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Approved Species Nocnafuria

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Kitty

The Attention Seeker

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a creature to form a bond with Kitty and serve as a director counter to her raging beast form. While also proving opportunities for character development for both involved and for some amusing banter.
  • ​Image Credit: [https://minskujuv.artstation.com/projects/x4gx4 created by Minea Juntura character Toothless property of DreamsWorks
  • Canon: N/A
  • Links: N/A

GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Nocnafuria
  • Designation: Semi-Sentient
  • Homeworld: Dathomir http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Dathomir
  • Language: Dragonic
  • Average Lifespan: 2,000
  • Estimated Population: Rare their numbers are scattered.
  • Description: A large winged reptile with black or white scales. It has a far sleeker shape than that of others considered to be dragons with more of an aerial design.

PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Breathes: Type 1 atmosphere
  • Average height of adults: 1.8 meters
  • Average length of adults: 10 meters 5 of which is tail
  • Scale color: Black and White
  • Hair color: N/A
  • Distinctions: Nocna Furia are a sleek and agile dragon species that are built for life in the skies. Their scales are almost always black blending them in with the night though occasionally a recessive gene will cause them to be white. Their eyes can range from 3 different vibrant colors from blue, to green, and finally a recessive purple gene. Their wingspans are the same length as the entirety of their body 10 meters from wing tip to wing tip and they have 2 sets of fins on their tail to provide exceptional flight control and agility. The first largest pair of fins are at the very base of their tail and are used primarily for stability compensating for any mistakes and adjusting for air currents. These are not necessary for flight but would make flying difficult for the dragon like a human hobbling around on one leg. The second and smaller pair of fins are located at the very tip of the tail. These are used in the steering of the dragon and anything but flying in a straight line would be impossible the base fins can only compensate so much. The tail itself is thick and while the fins are folded can be used to propel the creature through the water. Males are slightly larger and stronger while the females are slightly smaller and faster with an even more sleek appearance. Otherwise there is no other secondary sex characteristics to distinguish them.
  • Races: N/A
  • Strengths:
  • Tough Scales: The scales of a Nocnafuria are very strong, resistant to average small arms slug throwers or blasters. As one scale cracks though the rest around it become weaker and it isn't long before they are poking holes. Anything above average will also just puncture right through.
  • Evolved for flight: Nocnafuria are agile and quick fliers capable of navigating their way though a light forest or quick dives and exits out of a tense one.
  • Size=Strength: The size of a Nocnafuria ensures they can overpower most things that threatens them. Sharp teeth and razor claws make short work of many daring to mess with one.
  • Instinctual Intelligence: Nocnafuria are gifted with both the instincts to survive and the intelligence to thrive. Though the two are times at odds with each other most the time it serves to their benefit.
  • Hyper Senses: Finding prey from above a swamp or forest is not easy. The Nocnafuria have evolved very advances senses. Eyes with perfect night vision, a nose than pick out a snake lurking in the water, and hearing to locate a mouse hiding in the vegetation.
  • Fireball: Mostly used as a defense Nocnafuria have two glands in their throat that spews a chemical mixture that combusts upon mixing. It also has a unique property in which by keeping their mouth closed and compressing the mixture it forms a liquid that can be fired out as a projectile with very explosive results on impact. They have the capacity to spew a steady stream of fire for 4 minutes and each explosive projectile consumes 30 minutes of this reservoir, meanimg a maximum of 8 shots before empty. Each day assuming food is readily available they regain a minute worth in their reserves.
  • Stealth: Although large Nocnafuria are masters of stealth. Primarily they can fly silently through the air and ambush from the skies with the cover of night. But they are also quick on their feed and agile on the ground as well. Able to ambush prey as well as the feline species known well for their ambushing prowess. Their sense allow them to keep track of their prey while the themselves are out of view and mind. This is a natural skill and without anything to hide in or around it's going to be easy to notice the large creature.
  • Weaknesses:
  • Ectothermic: Nocnafuria are cold blooded creatures and require heat to give them energy. Depending on how cold the environment is they can be incapable of flight.
