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Approved Location The Island of the Giant Ants

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Name: The Island of the Giant Ants.

Image Source: Here
South-shore Beach: google image search (Timber Cove)
The Junko: Here (El Yunque, Puerto rico)
Red Hill: Google Image Search (Haleakala Mountain)
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Classification: Island

Location: Atrisia

Size: 9,104 sq km2

Population: Giant ants and fauna.

Demographics: The island is totally deserted, the only living organic beings in the island are the Giant Ants, fauna and the distinct animals and creatures in the island.


Points of Interest: The island has three major points of interests.

South-shore Beach: A paradise on Atrisia with an amazing sunset and a great Place for exotic fishermen to get rare and expensive catches, however due to the Inhabitants of the island fishermen consider this the galaxies deadliest catch spot. So far south-shore beach in the island has claimed more deaths than any other location.
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The Junko: A natural rain forest the Junko is another paradise spot in the island with hidden waterfalls and a legendary oasis rumored to grant immortal youth. This Oasis is called the Yakrare and no tales of explorers have brought back news of it in three hundred years or so. The Junko is also home to one of the islands biggest giant ant hives making this paradise location very hard to reach.

Yakare: The oasis inside the Junko is a hot springs, the restorative and miracle qualities of the springs have been largely exaggerated and mostly embellished with the tales of fishermen and would-be explorers. The Yakare is a miracle, but one of nature being one of the most beautiful location in the planet and it's waters being fresh and pure.
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Red Hill: Red Hill is a location that is observable from orbit due to it's easy to spot blood red tint. Home to the biggest giant ant colony in the island Red Hill is the primordial location for scientists who wish to study the new species.
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Description: The Island of the Giant Ants is an off beat location in Atrisia of no worthy note until very recently since Mythos became emperor. The island has become a folklore and garnered much attention from tourists and scientists from all over the galaxy due to it housing a new undiscovered species: the giant ants. Already claiming a few dozen lives the Emperor of Atrisia declared the island off-limits for anyone not sporting a royal permit signed by his majesty personally.

Beautiful and breathtaking the Island offers spectacular sights and still lays mostly undiscovered yet much of what is in the island can not be fully explored due to the hostility of it's non-sentient inhabitants. The territorial and aggressive nature of the giant ants has made it impossible for regular explorers not armed to the teeth to be almost guaranteed a one way trip to the afterlife upon their visits.
fishermen have known the location of this island for many decades yet because of the exotic nature of the catch they haul they have kept it a well guarded secret known only to the elite fishermen of Atrisia and their clans.

History: The history of the legendary island has been shrouded in legend and tale not in truth and fact.

The Legend said: A long time ago, a young Atrisian prince decided to wage war against a neighboring planet using the soldiers of atrisia as a horde of warriors. His conquest was largely successful for a long time and Atrisia claimed notoriety and fame because of the young Princes' brutality and his treatment of his soldiers.

One day a sage general of his armies came forth to the young prince to advise him and tell him that his soldiers were not like ants and needed to be treated equally and with respect to their lives , not throwing them away in a vain attempt at glory and conquest.

The prince took the advise of his general as an act of treason and had him executed but before the execution took place the general revealed himself to be a powerful being that had lived for countless millennials and the Prince was stunned at his amazing power.

A celestial in true form, the "sage" used his unlimited power and banished the prince to an island far beyond the mist of Jar'Kai with his entire army and cursed them to be just as they had Acted: like ants.

This legend was old and nothing more than a folk tale dismissed by the ages.... now it is known that the Island exists and that tale might hold some fact hidden within it's words.

Intent: To Create a new Location in the Planet and add to the lore and fauna of Atrisia.
 
[member="Lord Mythos"]

Thanks to this submission, I noticed that "intent" was missing from the template. This is a oversight on our part, however, we will still require it. Please add it to the template, and state why you are creating this geographical landmark.

For the image links, I really like how you’ve included the location’s RL name in brackets. However, we do require the image source link to lead to either the original artist or the site you found the image from. Please edit accordingly.

Lord Mythos said:
Location: Atrisia
For the sake of quick access to anyone who might look at this but not be familiar with the planet, could you include a link to Atrisia's Wookiepedia page here?

Lord Mythos said:
The Junko: A Natural Rain forest the Junko is another Paradise Spot in the Island with hidden Waterfalls and a Legendary Oasis Rumored to Grant Immortal Youth.
Just to clarify, this is just a rumour, right? Or is the intent for this to actually exist? While I can understand and appreciate a desire to keep some things mysterious and mythical-like, something like this will have to be clearly stated in the submission, if it is the case.

Lord Mythos said:
Already calming a few dozen Lives the Emperor of Atrisia declared the Island
Noticed a typo. This should be “claiming”.

Lord Mythos said:
The Territorial and aggressive nature of the Giant Antz has made it impossible for Regular Explorers not armed to the Teeth to be almost guaranteed a one way trip to the afterlife upon their visits.
I see the previous judge asked you to change the "z"s to "s"s. It appears you missed one here.

On the topic of grammatical errors, could you please go over your submission once more and clear it of unnecessary capital letters? :) This only really needs to be present for the start of a sentence, or the name of places or people etc.

Thanks.
 
[member="Lord Mythos"]

Oh, the intent was missing from the template you used! So no worries, not your fault. :)

I'm still going to need you to change the links you provided under "Image Source". Here is an example of an acceptable image source. If you're unable to find something similar, a link to the image search in google images will also suffice.

I see you've worked with the capital letters under "Description" and "History", which is great! It looks better and is much easier to read now. If you could take a quick second look and do the same under "Demographics" and "Points of interest", that would be fantastic. After that, this submission should be good to go!
 
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