Nyx
Insert Hilarious Title Here
7/10
Interesting character, but I've seen mind-wiped droids before.
Interesting character, but I've seen mind-wiped droids before.
Star Wars Roleplay: Chaos
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How cliché is the character above you
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The Crashing Loony
Ringmistress, eh?
4/10 for race condition and job
4/10 for race condition and job
Break
System Reboot
4/10 i like how you use him
Lok Jorunn
Buck
3/10
Zathra Fett
Graffiti and Art are the same thing, right?
2.5/10
I like it a lot, and I don't find it too cliche
I like it a lot, and I don't find it too cliche
Laura Na'Varro
Giver of Crisp High Fives
5/10
The Crashing Loony
As much as I like it...
4/10 I find it varying levels of cliche depending on the post
4/10 I find it varying levels of cliche depending on the post
Zathra Fett
Graffiti and Art are the same thing, right?
1/10
I would have done 0/10 but eh, every character had a cliche somewhere
I would have done 0/10 but eh, every character had a cliche somewhere
Alexander Priest
Whatever happened to your little Jedi Mind Trick?
3/10 A mando artist sounds interesting...
Read my bio before you rate me, as my tags and name are not current
Read my bio before you rate me, as my tags and name are not current
Flannigan Mcnash
Mr. Roboto
5/10
The character initial uniqueness comes from the race, as far as the character card is concerned the uniqueness is only that of the race, while a good start out it doesn't really have anything to make it stand out besides itself being Filar-Nitzan. While the avatar doesn't bode well with myself, and the inspiration drawn it's average. Not terribly unique or cliche.
Bio is listed under @mention.
Nyx
Insert Hilarious Title Here
4/10
Very interesting character, one that I like; tragic background is fairly common (just look at me) but being turned 95% cyborg is not.
Nice job.
Very interesting character, one that I like; tragic background is fairly common (just look at me) but being turned 95% cyborg is not.
Nice job.
The Crashing Loony
Ehh... tragic background or no, you are somewhat unique.
4/10 compared to most Zeltrons that is...
4/10 compared to most Zeltrons that is...
ZeedusFrostBlood
Member
6/10
Interesting character, love HRDs
Interesting character, love HRDs
Vlad123
Padawan
5/10
Interesting how you choose to write as a droid. Character strengths and weaknesses unique and well-defined.
Interesting how you choose to write as a droid. Character strengths and weaknesses unique and well-defined.
Seems pretty legit
Break
System Reboot
0/10
Lysle of the Hydian Way
Silent and Violent
9/10
Most of the attributes, and even the biography, is just an echo of other characters I've read. The character doesn't seem entirely fleshed out, and is two-dimensional. The character is meekly elaborated on with a cliche storyline and a ridiculous strength that essentially allows it to defeat anyone so long as they don't utilize an EMP blast. Dislikes/Likes are familiar to many characters, as well as having the weakness of being too caring. This is without mention of Megaman.
This is just blunt criticism (As per the thread), and while I've primarily focused on the negatives, I am sure I could find things to be praised in your role-playing.
Most of the attributes, and even the biography, is just an echo of other characters I've read. The character doesn't seem entirely fleshed out, and is two-dimensional. The character is meekly elaborated on with a cliche storyline and a ridiculous strength that essentially allows it to defeat anyone so long as they don't utilize an EMP blast. Dislikes/Likes are familiar to many characters, as well as having the weakness of being too caring. This is without mention of Megaman.
This is just blunt criticism (As per the thread), and while I've primarily focused on the negatives, I am sure I could find things to be praised in your role-playing.
The Forgotten One
5/10
Yvette Dusong
The Painter
[member="Lysle of the Hydian Way"]
To start off with, you get bonus points just for style and aesthetics really. I pretty much loved everything I've saw of the Ravens, their companies, early inception threads, and from you as far as those two things go. The color scheme works miracles, I tell ya'. Now onto the character's history itself, the early bits seem standard enough to my eyes, nothing that stands out that much when all things are considered really. The only complaint I could possibly have regarding it is so easily finding the commands for auto-pilot and to close the shuttle doors when he had to spam every button just to find the ignition, but I can completely forgive that both for the sake of flow and the fact you played his first experience behind the wheel like something I'd expect to see in a cartoon / comedy, which got a few chuckles out of me.
The middle part is rather perfect in my eyes, as far as content and quality goes. More than enough to fill in the blanks of what happened during those fifteen years while also leaving a lot of open space for mystery / back story to be explained through threads / threads happening during the past while also not being overbearing or wordy.
The finale I like simply because you didn't seem to hold back any punches in regards to taking back the Raven's and went all out on his disgust of Chiasa. The biggest, and quite possibly single complaint I have in regards to the profile itself is that Lydian came back from the dead after being shot in the chest with a blaster, despite the weakness provided for him stating that a blaster to the chest will pretty much spell the death of him. Now if that was added post-death as a form of tongue-in-cheek humor, then it has my approval.
Can't say much for your threads themselves since it's been a while since I read the old ones and have yet to dabble in the new ones, so my opinion might be skewed enough to not warrant being said on this subject. Over all though, just because I bloody adore your style, 3/10
To start off with, you get bonus points just for style and aesthetics really. I pretty much loved everything I've saw of the Ravens, their companies, early inception threads, and from you as far as those two things go. The color scheme works miracles, I tell ya'. Now onto the character's history itself, the early bits seem standard enough to my eyes, nothing that stands out that much when all things are considered really. The only complaint I could possibly have regarding it is so easily finding the commands for auto-pilot and to close the shuttle doors when he had to spam every button just to find the ignition, but I can completely forgive that both for the sake of flow and the fact you played his first experience behind the wheel like something I'd expect to see in a cartoon / comedy, which got a few chuckles out of me.
The middle part is rather perfect in my eyes, as far as content and quality goes. More than enough to fill in the blanks of what happened during those fifteen years while also leaving a lot of open space for mystery / back story to be explained through threads / threads happening during the past while also not being overbearing or wordy.
The finale I like simply because you didn't seem to hold back any punches in regards to taking back the Raven's and went all out on his disgust of Chiasa. The biggest, and quite possibly single complaint I have in regards to the profile itself is that Lydian came back from the dead after being shot in the chest with a blaster, despite the weakness provided for him stating that a blaster to the chest will pretty much spell the death of him. Now if that was added post-death as a form of tongue-in-cheek humor, then it has my approval.
Can't say much for your threads themselves since it's been a while since I read the old ones and have yet to dabble in the new ones, so my opinion might be skewed enough to not warrant being said on this subject. Over all though, just because I bloody adore your style, 3/10
Rip me a new one, I thrive on criticism