  • Quadruped Beast: Nocnafuria do not have any dexterous digits their feet designed for walking and clawing and their sharp talons/claws for killing and holding the prey. In a galaxy full of advance technology they are incapable of using it. No weapons, no tools, no space travel, nothing.
  • A downed dragon is a dead dragon: The wings and fins of a Nocnafuria are extremely sensitive and delicate. The weakness is necessary to feel the air and change of currents. But they have no armor and are the easiest way to bleed them out. In addition damage to the wings or tails tip fins will prevent flight. In their natural habitat this would likely can lead to death by starvation. The pain can also be incapacitating.
  • Hyper Senses: ​On the reverse sensitive senses is also bad as too much stimulation particularly from multiple sources can be debilitating. Making flying or concentrating in general difficult or impossible. This is the quickest way to anger a Nocnafuria.
  • Size=Complications: Nocnafuria are a lot larger than the average sentient creature. They would not adapt well to the majority of buildings and ships.
  • CULTURE
  • Diet: Any meat and can scavange when forced to but prefers fresh fish.
  • Communication: Grunts and growls of the dragonic language. Their vocal cords are incapable of producing noises essential to most other languages and although they can learn to understand things like common they can not speak it themselves. On the other side only races or individuals with particularly sensitive hearing can pick up the nuances of the dragonic language to understand it.
  • Technology level: Primitive they rely upon their natural gifts to survive and get about. Lack of thumbs or dexterous digits prevents them from using tools.
  • Religion/Beliefs: N/A
  • General behavior: Nocnafuria's are typically nocturnal hunters with the exception of the white ones. They use their natural camouflage and agile flying to dive into swamps and forests dodging trees and vines to snatch or pin prey below. They are apex predators both in the sky and on land however their numbers are very few as the females only lay single egg a year. The hatchlings are very vulnerable to other predators till they reach at least a fourth of adult size at their 5th year. Even then their survival isn't guaranteed till they hit half their size on the 15th year. The parents will be very diligent in raising the hatchling until this time. To reach full adult size takes 40 years at which point they will stop growing. Matting rituals involve elaborate dances in the air and finalize with a death plummet from high up and not breaking off till they nearly reach the ground.
  • There are two primary strategies used in natural re-population. Either create tons of babies to insure at least some of them survive or direct one's energy to raising a few. In creatures of intelligence the latter is the most common as their development takes longer. This is not so much the case with Nocnafuria instead the extreme hostility and predatation present on the planet almost guarantees death for the unsupervised young. Extreme care and parenting is take to insure survival. Despite their position as the apex predator it is for this reason that they have remained relatively rare. Nocnafuria keep very close immediate family ties but tend not to hang out with cousins and other extended relatives. Mostly due to competing resources. They are large creatures that require a lot of land and food. Nocnafuria ignore other sentient creatures because they have nothing to offer and only trouble has come from dealings with them.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION
There aren't many points of historical significance through the Nocnafuria's existence. Their nature of tight family groups met the only drama going was that between small families. Though between only small families any violence towards their own kind is a big deal as their numbers as a species are so low. It is extremely rare for any battles among their own species to occur. However there is one event that must be told. It's significance far out weighing what a couple families could do. Although they shared a planet with other sentient races the Nocnafuria avoided them. However inevitably a naive Nocnafuria fell into the clutches of a native Zabrak. This Zabrak was particularly cunning and convinced the Nocnafuria to gather others and form a family not related by blood. He promised any who came, protection and food. He specifically targeted the young and in return simply asked that they reveal the location of their families so that he may offer them the same protection. His cult following of Nocnafuria never got very popular. He just could never offer them what they wanted or what they already had. The only families that were susceptible were those with infertile territory where little prey was available. The information was all the Zabrak needed though as he had a gang of mercs hunt them down for their scales which were a fantastic resource for flexible and strong armor.


