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Approved NPC Talsir Vanaeth

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
Intent:
To sub Enyo's former teacher. Talsir taught Enyo how to use the Force and thus played a small, but important role in her development. She is now being reactivated to assist Enyo in training her clone siblings and other Force-sensitive minions and to serve as an adviser. She could conceivably also be used in rps involving Eldorai characters since she offers a different perspective.
Image Credit: Here. 'Dark Lady of the Sith' by Ash7croft. Found on ash7croft.deviantart.com.
Role: Adviser, trainer, engineer.
Permission: N/A
Links: Birth of Fire, Kaeshana, Phaedra Amaryllis.

PHYSICAL INFORMATION
Age:
102
Force Sensitivity: Master
Species:
Eldorai
Appearance: Talsir is not that different from most of her species. Tall and slender, she has pale skin, dark hair, pointed ears and golden eyes. However, her face and the rest of her body are marred by scars. To force her to confess her 'crimes against the state and the Goddess', the Eldorai religious police tortured her with fire and beat her viciously, but she refused to break. Even bacta has not been able to get rid of the markings, and so she favours concealing clothing that covers her entire body.

She dresses rather elegantly when she is not playing around with a wrench. Her face has some rather intricate Eldorai tattoos. However, these are not just there to look good. They also cover vicious scars inflicted on her during her time in jail. She often wears a grey robe, gloves, boots and favours hoods. Not only do these conceal her blemishes, they also make her features hard to read. Moreover, her left eye is sensitive to bright light due to being burnt by an extremely enthusiastic torturer. Talsir is economical in her movements and graceful, though not dainty. She is always armed, usually carrying a lightsabre, a concealed vibroblade and a sidearm on her person.

SOCIAL INFORMATION
Name:
Talsir Vanaeth.
Loyalties: Herself above all. Also Enyo Typhos, Archangel Research and Design,Typhos Clone Family.
Wealth: Comfortable. Talsir is employed by Enyo as a consultant and independent contractor. She provides training for Enyo's siblings as well as other acolytes and consults on starship design. This position is quite well-paid. She also has some loot stashed away. Talsir is no spendthrift and invests well in order to be prepared for hard times.
Notable Possessions:

  • Single yellow-bladed dual phase lightsabre with an intense blade, bifurcating cyclical ignition pulse and other standard systems. Can switch between regular and shoto length. It has a Ghostfire crystal. The hilt is decorated with Eldorai symbols. She also carries a Shoto.
  • Cloak of Hate. Inherited from her Sith Master after she killed him. She wears it with a covering hood.
  • Has a penthouse in Aldera under an assumed name. The place is classy, but she does not spend a lot of time there.
  • Light Freighter
  • TIE/ph Phantom
  • Pendant with a holopic of her dead fiancee engraved in it.
  • Subscription to "Star Lines Galactic: The Journal Which Gives You the Knowledge You Need". A publication that informs readers about starships, the latest trends ad so on. Talsir has written a few articles under a pseudonyme.
Skills:
  • Air Shaping
  • Telekinesis
  • Force Stealth
  • Empathy
  • Force Reflex
  • Force Walk
  • Darkshear
  • Drain Knowledge
  • Dominate Mind
  • Shadow Vision
  • Control Pain
  • Telepathy
  • Lightsabre combat (focus on Makashi)
  • Piloting
  • Starship engineering, design and repair
Personality: Independent, chilly, stern, aloof and cynical. Though she has come a long way from her youth on Kaeshana, Talsir still retains some of the recognisable habits of her culture. To be specific, she has a calm, aloof manner, especially when dealing with non-Eldorai. Unlike many of her race, she has abandoned notions of Eldorai racial superiority. Such beliefs have not withstood the test of reality. Moreover, those who wronged her the most were members of her own people.

However, she is an unrepentant Forcer supremacist. From her point of view, you are either strong or weak. Those who can wield the Force - or Sciia, as the Eldorai call it - bear the mark of greatness. Without power, you are fodder and at the mercy of the mighty. She rejects the dualistic beliefs of Jedi and Sith. To her, Sciia is the inner flame she taps into and not some mystical energy field that binds the universe and controls her destiny. As a teacher, Talsir is stern, though not unkind. She pulls no punches and expects her students to give their all if they want to make something out of themselves.

