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Approved Planet Zuaberlord

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  • OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: The intention is too create a lost world good to be colonized and currently not populated, a fresh world open for good rp with no ties to any past canon history a clean planet for people to trade goods on and other people to call home. In the deepest darkest corners of space exists a solar system not marked on any space maps for one good reason the mere fact charting this nebula is impossible, if you used anything other than a old pirates compass and a pencil and paper. The thing was this end of the universe had a certain material in good supply floating around in the asteroid belt that sounded this solar system was a material called Quadranium ,This Solar system that the planet was in had to be navigated the old fashion way , with a compass and a good eye. above the lush beautiful planet are two moons one of pure molten fire a volcano moon, one of pure freezing ice the snow moon .There is only one planet in this solar system. Still yet undiscovered and un-populated. There is also a giant beautiful sun in the middle of the solar system.

  • Image Credit:Awesome Wall Paper Blog
  • Canon: N/A
  • Links:N/A
  • GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Zuaberlord
  • Demonym: Zuaber
  • Region: Unknown Space
  • System Name: The Nexus
  • System Features: This system is surrounded by a asteroid belt with giant meteorites full of Quadranium. The solar system is almost impossible to navigate, if you have never been there before because electronic maps are useless you have to guide your ship by sight. Once you cross the first ring of asteroids there is one massive sun about 200 million km past the first meteorite rings, it is the first thing a traveler into this sector would notice. Solar flares are a constant thing the use of navigational systems and communications in this system are pretty non existence. It is very important to note when flying into the Solar System there is two major gravity wells that sit on the outside rim of the asteroid belt before you officially fly into the solar system, the massive gravity wells contain class five nexus level gravitational turbulence , both of them reside exactly 10 million miles from the first asteroid far enough away to do no harm to the solar system but when you flying blind with no navigation systems, some times all space looked the same. That is the last thing you want when your flying threw a un-mapped solar system to run smack dab into a gravity well. Every now and then people missed the obvious signs and ran smack into the most gravitational force there ship has ever felt , there is a ton of thrashed ships in space wreckage that missed getting sucked into the gravity well but was still trashed by its massive force . This Solar system that the planet was in had to be navigated the old fashion way , with a compass and a good eye. In the center of this solar system is a beautiful big sun, Above the planets surface is two moons. The first moon is one of pure molten fire a volcano moon that's temperature never changes that holds a resource know as liquid gold.It flows across the Volcanic surface and due too the planets atmosphere it is really hard to obtain.
  • The second moon is one of pure freezing ice the snow moon that has Quadranium in deep mines in veins ,the planet is so cold its temperature never changes, the entire planets is covered in ice and the only way to mine the Quadranium is with massive amounts of machines and the process is very expensive and dangerous because of the planets climate.
  • Coordinates: AI-46
  • Major Imports:N/A
  • Major Exports: Quadanium


  • GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: The gravity on this planet is twice that of earth
  • Climate: The temperature is exactly like earth with slight differences because of the gravity field.
  • Primary Terrain: The primary terrain of this planet is grass and fields with a few small oceans and two major mountains.
  • Major Locations:There is only one major location on this world and that is the a giant mountain formation that can be seen from space, it size and height stretches across one of the provinces on the planet.

  • POPULATION
  • Native Species: N/A
  • Immigrated Species:N/A
  • Population: None.
  • Demographics: there is no population on the planet as of this moment.
  • Primary Languages.N/A
  • Culture: N/A
  • GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: N/A
  • Affiliation: N/A
  • Wealth:N/A
  • Stability:N/A
  • Freedom & Oppression:N/A
  • MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: N/A
  • Technology: N/A
  • HISTORICAL INFORMATION
  • The Race know as the Zauberlords had no home world of their own but they had a massive ship know as the Titian , It had enough fire power to turn a planet into space dust.It was the perfect vessel for exploration and traveling across the universe, they had come across this universe know as the Nexus by complete accident when the ripples from the two gravity caused subspace interference there hyperspace, when they came back to regular space they threw the shields up and just narrowly avoided being crushed in a gravity well. Due to the massive solar flares constantly on the sun in this solar system and the electro magnetic fields created by the two gravity wells ,the navigation's of this ship,were pretty much useless as well the communications had gone offline. What they seen before them though was beautiful a sun two moons and in the middle of it all a decent sized planet.The first order of business would be the establishment of a decent Trade Line from this world to other worlds as there was no colony or life forms in this solar system except for the Titian's Captain one Zauberlord he did not even bring a crew, as he did not plan this to be a colonization, but once he saw this barren world he had a idea's , to claim this solar system as his own and rule it as he saw fit a welcome home for every pirate and every scoundrel in the universe as long as they obeyed the laws Of His Brethren Court.
 
[member="Xanatos BloodStone"]

Welcome to Codex, I will be handling a few issues in this submission before having a CJ take over.

First off, I love the creativity you have put into this submission but there are some major things that will need to be removed and changed. For one, Zabraks have a canon home planet, it is Iridonia. Zabraks are also known as Iridonians because of this. You will need to remove all mention of this being the home planet of the Zabraks if you intend to use it for the canon race/species - however I am not opposed to a story that establishes another major territory for this canon species named after them.



