Approved NPC Zasalamel Xiz'te'menel

[Kixi Rajki]

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Name: Zasalamel Xiz'te'menel (Pronounced Zasalamel Shiz-te-men-El).

Loyalties: Kixi Rajki.

Role: Advisor, mentor, bodyguard, fighter

Age: 42

Species: Human male

Force Sensitivity: Force Sensitive (Untrained)

Appearance:

• 192 cm tall.
• Weighs 120 kg
• Built, broad shoulders/chest.
• Bald, little hair
• Brown eyes.
• Dark/brown complexion.
• Tattoos on both arms, chest and back.
• Tall and general stance is that of authority and confidence.
• Strong and powerful.

Personality:

• Calm.
• Sociable.
• Intelligent and knowledgeable.
• Well mannered.
• Can flare up easily when angered.
• Good charisma and superior.
• Approachable.

Weapons of Choice:

• Scythe (Designed for combat)
• Blaster rifle.

Wealth: Other than his fighter ship, he has left it all behind in the now distant Sajnen Confederate and highly unlikely to ever return.

Combat Function:

• Close combat weapons training and advanced martial arts.
• Combat land vehicles and vehicular warfare.
• Tactician.
• Advisor.

Strengths:

• Skilled with hand held bladed weapons.
• Strong and unusually quick for his size.

Weaknessess:

• Easily angered .
• Prefers to fight over talking over a solution.

Notable Possessions:

• Sajnen Starfigher R.
• Bat'leth
• Katana sword
• Throwing stars
• Knives and other bladed weapons

Other notes : Originally from Terra Prime (Sajnen Confederate), Zasalamel grew up as an average citizen in that world's captial and also the entire confederate's capital of Hedstaden Sajna. (Capitol of Sajna). He grew up in the larger section of the massive city that was controlled by the House of Xiz'tra, one of several ruling bodies and nations that comprised of the confederate. He loved martial arts and fighting. From an early age he took up various styles of martial arts. By the time he had reached adulthood, he had competed in many different tournaments on many different worlds and had won many trophies and championships. He was an ultimate fighter.

At a much later stage, while competing in a confederate wide fighting tournament, he encounted Kixi Rajki who was also competing. The two had been paired to fight in one of the elimination rounds. Both had advanced far in the tournament by that stage. Zasalamel defeated Kixi to eventually win the tournament. Ever since the two had become close friends, and Zasalamel decided to follow Kixi in her quests vowing to protect her wherever she went.


Intent:

• Kixi Rajki's advisor, mentor and personal bodyguard.
• Part of Kixi Rajki's elite special forces team.
• To serve and protect Kixi Rajki.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

Under review.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

Force Sensitivity: Yes (Force Sensitite Elite)

Please replace “elite” with either “apprentice”, “knight” or “master”. Am I correct in assuming that by “elite” you mean “master”? If so, that raises a few points I'd like to see you address:

- Can he use the Force or not? No Force abilities are listed under skills, nor is Force training referenced in the NPC’s history.
- If this character is a Master-tier Force user, I would like for you to include a list of their Force abilities, how good Zasalamel is at each of them, as well
as explain in the character’s history how he reached that level of mastery.

However, I suspect that what you are looking for is not someone who is a master at manipulating the Force, but someone who passively benefits from
it. Force sensitives were considered to have an unusual amount of luck, and even untrained Force sensitive often showed raw Force associated talents,
such as improved reaction time. If that is the case, please change it to “Force sensitive (untrained)”.

Weapons of Choice: Blaster rifle. Bat'leth Sword Scythe (Designed for combat) Throwing stars Knives and other bladed weapons

That is a lot of toys. Does he specialize in all of them? I suggest you instead leave the two weapons he is the most skilled with here, and add the rest to “Notable Possessions”.

Combat Function: Specialised in all areas of advanced military training including, but not limited to; Advanced weapons training. Close combat weapons training. Espionage. Advanced martial arts. Vehicular warfare. Combat land vehicles. Anti terrorism. Negotiation. Tactician. Advisor.

I have a few concerns in terms of your NPC’s combat function. This sentence in particular, “specialised in all areas of advanced military training including, but not limited to”, leaves me uneasy. This NPC seems built for combat, with strengths streching over too many areas. As such, I would like to see you focus on two to three primary strengths instead, and include some reasonable weaknesses to balance this character out.

For an NPC this competent in fighting, I would like to see a 10 post dev thread.

As a final note, I would like to remind you that NPCs will not be treated on the same level as PC with similar rank and experience. PCs trumps NPCs, and you should not expect anything else.

Thanks.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

What's the status of this submission?

 

[Kixi Rajki]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

What's the status of this submission?

Sorry. Been busy with other posts and RL. Will have fixes made to this. Although I've decided to make Zasalamel non force sensitive. I don't want to have to spend to much time on a dev thread for an NPC. I've done dev threads for my main PC before and enjoyed doing it, but for a NPC, don't really have the time for now. I'll submit the changes for review in a day or two. [member="Darth Pyrrhus"]

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

No worries. Tag me when you are done.

 

[Kixi Rajki]

I've made changes. He's an untrained Force user now. That you said doesn't require any special dev thread? Made changes to weapons of choice/notable posessions as suggested. Combat function has also been altered with strengths and weaknesses added. [member="Darth Pyrrhus"]

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

Great! Weapons of choice and combat functions are now more focused. With relevant strengths and weaknesses added, I find this to be a much more balanced NPC, and as such I do not think a dev thread will be necessary. This looks good to me. I have only one more question before I put it up for approval.

Role: Advisor, mentat, bodyguard, fighter

Kixi Rajki's advisor, mentat and personal bodyguard.

I think the following may be a typo: "Mentat" - is that supposed to be "mentor"?

 

[Kixi Rajki]

[member="Darth Pyrrhus"]

It was an error. But not a typo. Mentat = Mentor in Züncålidiom. I've confused my languages. Lol. I've now changed mentat to mentor.

 

[Darth Pyrrhus]

[member="Kixi Rajki"]

Ah, I see. Looks to be in order, passing it up the chain.

Approved, pending secondary.

[member="Valiens Nantaris"]

 

[Valiens Nantaris]

Approved.

 

[Quietus]

Moved to Pre-Codex to update image links.

 

[Kixi Rajki]

[member="Mahet"]

The required updates have been made. You may move this back off pre-codex and back to where it was and lock it.