She feels strong disdain for rigid hierarchies and looks down on those who follow 'leaders' like sheep because they cannot think for themselves. Talsir is an atheist, having lost faith in the Goddess Ashira during her imprisonment. She is disdainful of Eldorai who still cling to what she considers to be a false icon that was created by the powerful to control the gullible. Gods and goddesses are opiate for the masses, nothing more. As a result, she regards those who refuse to question established orthodoxy as deserving of their fate as pawns in someone else's game.

She is prideful and, as the perceptive observer will detect easily, has some deep seated anger and resentment buried inside her. This was not always the case though. A long time ago, she was unfairly branded a rebel and a heretic by the authorities on her homeworld. She suffered for it - and lost her lover. She was tortured and forced to sign a false confession of guilt. She has sworn to get her revenge one day. However, she is indifferent to politics and has little interest in revolutions or in who happens to sit on the throne of the Star Queen of the Eldorai. For this reason, she also has no desire to join Eldorai revolutionary groups such as the Shadow Knights. While a very ruthless woman, Talsir is not without her positive qualities. She is patient, able to play the long game and bide her time, and does have a code of honour.

She does not strike down the weak and helpless unless it gains her an advantage. Moreover, she is not given to pointless or gratuitous cruelty and gives those who fight her a clean death. The exceptions are those persons she wants vengeance on, but in her opinion that's different. Starship engineering is one of Talsir's passions and she's quite good at it. One of her hobbies consists of tinkering with old ships and modifying their systems. She keeps up-to-date with current trends in the shipwright business and is quite proud of her skill as a mechanic. She is a lot more animated than usual when she's talking about engines and spacecraft.

Talsir's relationship with Enyo Typhos is a bit odd. Way back, Talsir was recruited by Archangel to train Siobhan Kerrigan's clone. After all, droids cannot use the Force and Enyo was supposed to be a living weapon. Talsir completed this task, teaching Enyo and her 'twin' Phaedra Amaryllis how to wield the Force. She was stern and chilly, though not unkind. While she may have suspected that Archangel had fed the clones lies to make them obedient, it wasn't her problem. Once the training was complete, they went their separate ways. Enyo returned to Archangel, did terrible things in their name and suffered in equally terrible ways. By the time she broke her chains, she was more machine than woman. Eventually, their paths crossed again.

Today, Talsir serves as trainer for the clone posse Enyo and Amara Zarides liberated from Archangel's clutches. Talsir is not a formal member of Archangel or the Iron Fist Consortium and has no desire to join either - or to 'defile' her body with cybernetics. A Master in her own right, she does not regard Enyo as her boss. Sometimes, she gives her former student advice. In a weird sort of way, Enyo trusts her. Equally, Talsir is a proud of her, though she would never say so.

COMBAT INFORMATION
Weapon of Choice:
Lightsabre, the Force, pistols, conventional bladed weapons, starfighters and small starships.
Combat Function: Talsir is a Master of the Force, a duellist and a pilot. Like most Eldorai Force-users, she is an elementalist. The Force-Sensitives of her race tend to specialise in one particular element, and hers is that of Air. In that regard she can be compared to an Air Shaper. Her connection to the element of air also encompasses the ability to manipulate and generate lightning.

She can generate powerful winds, increase air pressure or vacate a small area of air, summon or manipulate lightning to smite her opponents with electrical discharges. Her mental powers are also potent. The same applies to her ability to shield her mind from mental intrusion. Her telekinetic abilities are well-developed, but focused more on precision than raw destructive power. Talsir is a good pilot, able to pilot speeders, shuttles, freighters and fighters. She has a talent for stealth, sneaking around and so on. Her career as an insurgent has left her with a lot of experience in infiltration, assassination and so on. She possesses the typical racial strengths of her kind. She is an Eldorai and thus more nimble and dexterous than a human. She has impressive hand-eye coordination and is apt at escaping harm by using her agility or moving quietly, and has excellent hearing.

