Approved Starship Mach-1 Faction Transport

[Varloc]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: For Transport for Faction Members
• Image Source: none
• Canon Link: none
• Permissions: none
• Primary Source: none

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: Order of the Force Production company
• Affiliation: Darth Varloc, The Order of the Force
• Model: Double Engine Armed Transport
• Production: Limited
• Material: Alusteel hull, and other starship components.

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Armed Transport
• Length: 80 Meters
• Width: 20 Meters
• Height: 14 Meters
• Armament: average. Two Foward Laser Cannons, Two Medium Blaster Turrets.
• Defenses: High.
• Hangar Space: None.

50m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 0 | High: 0 | Very High: 0 | Extreme: 0 ]
100m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 0 | High: 0 | Very High: 1 | Extreme: 2 ]
200m [Base: 0 | Very Low: 0 | Low: 0 | Average: 1 | High: 2 | Very High: 3 | Extreme: 4 ]

• Hangar Allocations: None
• Maneuverability Rating: low
• Speed Rating: High
• Hyperdrive Class: 2 Average

STANDARD FEATURES

• Two Foward Laser Cannons, two medium blaster turrets
• Standard Deflector shield Generator
• Standard Twin Ion Engines
• Class 2 hyperdrive
• Standard Lifesupport Systems
• Standard Navagation Systems
• Standard Repulsorlift Engines
• Standard sensor and Targeting systems
• Can enter atmosphere and land

ADVANCED SYSTEMS

• None

STRENGTHS

• Has the ability to outrun other ships of same size
• Has the ability to fight off other ships, that dont have to high of a fire magnitude

WEAKNESSES

• Has trouble when in direct fire
• Has bad maneuverability

DESCRIPTION
It is grey and is pointed. When seen flying its Twin Engines glow brightly. It has some windows but because it was made for battle and defense it has not that many. Its turrets are placed so it can protect itself from enemy behind it. The ship had trouble in the designing of it, because the ship had to carry troops, and it should be fast enough to out run ships.
It can carry about 25-35 troops and only needs a crew of four, a pilot, an co-pilot/engineer, a navigator and a gunner.

 

[Varloc]

Avo
Awaiting approval

 

[Vora Kaar]

Varloc

Read the Rules of the Factory. You are not allowed to bump your own submission when waiting for a judge to approve or deny it.

You will have to wait for a judge to get to this like everyone else.

 

[Shuklaar Kyrdol]

Varloc

So, more than a few issues here, unfortunately. I'm just going to list them out in good old list format style.

1. The link to your image cannot be listed under primary source, that's for a wookie article or other source of information upon which you're basing your submission on.
2. Please link your production company, faction and your character.
3. Please list more than Alusteel under materials, clearly the transport isn't just a literal flying block of alusteel. If you're unaware of what else you'd like to specify, just list 'starfighter components'.
4. I would not constitute two laser cannon turrets and two medium blaster turrets as a high rating.
5. You are two ratings over, please lower two ratings.
6. You're missing a hyperdrive rating.
7. In your strengths, please use less absolute wording. Try, 'has the potential to outrun pursuers' rather than what what you've written.
8. The description is very lackluster, please try filling it out a little more. Mention something about the history of the craft's use or development, that should help.

Tag me once you've made these changes.

 

[Varloc]

Fixed
Shuklaar Kyrdol

 

[Shuklaar Kyrdol]

Almost there. You still need to link your faction and character. You need to put the hyperdrive rating on there. Just try and flesh out the strengths and weaknesses more, it's still a little vague. Varloc

 

[Varloc]

Fixed
Shuklaar Kyrdol

 

[Shuklaar Kyrdol]

Looks alright. Thank you for working with me on this. Pending mentor approval. Visanj T'shkali

 

[Visanj T'shkali]

Shuklaar Kyrdol
Varloc
APPROVED