What I see:
--Run on sentences: Some of your sentences are hard to follow. The verbs can vacillate between tenses, which doesn't help too much either.
--lots of post body: you put a lot into your posts, give a lot of effort and its very clear that you are trying hard. I appreciate this-
--Unique character concept: Not everyone plays a Tusken raider. Interesting choice, adding Jedi to the mix makes for an even more unique flavor
--PTSD: You seem to play it believable enough, the only thing that I could ask for is to add the hyper-vigilant state to your character. According to the DSM-5 that is the hallmark of PTSD, not flashbacks.
What I'd like to see:
--Verb tense continuity.
--Shorter sentences
--A few more descriptive words please. Use dem adverbs and adjectives please so we can know how things are happening.
All in all, your doing alright. Cheers.
[member="Jakkor Kess"]