Talsir is proficient in the use of a lightsabre, with a specialisation in Makashi. Her sabreplay is elegant, precise and ruthless. She relies heavily on her footwork to outmanoeuvre opponents and maintains a punishing training regimen. Her physique allows her to be quite acrobatic in combat. But she is a rapier, not a broadsword. Her agility makes her good at Ataru, but she lacks the strength to be good at Djem So. She only has basic skills with ranged weapons. She is good with pistols, but considers ranged weapons beyond that to be beneath her. Thus she does not perform well with them.

Moreover, she suffers from the typical Eldorai racial weaknesses. On average Talsir is physically weaker and is less durable than a human. Thus she cannot rely on brute strength to resolve a confrontation. In melee, she must use speed, precision and finesse. Her sensitive Eldorai hearing makes her more vulnerable to sonic weapons as well as techniques such as Force Scream and Bellow. She is not skilled in the use of heavy weapons.

Ysalamiri and Voidstones are a notable problem for her since they take away her biggest advantage or weaken it. She will be at a disadvantage against an opponent who uses them, especially in close quarters. The hood she wears is not just for concealment. Her left eye is overly sensitive to bright light, courtesy of an enthusiastic Eldorai interrogator who wanted to 'make her see the light'. Literally. By using eyelid clamps and burning magnesium. Talsir is too proud to get her eye replaced. Bright lights can be painful and disorientating for it. This also makes flashbangs more effective, if she is exposed. The same applies to techniques such as Force Blind and Flash.

Strengths:

  • Talsir is a Master of the Force and a very skilled lightsabre duellist. She has a strong command of the element of air, enabling her to summon strong winds, increase air pressure or vacate a small area of air as well summon, channel and manipulate lightning. As a duellist, she is very skilled in Makashi, which plays to her racial strengths. She is a graceful, precise fighter and quick on her feet.
  • She is a highly skilled pilot, particularly with speeders and small starships.
Weaknesses:
  • The hood she wears is not just for concealment. Due to injuries sustained in captivity, her left eye is overly sensitive to bright light. Talsir is too proud to get it replaced. Bright lights can be painful and disorientating for it. Likewise, her sensitive hearing makes her more vulnerable to loud noises and high-pitch frequencies. An example would be sonic weapons.
  • Talsir is no physical powerhouse. In duels she has to rely on agility and finesse rather than brute strength as she is not that strong. She is a rapier, not a broadsword in combat. In contrast to her student Enyo, Talsir is no tank.
  • Limited skill with ranged weapons. Talsir is a good pistol shot, but considers ranged weapons beyond that to be beneath her, as she regards them as 'crude'. As a result, she does not use them a lot. She is not someone to be used in a sniper role.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

It is often claimed that a dictatorship provides its subjects - or citizens, if it pretends to be egalitarian - with security at the price of freedom. This sounds good on paper, but neglects the fact that the common people have no security from the ruling elite that wields absolute power over life and death and can, at any time, choose to have some of its subjects arrested, detained, tortured, sent to a 'labour camp' or executed outright. Without any regard for due process, civic rights and so on.

These days, Talsir is a rather amoral, jaded woman. However, it was not always so. Once upon a time she was a victim. She was born on Kaeshana close to the end of its long period of isolation from the rest of the Galaxy. Her parents belonged to the lower middle class. Her childhood and adolescence were pretty ordinary. While she was a Force-sensitive, or Sciian as the Eldorai called it, she was never conscripted by the Angelii. Like all Sciians, she went to a government school run by the Church of Ashira, where she learned how to control her powers so that she would not become a danger for others. She was reasonably devout to the Goddess, but not a zealot.

Like many young people, she had dreams. Hers were of the stars, for she was fascinated by what lay beyond the confines of her homeworld. Her parents were loving, but concerned when she chose to pursue a rather unorthodox career path: Starship engineering and design. Such new professions were frowned upon in Eldorai society, for the Church preached that there was nothing but darkness outside of Kaeshana, for all non-Eldorai were repulsive demons who could not be allowed to corrupt Ashira's creation. In the light of the fact that the Eldorai's few contacts with outsiders had, for the most part, consisted of fighting off raids from sadistic slavers and pirates, this might be understandable. However, over time it had also become a way for the mighty to justify their iron grip on power.

