ken Skywalker, To make a Rebel Shooter and Sniper on an army and squad.
  • Image Credit: None
  • Role: Ken Skywalker's NPC companion and Rebel Shooter/Sniper
  • Permissions: None
  • Links: The Republic, The Sith Empire, Jakku
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 35
  • Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User
  • Species: Human
  • Appearance:
  • Height:5' 8"
  • Weight:168.3 lb
  • Distinguishing Marks: A saber cut on the left arm and a blast from a blaster on the right leg.
  • Usual Clothing: Current Rebel Pilot and Current Rebel Clothing
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Alliance Remnant Commander James Greg
  • Loyalties: Ken Skywalker
  • Faction: The Republic
  • Wealth: Normal
  • Notable Possessions: VT-DB Datapad
  • Skills: Friendly, Calm, Smart, Brave and Loyal
  • Personality: Hates Dark Side, Likes the Jedi, and Wants to defeat the Dark Side once and for all.
COMBAT INFORMATION
Strengths:
  • Good Aim
  • Good Melee with anything
  • Can throw Efficiently
  • Good at Hacking
Weaknesses:
  • Let's guard down when focusing on something
  • Cant Dodge Many Attacks
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
He is a Rebel and hates the dark side from the age of 12.
He was held hostage by the Sith Empire on Jakku but saved by a small group of Jedi and a large army of Rebels.
His family was working with the rebels as Pilots but died fighting the Imperial Fighters.
He began training as a rebel sniper and rebel shooter.
He Perfected his training and he trained as a rebel Pilot and began his first mission on Jakku.
They fought The Sith Empire until they were vanquished on their missions.
He was ranked Commander after he defeated all the imperial fighters by only using a GA-HBC-01 Blaster Carbine and willingly saved a rebel's X-Wing by pushing his own X-Wing to the rebel's X-Wing a flaming Imperial Fighter.
 
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I like the thematic elements that you present in this submission. It plays off of a very classic Star Wars archetype that is as timeless as the franchise itself. That said, I do have just a few comments that I think will help to clarify your concept for your reader.

1. Links

XxkenykenxX said:
  • Links:[member='XxkenykenxX']
As our template, you'll want to use a hyperlink here, rather than @mention to tag yourself. Based on the historical information, I would suggest adding Alliance Remnant, The First Order and Jakku as well.

2. Species (Link)

XxkenykenxX said:
  • Species:Human
As per our template, please link Human here.

3. Appearance (Links)
XxkenykenxX said:
  • Combat Clothing:Galactic Alliance Trooper Armor and Galactic Alliance Scout Armor
This seems rather specific, so I'll ask does this a reference to a specific armor submission? Is there a link that you could include here to clarify your intent for what the qualities of these armors are?

4. Loyalties (Links)

XxkenykenxX said:
  • Loyalties:Ken Skywalker
  • Faction:Alliance Remnant
Please provide links for Ken Skywalker and Alliance Remnant here.

6. Notable Possessions / Weapon of Choice

XxkenykenxX said:
  • Notable Possessions:VT-D8 Datapad
XxkenykenxX said:
  • Weapon of Choice:BlasTech DLT-29 Heavy Blaster Rifle, BlasTech DLT-29 Heavy Blaster Rifle, and BlasTech A320 Blaster Rifle.
As per our template, please describe or link any notable possessions. Is there a Wookieepedia article or Factory submission that you could link for those items? Are they intended to be modern versions of canon technology? You seem to be referring to specific weapons, so please either link to what you are referencing or add additional language to describe the item in question in some more detail.

In the alternative, if these are intended to be generic examples of their type, just list 'datapad' or 'heavy blaster rifle'.

Those are my comments. Please tag me when you have had an opportunity to complete your edits.
 
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Let me see if I can be of help. How you interact with the board will vary, depending on if you are using the "full version" (regular website) or the mobile version of the site (such as on a smartphone browser). My reply will address the full version of the site, which provides 3 ways of linking something in a post.

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XxkenykenxX XxkenykenxX Thank you very much for the edits!

That's quite an interesting fella you've got over there. I'm going to have to ask for some edits but please bear with me, once we get through these we shall ave a shiny, tight, and upgraded submission :)

These links all point to the old factions we had before the board upgrade in December. Some of these factions no longer exist, and those that do, have a new group ID. I need you to check for these factions in the Factions and update the links please. If any of these are no longer around you can remove them from the link list. This includes making sure all the links in Historical Information work as well.

Under Physical Information, you are missing the Appearance section. The height, weight, marks, and clothing can definetly be part of this, but parts of the template cannot be removed.

In Social Information:
These two also need updated links please.


In Combat Information,
The weapons I've left in the quote are ones that need updated to the new links. In any case of any of these being non-Open Market and not affiliated with your character, please include the proof or purchase/s link/s or screenshot/s in the Permissions.

Please tag me back once you've made these edits :)
 
XxkenykenxX XxkenykenxX Thank you very much for the edits!

Template wise, the submission is now up to date with working links and everything. However, we need to address these three weapons from the Weapons of Choice, the first of which appearing in the History as well;
These three are affiliated with factions and are not Open-Market. If a submission does not specifically state that it is Open-Market or affiliated with the faction the character in question is part of, you need permission in order to be able to use it for your character. The GA and the Republic are two different factions, and as such, they cannot be used in this submission as it currently is. Your options are:
  1. Choose different weapons, or-
  2. Contact the writer to ask for permission to use these Factory submissions, or-
  3. Remove these weapons all together.
If you go for option 2, remember to edit the Permissions section.

Please tag me back once you've chosen one of the three and have continued accordingly :)
 
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