Auteme
Your post is long, didn’t read it all, but I will say that you weren’t the first person to take issue with the pop culture references in my posts. I used to have a character where breaking fourth wall/making references was kind of his “thing”, or schtick, (to a much, much greater extent than Caltin, from what I’ve read of his posts) and the main complaint was that it disrupted people’s immersion. Looking back, the root of my problem was that I wanted attention, to gain popularity on the site, and to win Internet friends. Or something along those lines, lol. It was typical rookie RP behavior from somebody who didn’t know what she was doing, but was enthusiastic about this fun new medium she had stumbled upon and was willing to try anything.
Anyway,
Caltin Vanagor
, I will say this: I do get an overall impression of maturity and experience from Caltin. He’s a character who clearly has a long and storied history, even if you’re new to Chaos. I don’t think you have anything to worry about with him seeming “important” or not, he’s definitely a guy who’s gonna do his own thing. I also like how he’s known as the “big guy”, or I guess I like how you use that term as a euphemism for him. It’s a good quick and efficient descriptor.
Nimdok’s observation about him being “a bit much” was referring to his tendency to leap into situations recklessly or offer his opinion on something whether he has all the facts or not. He’s a bit of a reckless guy, or comes across that way, but that’s part of the territory with heroes. They jump in headfirst because time is of the essence. You could play with that aspect of his character, like if him rushing headlong into danger without knowing what he’s getting into causes some trouble or tragedy, and he has to learn to look before he leaps.
Also related to that is his sense of not belonging—he is, after all, a man out of time. Maybe he sees a lot of the same chit, nothing changes, but you may want to play more with how strange and unfamiliar the future would be to him. Idk if you have and I just haven’t read it—I have noticed you write about him feeling alone/lonely with all his family and friends long dead, which I like a lot. The awkwardness of his behavior toward Jane in the club works for me because of that, even if it does make him sound a little bit “crazy”.