Okay, so I know what I said may have just sounded awful, but I promise I'm not just trying to poo poo all over everything. No one likes that.
However, I did get the sense that the purpose of this thread was to say "okay, what do I do?" Now, I'm not a conventional person and neither are most people here so naturally we ignored your guidelines and just threw our two cents at you. Because America. Also because I don't give a rats butt about your planet (sorry) and can offer completely objective advice from doing my research on the events that led up to this point.
So, let me level with you and let me emphasize this is in NO WAY an attack on you as a writer or a person. I know your character probably isn't evil and that's because the world isn't black and white, even here in the land of make believe. But your character did some very questionable things. Like, Cecily would probably want her put on trial. Anyway, the best thing for your character to do might be to just say "hey I screwed up, I did ya wrong, I'm gonna just leave you to your devices and peace out." And then go do something awesome somewhere else to redeem herself.
Take Cecily for example. I set out to make her lawful good and when she was the defacto if second most powerful leader in the Republic, she did some pretty questionable things. Like make back door deals with corrupt politicians and stuff. Anyway, after she was captured and did some soul searching and escaped she had the chance to go back and probably could have made a case for the chancellory BUT it was not in her best interest. So she went to naboo and started doing missionary work instead. And now she is a much much better character.
So, take the crappy criticism with a grain of salt but look for the nugget of good advice in every grain. Or something.
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