It was all too easy to label anyone who did not conform as a heretic. Thus it happened to Talsir. By the time Nemesis caught up with her, she'd become engaged to an Eldorai male called Haldir, who shared her passion for exploration and new things. Both planned to set up their own shipping business. However, then Talsir made the mistake of helping an offworlder whose ship had been damaged. Inevitably, she was denounced. These were the suspicious years during the reign of Tirathana VI, and the 'Investigators of Ashira's Truth', were always on the lookout for dissidents. If only because fulfilling quotas looked good on the resume and made promotion swifter.

Haldir was arrested as well, but refused to disavow his fiancee and turn on her. Of course, not reporting unlawful contact with aliens was a grave crime. Talsir urged him to save himself, but was beaten and murdered before her eyes. Talsir also suffered under torture, for her interrogators tried to force her to confess to a long series of imagined crimes. After all, she obviously had to be part of a treasonous network of heretics who sought to murder the rightful Queen and her ministers. Eventually, she signed a piece of paper, after being starved and tormented by a particularly cruel Inquisitor of Ardarvia. A first escape attempt was punished harshly. Fortunately for her, there were bigger fish to fry. She lost faith in Ashira, declaring the goddess to be a fraud.

However, she drew strength from her anger and humiliation. Talsir swore to herself that she would get revenge and never be anyone's pawn. So she began to plot her escape. To avert suspicion, she became good at dissembling, giving several of her captors the impression that she had been broken in. In truth, she was plotting. She was able to get in contact with some prisoners through secret communications, aided by a disgruntled prison guard. Her imprisonment taught her patience. She even feigned submission to the priestess who had burnt her left eye.

All the while she was assessing the weaknesses of the prison system. Finally, she was able to make her escape through use of makeshift tools. Dummy heads, made from painted papier-mâché with hair glued on, were left behind in their cells to deceive the guards when they made their routine cell block head count. As the guards discovered, the escapees had enlarged grille openings in the concrete back walls by using tools fashioned from spoons stolen from the mess hall. Fake grilles had been used to hide the areas of excavation while work was ongoing.

Talsir escaped through a utility corridor and up the back wall of the cell block, using plumbing piping as steps, to the cell block roof and from there through a ventilation shaft to the roof of the building. Talsir's fledgling Force abilities, specifically her aptitude for lightning, allowed her to get through the electrified barbed wire, though it left her with burns. The prison was located on an island, so she and her comrades used a makeshift raft. One of her comrades was shot during their escape and drowned. The weather was a stormy one. Somehow, Talsir and her remaining comrade survived. The two went underground. Unlike Talsir, her remaining ally was a professional Dark Eldorai revolutionary. Talsir wanted revenge, and decided to go underground. Having escaped prison, she was a changed woman - hardened, bitter, resentful and ruthless.

Radicalised during her time in prison, Talsir sought out those who could help her get revenge and empower her: radical Dark Eldorai militants. However, her motivations were far more personal than political. Indeed, she was rather pragmatic about which type of militants she worked with, such as the atheistic Blades of Reason and the fundamentalist Valora's Righteous Army. In the past, she had paid little attention to her Force powers, but now she began to develop them. Her friend was able to introduce her to radical groups. Acting on her advice, Talsir fell in line with the Red Eagles, a rebel group created by Daymana Thael, a former Angelii who had turned rogue after refusing to decimate a unit of soldiers accused of cowardice and collaboration with foreign devils. The Eagles fought an all-out irregular war against the system.

Embittered against the system, Talsir turned to terrorism. Bombings, assassinations, abductions, thefts. After an argument with Daymana Thael, who deemed her too radical, Talsir left and started working with the Caerith Haraya. She organised the theft of several prototype starfighters and managed to strike a blow against her tormentors by blowing up the bureau of the Investigators. A lot of blood was shed during her vengeance campaign, but much of it was innocent. Such as when a rebel group she was working with carried out a series of speeder bombings. An initial attempt to kill the Inquisitor who had tortured her failed.

