[member="Raiz Australis"]
You're one hell of an Engineer Raiz, but you still ain't no Isaac Clarke.
On a serious note, I've skim-read some threads of yours in my spare time. Pretty solid stuff.
All I can say is, maybe try to write his feelings of combat a bit more consistently? I can't say for certain if that's a genuine problem, but that usually is a problem for a lot of people.
It always helps to try and get in the zone first too. And, try not to be worry about the size of or content of your posts by comparison to others. Stick to a consistency and level of complexity befitting to your own writing style/character.