As families of Nocnafuria began to disappear they were quick to find the culprit. A majority of the Nocnafuria that were left banded together to prevent the extinction of their species which if things continued would be inevitable. They quickly snuffed out the Zabrak and his mercenaries pretty easily. However in doing so without any diplomatic notice or explanation as they weren't involved with the politics of the planet they caused a war with them an the other sentient. Nocnafuria were considered extremely dangerous and the other native sentients become terrified of them as a result of this war. Their physical destructive abilities, natural stealthy and guerrilla tactics approach combined with their intelligence and organization made them a force to be reckoned with...occasionally. Their organization wasn't that great it was just a lot better than say wolves but not as good as an established military and stable hierarchy. On top of that their population was very small in comparison. It wasn't long before they were on the brink of extinction and focused simply on going into hiding. Thankfully that was something they were good at and the other native sentients forgot about them as time passed. Very slowly they rebuilt their numbers and again lived in the wilderness far away from trouble.
 
[member="Kitty"]

So, there is a lot of things going on here and that is fine, but I need to clarify one thing before we dig deep into this.

I am not super comfortable with a talking dragon species, unless you can link me something in canon that supports that? It reminds me a bit too much of Lords of the Rings etc. So let me know if you have anything in canon that backs that, so we can move on.
 
[member="Kitty"]

While I am okay with a sentient dragon species that are purely made as NPCs, the Duinuogwuin spoke in their own language:

Duinuogwuin was the native language of the Star Dragons. It was a series of hissing sibilants and guttural growls. Most other species could not reproduce the language with their vocal cords.
From the wikia page. So, if you remove the ability to talk Common, I will be more okay with this not being a Smaug expy. Once you do that we will get into the meat of things.
 
[member="Kitty"]



Communication: Grunts and growls of the dragonic language. Though with practice they can speak Common as well though doing so takes a lot of energy.
You forgot to change it here as well.

​Image Credit: https://www.artstation.com created by Minea Juntura character Toothless property of DreamsWorks
Instead of a link to the main artstation page I need a link to the art page itself.

Size=Strength: The size of a Nocnafuria ensures they can overpower anything that threatens them. Sharp teeth and razor claws make short work of anyone daring to mess with one.
I will need this to be a bit less absolute than it is right now. If you can weaken the language to something like: "It can overpower most threatens against them." "Make short work of many that dare to mess with one."

Or something similar like that.

Fireball: Mostly used as a defense Nocnafuria have two glands in their throat that spews a chemical mixture that combusts upon mixing. It also has a unique property in which by keeping their mouth closed and compressing the mixture it forms a liquid that can be fired out as a projectile with very explosive results on impact.
Is there a recovery time? A duration? Or can they just spit fire as long as they want without any need to recover?

Stealth: Although large Nocnafuria are masters of stealth. Primarily they can fly silently through the air and ambush from the skies with the cover of night. But they are also quick on their feed and agile on the ground as well. Able to ambush prey as well as the feline species known well for their ambushing prowess. Their sense allow them to keep track of their prey while the themselves are out of view and mind.
I assume that they can still be seen normally without any cloaking ability? Ergo, if the terrain isn't accommodating they can still be seen.

Hyper Senses: ​On the reverse sensitive senses is also bad as too much stimulation particularly from multiple sources can be debilitating. Making flying or concentrating in general difficult or impossible. This is the quickest way to anger a Nocnafuria.
More often than not anger is not really a weakness in battle when it comes to RP battle. If you replace this with something that says that overwhelming their senses can incapacitate them for periods of time, I will be okay with this weakness. But right now it doesn't balance things.

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Tag me once you do these things and I will check it over again.
 

Kitty

The Attention Seeker
I apologize for a lack of a detailed response internet is down and I have to use my phone. Strength was edited I should have caught that myself my bad. Fire was given limits. Communication properly adjusted. The only thing I haven't yet adjusted is the hypersenses. It's already noted to be debilitating with loss of concentration. The anger part isn't so much as a part of the weakness as it is a note about the creature just as you or me would likely be driven and by a constant nail over chalkboard sound. [member="Jairus Starvald"]
 
[member="Kitty"]

I think something went wrong, because if you click your link it currently goes to the 'how to source an image' thread in the Codex forum. I'd suggest removing the hyperlink completely and reapplying it. Let me know if you need any help with it.
 
[member="Kitty"]

As per the second chance, I do not feel comfortable approving this as a sentient, please change it to semi sentient. Also introducing something as an apex predator to the dathomiran ecosystem, I suggest mentioning that they're rare, but their numbers are scattered. This would explain how they've co-existed with other predators in the area. IE: Rancors and the like.
 

Kitty

The Attention Seeker
Was already rare and were already scattered but my apologies for not including the seccond part in the estimated population area. Maybe I'll just roll with a Duinuogwuin despite how ugly looking it is. Would be a fitting companion for a sith. Since some of you guys got some weird issues with dragons despite all the other bestial races of Starwars and the strange abilities they poses. But whatever might as well get this finished. Edited.
[member="Allyson Locke"]
 
[member="Kitty"]

What you've basically created was a pretty version of the duinuogwuin. They don't speak basic either.

Also I don't appreciate the slight passive aggression you've displayed with the previous judge and now me. We ask for simple edits that help form the submission into the standard. Ill approve this, but in the future please be aware of this.
 
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