Eventually Kaeshana underwent a regime change. Queen Tirathana died and her daughter Princess Silaqui took the throne after a brief power struggle. While no liberal, Silaqui had no appetite for wanton purges. Moreover, she wanted to gain the support of the Omega Protectorate, the new power on the block. Especially since they'd put her on the throne. So she declared an amnesty, releasing many political prisoners as a gesture of good will. Some Dark Eldorai radicals laid down their arms, hoping they could achieve change in the system. However, Talsir refused to give up. To her, those who sought accommodation with the Crown were weak.

She participated in the Uprising, when several rebel factions joined forces to march on Santaissa in an attempt to overthrow the Queen. Indeed, she was part of a commando that infiltrated the palace, slaying Firemane and Angelii soldiers. She was part of the strike force that engaged Siobhan Kerrigan and her minions in pitched combat, showing her mettle. However she was defeated by the 'Battering Ram', who unleashed her telekinetic might upon the rebels. Queen Silaqui was assassinated by treasonous bodyguards, but the coup was thwarted.

Anya Venari, Silaqui's sister, took the throne, assuming the regnal name Tirathana VII. Unlike her mother and sibling, Anya had been exposed to the outside world during her time as an exile and wished to bring change to the Eldorai Matriarchy. She realised that the old ways were self-defeating and holding the Matriarchy back. Thus the new Queen would spend the next few years implementing reforms to try and drag the Matriarchy kicking and screaming into a more enlightened era. Of course, she had to face the problem that her reforms went too far for the reactionaries, but not far enough for the radicals.

First she had to secure her throne by cracking down on the Dark Eldorai rebels. Talsir managed to evade capture, going underground. She was able to flee Kaeshana with the help of a foreign smuggler who owed her a favour. The pervasive factionalism of the Dark Eldorai groups vexed her. She swore to never let anyone else control her and began a life as an independent operator. For a while she stayed with the smuggler's gang, before charting an independent course. Her experiences on Kaeshana had taught her that there was no justice in the world unless you made it yourself. There was no benign Goddess sitting in the clouds. Without power, you were helpless fodder.

She became a contractor, working for the likes of the Sith, the Mandalorians and the Black Suns. Aside from her prowess as a Force-user, she also offered her skills as a starship designer and engineer. To further her knowledge, she found employment as an engineer at KDY for a while. Using a cover identity, she went to school again and picked up a ship engineering degree. She reached out to the - often nomadic - communities of Eldorai exiles that had sprung up over the last few centuries, but was mostly disappointed. Too many were focused on dreaming about a revolution on Kaeshana and bickering about what type of government should replace the 'corrupt system'. Others were more practical, but still had rigid hierarchies she did not fit into.

For a while, she hooked up with a rebel organisation called the Knights of Truth. These renegades thought of themselves as a government in exile. In a way, they can be considered to be a precursor to the Shadow Knights. However, whereas the Shadows actually did stuff, these 'Knights' spent most of their time frequenting the cafes of Corellia and debating how they could 'bring power to the Eldorai people'. When their leader Karina Maerks began to write a book, Talsir left in disgust.

Becoming increasingly pragmatic about who she worked with, she entered the services of a Sith Lord called Darth Schrecken. She caught his eye while serving on his personal warship. When it was stranded in Otherspace and assaulted by a superior force of Charon, she proved her worth by fixing the ship's hyperdrive and unmasking the deep cover agent who had sabotaged it. Schrecken rewarded her with a promotion to apprentice, then proceeded to torture the engineer who'd been unable to solve the technical problem.

Said minion ended up being driven insane with Force Insanity to encourage the others. A good Eldorai lady would have refused to take orders from a maleling, but Talsir was a practical sort and no longer held back by the beliefs of her people. However, she found the light and dark concept bizarre and did not pay any real attention when the Sith prattled on about how the dark legions would eclipse the light and cover the Galaxy in darkness. It was simply too melodramatic to take seriously.

