if they're watching anyways
Don't click the spoiler (not yet, at least). That comes later.
I've asked for feedback a few times, and as much as enjoy the story ideas (and validation that my writing is not trash) I want to get more into the nitty-gritty of writing. While I do enjoy writing on Chaos I also want to improve my writing overall so I can transfer my skills.
So, here are your instructions:
1. Take a look at the posts I've linked below (or some of my other recent content) -- one of them, some of them, all of them, your pick. You don't even need to read the whole thread. Read what you want, but read well.
2. When you're done, come back here and write down your immediate impression of it.
3. Ask yourself: Is the manner in which the character takes their actions clear? Write down that answer in your post -- examples are welcome.
4. Feel free to reread if you want to look more closely.
5. Now you can open the spoiler.
6. Post that feedback.
Threads:
Blackout - Auteme
Justice Prevails - Auteme
Next Generation - Auteme
Darkness Falls - Dorian
Thanks in advance for taking the time to read my stuff and provide feedback!
I've asked for feedback a few times, and as much as enjoy the story ideas (and validation that my writing is not trash) I want to get more into the nitty-gritty of writing. While I do enjoy writing on Chaos I also want to improve my writing overall so I can transfer my skills.
So, here are your instructions:
1. Take a look at the posts I've linked below (or some of my other recent content) -- one of them, some of them, all of them, your pick. You don't even need to read the whole thread. Read what you want, but read well.
2. When you're done, come back here and write down your immediate impression of it.
3. Ask yourself: Is the manner in which the character takes their actions clear? Write down that answer in your post -- examples are welcome.
4. Feel free to reread if you want to look more closely.
5. Now you can open the spoiler.
6. Post that feedback.
Threads:
Blackout - Auteme
Justice Prevails - Auteme
Next Generation - Auteme
Darkness Falls - Dorian
This is something I've been focused on for a while now, ever since I read Stephen King's memoir On Writing (which I highly recommend, even if you're not interested in improving your writing) over the summer. One of the things he advises is avoiding the use of adverbs. The writing and sense of the character should ensure that the reader can visualize how the character does a specific action -- for example, Auteme opens doors gently, as to not disturb anyone or damage the door.
I don't think I've been perfect at avoiding use of adverbs (I like to punctuate thoughts with an "honestly", "really", "probably", or the like when I want to place emphasis, and some adverbs I use aren't obvious) but I do want to improve the clarity of my writing. Efficiency is key. While my writing on Chaos won't have the same character perspective/reader relationship as a book might, it's good practice -- plus, misinterpretation is the bane of all roleplay.
I don't think I've been perfect at avoiding use of adverbs (I like to punctuate thoughts with an "honestly", "really", "probably", or the like when I want to place emphasis, and some adverbs I use aren't obvious) but I do want to improve the clarity of my writing. Efficiency is key. While my writing on Chaos won't have the same character perspective/reader relationship as a book might, it's good practice -- plus, misinterpretation is the bane of all roleplay.
Thanks in advance for taking the time to read my stuff and provide feedback!