Approved Tech Ciryc'saca | Kalðr Ísbjørn's Slugthrower Revolver

[Kalðr Ísbjørn]

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: Revolver for Kalðr Ísbjørn
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• Canon Link: (Please link the canon link if applicable canon item.)
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• Primary Source:
  • Slugthrower

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: Kalðr Ísbjørn's Grandfather
• Affiliation: Kalðr Ísbjørn (X)
• Market Status: Closed-Market
• Model: Ciryc'saca
• Modularity: Yes
• Production: Unique
• Material:
  • Beskar
  • Carbon
  • Plas-bonded Ostrine
  • Revolver Parts
  • Veshok Wood Grip

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Slugthrower Revolver
• Size: Average
• Weight: Average
• Ammunition Type: Slugs
• Ammunition Capacity: Large
• Effective Range: Long Range
• Rate of Fire: High
• Damage Output: High
• Recoil: Average

SPECIAL FEATURES

• High-Carbon Beskar/Ostrine Alloy
• Six Chambers hold two shots each for 12 rounds total

STRENGTHS

• Beskar/Ostrine Alloy: Keeps the gun cool, so it never overheats. Very sturdy and resistant.

WEAKNESSES

• Ostrine: Cannot be held without protection, or it can cause frostbite on exposed flesh.

DESCRIPTION
This weapon was created by Kalðr Ísbjørn's grandfather with the same alloy as G'ahycaya and Htagir'Jorir and is effective for hunting and for self-defense. Two bullets in each chamber, with two triggers for each of the two, means two shots can be fired in rapid succession. The Plas-bonded Ostrine in the alloy causes a chilling effect that absorbs heat, ensuring that the weapon doesn't overheat. This also makes it extremely cold to the touch, and can potentially cause frostbite if handles without proper protection. Like all slugthrowers, this revolver can only fire slugs specifically made for it. The handle sports a wood grip made from the Veshok tree of Mandalore, which, along with the beskar, contribute to the Mandalorian style of the revolver. The name is Mando'a for "Coldshot."

 

[Noah Corek]

Kalðr Ísbjørn

Alright man, I'll be taking care of judging your sub today.

First, all your links and ratings check out. The two things that stand out to me. First is your description, so the template calls for and I quote "flesh it out over at least a good-sized paragraph" and your currently have two sentences so try and give a little more backstory to it, we're not expecting a novel just a little more detail. Second is your 'Slugs' weakness...it's not really a weakness, your just saying a slugthrower requires...a gun require a common type of ammo isn't really a weakness. Seeing as you already have another weakness your could just erase that and be fine but if you'd like some help figuring out another one or if you want to hear some ideas to make it better, in my opinion, feel free to ask.

 

[Kalðr Ísbjørn]

Kalðr Ísbjørn

Alright man, I'll be taking care of judging your sub today.

First, all your links and ratings check out. The two things that stand out to me. First is your description, so the template calls for and I quote "flesh it out over at least a good-sized paragraph" and your currently have two sentences so try and give a little more backstory to it, we're not expecting a novel just a little more detail. Second is your 'Slugs' weakness...it's not really a weakness, your just saying a slugthrower requires...a gun require a common type of ammo isn't really a weakness. Seeing as you already have another weakness your could just erase that and be fine but if you'd like some help figuring out another one or if you want to hear some ideas to make it better, in my opinion, feel free to ask.

I just removed the second weakness. I added more to description, talking about the plas-bonded ostrine in the alloy, the tree from which the wood grip comes, and the meaning of the name.

 

[Noah Corek]

Kalðr Ísbjørn

Alrighty then, passed muster for me.

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