Factory Denied Bryn'adûl | Wendigo Spiker

[Tathra Khaeus]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: Baseline projectile rifle for use by Bryn'adûl infantry.
• Image Source: X
• Canon Link: N/A
• Primary Source: N/A

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: The Bryn'adûl
• Affiliation: The Bryn'adûl
• Model: Spike Rifle
• Modularity: Can be modified with different plate variants for weight management.
• 
  Production: Mass-Produced
  
• Material: ​Standard Rifle Components, Superheated Metal

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: ​Spike Gun
• Size: Large
• Weight: Average - Heavy
• Ammunition Type: ​Super-heated metal
• Ammunition Capacity: 36 Round Magazine, 6 Mags total
• 
  Reload Speed: Average
  
• Effective Range: Average
• Rate of Fire: Average
• Stopping Power: High
• Recoil: High

SPECIAL FEATURES

• Spikes: The weapon fires a barrage of super heated metal spikes, tearing through opponents with ease.

Strengths:

• Pain: The super-heated metal cuts through enemies like butter, firing twenty-five centimetre super heated spikes at a high rate of fire, quickly riddling an enemy with incredibly painful wounds.
• Metal bypass: The super-heated spikes are well equipped to deal with armour - able to melt through most armours with direct strikes, quickly cooling down upon impact as to not carbonise the wounds, just burning enough to cause extreme pain.
• Heat: Over time of use, the weapon will steadily heat up, making it almost impossible to be used by anything other than the resistant Draelvasier

Weaknesses:

• Two Hands: For any infantry other than Baedurin, this weapon in its more armoured variant requires two hands for usage due to its heavy nature.
• ​Recoil: This weapon produces accuracy through paced strikes. Continuous fire creates continuous issues with hitting targets.
• ​Heat: Eventually, this weapon will become unusable to allies outside of the Drael within the Bryn'adûl due to its heat.
• ​Less Protection: In its less armoured, smaller variant; the Spiker can be more easily damaged and stores a halved clip.

DESCRIPTION:
The Spiker is built as a supplementary assault rifle that can be used as a one handed weapon or two handed for more accuracy by Bryn'adûl soldiers, it can also be used two handed by smaller species or sub-species of the Drael in its less armoured variant.

 

[Ravenfire]

[member="Tathra Khaeus"]

Hey there looks like a neat rifle but just a few things.

Heat although a strength will also fit as a weakness as it means allies can't pick it up either to help if they were forced to.

Metal Bypass needs to sound less definite in that it will pierce armour. I would suggest it has armour piercing capabilities cause right now that strength is gonna call hits on people.

Lastly you have a weakness called two handed that says it must be used with two hands but in the description you say it can be used as a one handed weapon. Please either lose this weakness or fix the description.

 

[Tathra Khaeus]

[member="Tom Taff"]

Fixed, clarified its one-handed variant is the armoured version mentioned within modularity, added a relevant weakness and tweaked Two-Hands, Metal Bypass and the Description.

 

[Ravenfire]

[member="Tathra Khaeus"]

Awesome. Enjoy your rifle.

 

[Ravenfire]

Approved.

 

[John Locke]

Tathra Khaeus

This submission is being pulled due to a report.

Looking over the submission it is almost a carbon copy of the Type-25 Spiker from Halo.

A few of the similarities between this submission and the Type-25 spiker can be listed below.

1) Name

Your weapon is actually called a spiker, while the Halo weapon is also known as a Spiker. ​

2) Image

While an image of the Halo Spiker alone is acceptable, this combined with the name and the other similarities makes this too close to being a carbon-copy of the Halo Weapon​

3) Ammunition

Like the Halo weapon, this submission uses super-heated metal spike to bypass armour. ​

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From your submission:​

Metal bypass: The super-heated spikes are well equipped to deal with armour - able to melt through most armours with direct strikes

From the Halo wiki:​

These spikes are capable of piercing armour and flesh

4) Two-handed

From your submission:​

Two Hands: For any infantry other than Baedurin, this weapon in its more armoured variant requires two hands for usage due to its heavy nature.

From the Halo wiki:​

The Spiker was engineered by the Jiralhanae as a weapon intended to be held in one hand by a standard Jiralhanae soldier, though its size and weight mean it must be carried in two hands for use by human infantry

The similarities between these two quotes speak for themselves.​

The Factory rules clearly state:

Plagiarism will not be tolerated. Small excerpts may be included from other sources in a sub, but they must include a credit, link, and be clearly marked.

And this submission is a clear copy of the Halo Weapon.

In order to make this submission something that is not a copy of the Halo weapon I believe would require a complete rewrite.

For that reason, I am going to retroactively deny this submission. If you disagree with my reasoning, or with my judgement you are welcome to request a second chance thread.

DENIED​