Approved NPC Ri Ntima irza

[Vandra Zambrano]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: To make a guard unit for the Zambrano family
• Image Credit: https://wallpapersafari.com/w/yVUvjS/
• Role: Body guards for the Zambrano family
• Permissions: N/A
• Links: N/A

GENERAL INFORMATION

• Unit Name: Ri Ntima irza
• Affiliation: TSEand the Zambrano Family
• Classification: Elite Infantry
• Equipment:

Armor: Red and black Beskar'kandar with Round shields made from Beskar with Kinetic dampeners

Weapon: Long spears with the handle made out of Ori’rami’kad Wood from the Ori'ramikad Tree to make it light to utilize on the field while the spear head is made out of Beskar mixed with Cortosis with a molecular edge to add it extra piercing power.

• Description: They can be identified by their large stature, Bronze skin and there spears and circular shields. They mostly are tasked with guarding members of the family less they are tasked to the battle field in which case the only thought on there mind is the duties they have been assigned by either the emperor himself Gunnr Zambrano and some of there children. They have been geared to take hits and serve as sponges for rank and file or heavy attack patterns, There fanaticism makes it so that nothing deters them from there goal and they will do anything they are told to do no matter what it is or what the cost maybe.

COMBAT INFORMATION:

• Unit Size: Medium
• Unit Availability: Rare
• Unit Experience: Elite
• Combat Function:
  
  There functions in combat vary form bottle necking the enemy or going into a shield wall formation to protect from ranged warfare, They serve as a support unit for the Zambrano family only obeying what the empress's tell them to do as well as give there life if need be to protect them from harm. They act separately from other parts of a larger force mostly going off and splitting away to do whatever it is they are tasked to do, They never retreat no matter how bad the odds are against them unless they are ordered too. They thrive off combat in there every day lives whether they are in combat or not they always test there limits.

Strengths:

• Mental Immunity: Due to the unit drafting only mentally immune Epicanthix to their ranks, the entire unit is completely immune to mental warfare
• Fanatics: They are fiercely loyal to the sith and the Zambrano family to the point that if they were asked to cut off their own hand they would do so without hesitation.
• Physically Fit: Due to the Epicanthix culture built on physical training and combat readiness each member is physically strong and quick and agile on the field of battle and are always ready to be unleashed onto the field of battle

Weaknesses:

• Fanaticism: Their desire to prove themselves and appease there masters makes retreat in their mines a impossibility thus they would rather choose death over giving ground to the enemy.
• Extreme Temperatures: Due to the heavy armor they have to wear there efficiency is almost halved when in areas of extreme cold of heat then they would be in more acclimate temperatures.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Even though the Zambrano family had more guards then what to do with they could never have enough so a unit of 300 of Panatha's strongest was selected and trained in intense and grueling training that would test every aspect of there body and mind to work together in synergy and with other units of the military if they must to accomplish whatever goal Gunnr Zambrano and Darth Carnifex ask of them. They were put through a great deal of conditioning until there loyalty was that of a fanatic to a religion, They would give there lives if they must for the Zambrano family and to protect or carry out there duties. They spar with real weapons with each other making sure not to kill but maiming and injuries are abundant in there brutal sparing matches to keep up there combat prowess and physic they would rather die a painful death then betray there masters, They know nothing of retreat and will give there lives if need be to accomplish their tasks and protect the family and the Emperor himself.

These warriors will only be seen on the battlefield on special assignment or protecting a V.I.P assigned by either the Emperor or Gunnr Zambrano or their children rarely will they be on the field unless such tasks are assigned to them, but they will never retreat unless ordered by the empress's or the emperor himself and their children and they know only the loyalty to the family and the empire till death take them.

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

Vandra Zambrano Under review

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

Vandra Zambrano Hey there! Nice guys you've got there Let's go over this submission:

• In Out of Character Information, in Links, Ri Ntima irza is not hyperlinked to anywhere.
• In General Information, in Affiliation, Please link to the TSE faction page. If a minor faction for the Zambranos exists as well, please link to that too.
• In Combat Information, for Unit Size, there is no need to specify the number. Codex does not operate on exact numbers and it's completely fine to just leave the word Medium there without specification.
• For your Strengths, the Wookiepedia entry of the Epicanthix states that "Some Epicanthix possessed a natural unconscious talent to shield their minds from Force-assisted mental tricks, influence, domination, and mind reading, with the talent being widespread enough that the Minister of Intelligence during the time of the Sith Empire sought out the Epicanthix for use as spies". I'm quoting this here, because your phrasing ("Due to the unit being mostly comprised of Epicanthix they are impervious to mental warfare") which could lead a reader to believe that all Epicanthixes are resistant to it and protect others too. The phrasing here needs to be edited so that readers understand it as intended. You can of course keep their mental immunity in tact, but then just specify that only the Epicanthixes who have the immunity are brought into this unit.

I can easily see these guys as an awesome plot element, but we just need to tighten it up a wee bit. Please tag me back once the edits are done so that I can approve this submission

 

[Vandra Zambrano]

Scherezade deWinter edited

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

Vandra Zambrano Thank you very much for the edits!

There is only one point we need to go over before this can be approved:

From your Strengths:

Mental Immunity: Due to the unit being mostly comprised of Epicanthix they are completely immune to mental warfare

This makes it sound like them being Epicanthix is what makes them immune to mental warfare, but, that is not the case, since Epicanthix aren't all immune to mental welfare at all, though it is a common trait.

A phrasing that would explain it better would be something along the lines of, "Due to the unit drafting only mentally immune Epicanthix into their ranks, the entire unit is completely immune to mental warfare."

There are a few other ways to go about it, but I believe this is the intent you're aiming for.

Please edit that in or a version of it in your own words, and then I'll be glad to approve this submission

 

[Vandra Zambrano]

Scherezade deWinter fixed

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

Vandra Zambrano Thank you very much Approved!