Though affiliated with the One Sith, Schrecken led his own cult of deluded fanatics and had grand ambitions. Such as making himself an immortal emperor. Strangely, his victims tended to be people a good deal weaker than him. He was also a twisted sadist who enjoyed torturing his victims or turning them into alchemical monstrosities. Though secretly disgusted with him, Talsir led several raids in his name. After she had proved herself by raiding a Jedi enclave to obtain a holocron, he sent her on a quest to obtain several artefacts for him. He kept monologuing about how these items would allow both of them to acquire unlimited power and fulfil their destiny, but she grew suspicious.

Performing her own research, she slowly realised that the Sith was dying and sought a new vessel to prolong his life...her. Feigning obedience, she acquired the devices for him. But when the moment came, she sabotaged the ritual, redirecting his spirit into that of a conveniently placed beast. Not taking any chances, she slew it, while he ranted about how she had ruined his ascension and would pay for her insolence. With Darth Schrecken out of the way, she coopted his resources. She used the tomes he had left behind to further her understanding of what he called the dark side of the Force. She rejected the theology, but took what was practical for her.

His resources were put to good use when finally, after many years, she returned to Kaeshana. Performing a one-woman raid, she abducted the Inquisitor who had tormented her. By now the Investigators' power had been diminished by the Queen's reforms, but her torturer had not been punished for any of her crimes. Staging a mock 'trial' to mirror her own, Talsir tortured the Inquisitor until she confessed. With the help of a hacker friend, Talsir broadcast the trial over the 'net so that her people could see. Those who had access, at any rate. Then she killed the Inquisitor. However, she was unable to get back at the noble mastermind, an aristocrat called Valriya, for she had to flee the planet again.

When Akala went on her wild rampage, Talsir was one of those who were abducted. Waking up in the Netherworld, she was confronted by the ghosts of the past. One of them was her fiancee, who urged her to change. She was too far gone. The experience confirmed to her that there was no Goddess. A bit shaken by the experience, she found her way back to the real world, emerging through a portal on Alderaan. In her absence, much of her network had disintegrated, but she patiently rebuilt it.

It was around this time that Talsir was contacted by a shadowy organisation called Archangel Research and Design. It was soon apparent to her that they were HRDs, though she did not care. Eldorai conservatives declared droids to be a violation of Ashira's precepts of life, but their opinion was irrelevant to her. They offered her employment as a trainer for their two Force Clones. One of them happened to be the duplicate of Siobhan Kerrigan, an ally of the Eldorai Monarchy. This motivated her to accept, though the generous remuneration also helped. Originally, the HRDs had hired Darth Shadow, an old nemesis of Siobhan, for the job. However, his apparent demise at the hands of the Dark Jedi forced them to look for an alternative. Talsir had the right resume. Moreover, she was less likely to try and lure the clones away from Archangel in order to turn them into her minions. She was a professional, and this was a job to her.

Talsir met Enyo and Phaedra Amaryllis on Gehenna, where she put the two young, naive clones through a harsh training programme. She was a stern taskmistress, but a fair one. She taught the clones how to use their anger as a weapon and harness the Force. Enyo faced Reavers, wild beasts and the ghosts of those who had been trapped on this hellish planet since the great battle between the Bando Gora and the Protectorate. The Eldorai taught her how to devour the spirits. Talsir also encouraged her to project her anger on Siobhan and view her as an abomination. This was what the droids wanted, but it also suited her own purposes.

As Taldir told Enyo during one of their visits to the battlefield, “Here Kerrigan won a great victory here, though you can see the path of glory is liberally mingled with the corpses of the common and lowly. To some the march of history grinds people down to nothing, a means to an end. When people look back they see ‘great’ victories not in the way we might. They see great as momentous, no matter the lakes of blood spilt to achieve it. Kerrigan is strong. But you can be stronger…one mind, one purpose, one goal – the complete and utter destruction of Siobhan Kerrigan and all her rancid empire. Whilst she indulges in flattery and sycophancy you will become stronger until the time is right. People with no ambition or power flock to those who have both. Blind devotion is what she demands, and she provides rewards and victory…to any who survive.”