Second, all planets submitted to Codex must be within the known galaxy. As such, you must select an appropriate map coordinate for the system and remove all mention of it being extragalactic, as new extragalactic subjects are banned.

Taken from the Codex Planet Creation rules:
4. Extra-galactic planets may not be submitted to the Codex per the Banned Items list.


Third, remove all mention of nykkalt from this submission.

Taken directly from the wookie article:
Nykkalt was a highly vibrative metal that reflected any light, air, or even hyper-spectrum frequency. Rare and precious, it existed in a liquid form beneath the surface of the moon of Kufs. Because of that, the moon was essentially invisible to anything electronic.
Per canon it is only found on the moon of Kufs and as such will be found nowhere else in the galaxy - known or not.



Once you have made these changes I will pass this along to one of my CJs. Please tag me when you are done.
 
@Mahet I never mentioned this as the original home planet of Zabraks , just like every race in the galaxy at some point in time there species was nomadic that's how sith showed up on all sorts of planets , My claim was that a cousin race of the same Zabrak dna grew up and evolved on this planet, because i was already aware of the canon lore. Also the Nykkalt thing, no offense but people create new technology and new things all the time that are not exactly canon and the universe is huge. The location i picked was way off the star map and the entire premise of this whole thing is based on the fact , that some natural metal has kept it away from other people. As big as the universe is it is more than possible Nykkalt would exist else were in universe. No offense not trying to argue with a Admin and be banned just telling you my point of view, that there is tons of things not canon on this website. i have no issues fixing the zabrak confusion , no problem i will just make a new race and replace any mention of zabrak. i was planing on making a new character anyway. i don't agree on the Nykkalt it is canon ,no. If your set on the Nykkalt i will have to re-write everything so at this point i will probably remove my submission and re-think it. Out of everything i read did not see a thread talking about canon on planets wish i had sorry for wasting your time. and fyi glad you liked the originality thanks.
 
Yes, I am set on the removal of Nykkalt.

Creating a new race for this planet might be a better idea so as not to confuse canon lore.

You will still be required to place the planet within the allowable map coordinates, even if you do not intend to have it officially added to the map.

Sounds like rewriting this is probably for the best. If you wish to have this archived I can do so. If you'd rather re-work it in Pre-Codex that is fine, too. Let me know what you'd like to do.

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[member="Mahet"] sounds good the location i provided was not good >>AR-63 <<? i just got a better idea actually i will make the planet barren and discover it myself with my new character , from the new race i was planing too build and i will replace the Nykkalt ,with some Tunqstoid or Trimantium then the entire history of the planet would be created as it was rped out that might be much easier. One question how do i transfer things i created on this character Xanatos Bloodstone To Another Sub Character then delete Xanatos Bloodstone . i will fix all that in a few minutes ..
 
You can simply request a name change on the account here if you want to start over. This will change the name of all content you've posted under the Xanatos account automatically to the new name. Alternatively, you can make a sub-account instead and maintain the Xanatos account.

AR-63 falls outside the galactic limits which are marked by the white lines outlining the galaxy's "shape." You will need to choose a coordinate within those lines.

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[member="Salvador Grim"]

Alright, I have given this a good once over and there is a bunch of things we need to go over, so I am gonna take it a few steps at a time. Rather than drop all of it on you at once.

First thing that immediately comes to mind: please hyperlink every image credit you got. Just their names aren't enough here. You also need to link the Privateers Alliance behind the Links field. Other than that, you need to add every field in the template into the submission. If you aren't using them, just add N/A behind them, which you have done a couple of times already. I am missing Primary Languages for instance.

Also- this planet is and has been uninhabited right now, but has a pretty big city?
 
[member="Jairus Starvald"] some thing must of glitched they were hyperlinked at one point no big deal i will fix that , i will take care of your concerns ,this planet is and has been uninhabited right now, but has a pretty big city? no no city the picture for the display is how i was thinking the city would look as it developed threw rp currently it is just a hunk of rock
 
[member="Jairus Starvald"] I cleaned it up quite a bit and removed the mention of my alliance because we didnt make the planet we just plan to discover it , anyway please give me any other sugestions you have.
 
[member="Salvador Grim"]

You still need an image credit field in your template. Simply add N/A behind it, if you aren't using them. The stability field is also there for political/social descriptions, not actually for physics or anything similar. Seeing as this planet is devoid of life right now, you can just add N/A to it as well. I will need you to fill in some history in the submission though. I am aware that it doesn't have any life, but you can just write up a piece where you elaborate on how it was discovered etc.


As for the meat of the submission- there is some interesting stuff here and this is star wars, so I am not gonna try to make this fit into the laws of physics.

But we do need to make it a bit more reasonable than it is right now. Two black holes in the star system won't actually do what you want it to do, in fact, they would only start chomping down on all the astrophysical objects you got in your system. That... isn't what you want here. I'd replace them with something more vague like unspecified "gravitational turbulence".

That will get you the effects you want without us running into something that basically eats this star system.
 
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