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Factory Denied Bryn'adûl | Barad Spike Rifle

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

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  • Intent: To create specialised weaponry for the Bryn'adûl
  • Image Source: x
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: The Bryn'adûl
  • Affiliation: The Bryn'adûl
  • Model: Spike Rifle
  • Modularity: N/A

  • Production: Limited
  • Material: Malabast Plating, Molten powered Spikes
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: ​Spike Gun
  • Size: Large
  • Weight: Extreme
  • Ammunition Type: ​Super-heated metal
  • Ammunition Capacity: 20 Round Magazine, 6 Mags total

  • Reload Speed: Slow
  • Effective Range: Average
  • Rate of Fire: High
  • Stopping Power: Very High
  • Recoil: Average
SPECIAL FEATURES
  • Spikes: The weapon fires a barrage of super heated metal spikes, tearing through opponents with ease.
Strengths:
  • Pain: The super-heated metal cuts through enemies like butter, firing twenty-five centimetre super heated spikes at a high rate of fire, quickly riddling an enemy with incredibly painful wounds.
  • ​Metal bypass: The super-heated spikes dive through armour like nothing, quickly cooling down upon impact as to not carbonise the wounds, just burning enough to cause extreme pain.
  • Puncture: These shots can easily puncture through duracrete walls to hit targets.
  • ​Heat: Over time of use, the weapon will steadily heat up, making it almost impossible to be used by anything other than the resistant Draelvasier.
Weaknesses:
  • Two Hands: For any infantry other than Baedurin, this weapon requires two hands for usage due to its heavy nature.
  • ​Reload Speed: The weapon has a slower reload speed, as the weapon typically requires a small cool-down period after use.
DESCRIPTION:
The Barad Spiker was designed with the intent to supply special forces with a more competent standard piece of equipment. The Spiker is built as a supplementary assault rifle that can be used as a one handed weapon or two handed for more accuracy by Bryn'adûl Baedurin soldiers.
 
Tathra Khaeus Tathra Khaeus

Looking over the submission it is almost a carbon copy of the Type-25 Spiker from Halo and previous submissions which have been denied such as the Bryn'adûl | Wendigo Spiker.

A few of the similarities, which you were notified of on previous submissions, between this submission and the Type-25 spiker can be listed below.

1) Name


Your weapon is actually called a spiker, while the Halo weapon is also known as a Spiker.

2) Image

While an image of the Halo Spiker alone is acceptable, this combined with the name and the other similarities makes this too close to being a carbon-copy of the Halo Weapon

3) Ammunition

Like the Halo weapon, this submission uses super-heated metal spike to bypass armour.
From your submission:
Metal bypass: The super-heated spikes are well equipped to deal with armour - able to melt through most armours with direct strikes
From the Halo wiki:
These spikes are capable of piercing armour and flesh

4) Two-handed


From your submission:
Two Hands: For any infantry other than Baedurin, this weapon in its more armoured variant requires two hands for usage due to its heavy nature.
From the Halo wiki:
The Spiker was engineered by the Jiralhanae as a weapon intended to be held in one hand by a standard Jiralhanae soldier, though its size and weight mean it must be carried in two hands for use by human infantry

The similarities between these two quotes speak for themselves.

The Factory rules clearly state:

Plagiarism will not be tolerated. Small excerpts may be included from other sources in a sub, but they must include a credit, link, and be clearly marked.

And this submission is a clear copy of the Halo Weapon.

In order to make this submission something that is not a copy of the Halo weapon I believe would require a complete rewrite.

For that reason, I am going to retroactively deny this submission. If you disagree with my reasoning, or with my judgement you are welcome to request a second chance thread.


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