“Those who become leaders are a special class of people, especially those who grasp at power they were not born to. Either they want revenge and power over the galaxy for their disadvantage, or they think they know better than anyone else how to run it. The worst kind are those who are both, and Kerrigan is of that type.”


Once Enyo was abandoned in the wastelands with minimal resources and ordered to find her way to an abandoned Protectorate base and obtain a trinket. All the while, she was hounded by droids, beasts, spirits and the elements. By the time she reached the location, she was near exhaustion. There, Talsir engaged her in a duel. Enyo held her own, drawing upon her anger, and was able to severely injure her trainer before ultimately losing. Talsir proclaimed her ready. The HRDs picked up the clones and paid Talsir. Her part in their story seemed to be over. Talsir returned to her own affairs. To give herself a cover and a more stable source of income, she invested her funds into a shipping business. Though small, it gave her something stable.

Much time passed before she met her former apprentice again. Kaeshana was devastated by an asteroid, most Eldorai went on an Exodus. Talsir heard the news, but did not care to get involved in Space Elf politics. Eventually she heard rumours about a Cyborg who wore the face of Siobhan Kerrigan and was making a name for herself in the underworld.

She received another offer from Archangel to train a fresh batch of clones and deduced that Enyo had escaped their clutches. Seeing the writing on the wall, she declined and went underground. However, her former student had not forgotten about her old teacher. When master and student crossed paths in a bar on Vorzyd, where Talsir had business, the Eldorai expected Enyo to be vengeful and took the appropriate precautions. However, instead Enyo offered her a job. As she had trained her, Talsir should train her siblings and offer her counsel.

Talsir accepted, with some strings attached. She was no minion and would never be one. And she would definitely not defile her body with cybernetics and machine parts, unlike Enyo's goons. In return for her help, she would receive a generous payment and Enyo's aid in hunting down the last people on her kill list. Thus a deal was made. The Eldorai also aided Enyo in her takeover of Archangel. Presently, Talsir is still at Enyo's side, though she also engages in independent pursuits. Aside from being a trainer and advisor, she also makes use of her talents as an engineer.
 
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Hey there I'll be reviewing this submission today.

  • It's looking good, however I do feel as though she's a little heavy in the combat strengths department. Aside from the fact that the current S/W ratio is 5:4, I can't help but feel she's a bit of a jack-of-all-trades. Skilled in the Force, in Dueling, in Stealth, in Piloting/Mechanics, at using blasters and explosives. I'd like to see this a little more balanced out, either by toning down the amount of things she's overly proficient in, or adding another relevant weakness.

[member="Enyo Typhos"]
 
[member="Asha Hex"]


Hi there. I'm not sure why you list mechanics as a combat strength since it has no direct combat applicability, as you generally do not carry out repairs in the middle of a fight (aside from the occasional 'I fixed the hyperdrive' situation, I suppose). However, I see your point. I have carried out the following edits:


  • Nerfed her piloting skill a bit. She's good with fighters and noncombat ships such as freighters and shuttles, but nothing bigger than that.
  • Reduced her ranged weapons proficiency. She's good with pistols. But other ranged weapons and explosives are something she considers a bit 'beneath' her since she is a bit of a snob and thus she is not proficient in them. Removed demolitions from skill list.
  • Also added this weakness: The hood she wears is not just for concealment. Her left eye is overly sensitive to bright light, courtesy of an enthusiastic Eldorai interrogator who wanted to 'make her see the light'. Literally. By using eyelid clamps and burning magnesium. Talsir is too proud to get her eye replaced. Bright lights can be painful and disorientating for it. This also makes flashbangs more effective, if she is exposed.
 
[member="Enyo Typhos"]

The mention of mechanics was more to emphasize the jack-of-all-trades feeling, naturally that has no part in her combat role.

Regardless thanks for working with me on this.

Approved, Pending Secondary.
 
[member="Neri Rashal"]

Completed edits. Submission is ready for judging.

Summary:

Brought submission in line with new template.

Updated Affiliation, Personality, Skills, Combat Function, Possessions and History.
 
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