Wilyiv Okul / Keeper

[Colton Renth]

Name: Wilyiv Okul / Keeper
Loyalties: One Sith and One Sith Intelligence
Role: Director of OSI
Development Threads: N/A
Age: 45
Species: Human
Force-Sensitive: no
Appearance: A Tall slender female, with shoulder length red hair she looks young for her age due her fitness regimen.
Personality: A Cold calculation, devious, tactician and planner, very driven, almost emotionless, dedicated
Weapon of Choice: blaster rifle
Wealth: upper class government official
Combat Function: skill in guerrilla warfare, and hit and run tactics
Skills: planning, tactics, admin, sees the bigger picture
Notable Possessions: Watcher 6, Fixer 8, Cipher 3, Director of OSI
Other Notes: this is for admin functions only in OSI given agent and operative’s their missions and presenting intelligence to the leaders and player of the faction THIS IS A NON COMBAT CHACTER. Basic this NPC serve the function of reporting intelligence to the high rank officers for planning of invasion dominion, and such as well given individual agents their missions, oversees the day to day operations of OSI

 

[Boethiah]

Under review.

 

[Boethiah]

Development Threads:

Please don't leave the field blank, put "N/A" instead because that way we know it was intentional and not a mistake.

Appearance: A Tall slander female, with shoulder length red hair she young for her age due her fitness regiment

There's a few grammatical errors/typos in this field. Please proof-read and edit it.

Personality: A Cold calculation, devious tactician and planner.

Could you please expand on her personality a bit?

Weapon of Choice: blaster riffle

Again just a minor typo but more importantly could you link to what kind of blaster rifle? Any canon or factory link will do.

Combat Function: skill in gorilla ware far, and hit and run tactics

Could you please proof-read and edit grammatical errors/typos in here as well?

Notable Possessions: Watcher 6, Fixer 8, Cipher 3, Director of OSI

Possessions refer to technology, starships, weapons, locations, etc. Not other NPC/PCs -- I suppose unless one's a slave or pet that might be a different case.

Other Notes: this is for admin functions only in OSI given agent and operative’s their missions and presenting intelligence to the leaders and player of the faction THIS IS A NON COMBAT CHACTER.

As with before there's some grammar/typo fixes that need to be made. Also could you elaborate on this a bit? I'm confused as to what you're saying this NPC is being used for other than it's a non-combatant NPC.

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

 

[Colton Renth]

[member="Anja Aj'Rou"]

I think fixed everything now


Name: Wilyiv Okul / Keeper
Loyalties: One Sith and One Sith Intelligence
Role: Director of OSI
Development Threads: N/A
Age: 45
Species: Human
Force-Sensitive: no
Appearance: A Tall slender female, with shoulder length red hair she looks young for her age due her fitness regimen.
Personality: A Cold calculation, devious, tactician and planner, very driven, almost emotionless, dedicated
Weapon of Choice: blaster rifle
Wealth: upper class government official
Combat Function: skill in guerrilla warfare, and hit and run tactics
Skills: planning, tactics, admin, sees the bigger picture
Notable Possessions: Watcher 6, Fixer 8, Cipher 3, Director of OSI
Other Notes: this is for admin functions only in OSI given agent and operative’s their missions and presenting intelligence to the leaders and player of the faction THIS IS A NON COMBAT CHACTER. Basic this NPC serve the function of reporting intelligence to the high rank officers for planning of invasion dominion, and such as well given individual agents their missions, oversees the day to day operations of OSI

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

Please edit all that into the original submission, not as a reply.

 

[Colton Renth]

k done

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

To clarify, this NPC is meant for planning invasions and dominions?

 

[Colton Renth]

And day to operations of OSI basicly when invasions and dominions are planed this NPC rather PC agents will brief the various commanders as what intelligence has found out related to said invasions and dominions.

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

My apologies for the delay.

Could you please explain to me what the OSI is and how it's affiliated to the One Sith?

 

[Colton Renth]

it One sith intelligence it the MI-6 of OS if you will our job is gather and analyze information through Various means and supply to the commanders that need for planning and attacks counter we also keep enemy spies out of our business as well eliminate high value targets. As stands OSI is listed in Army section if you guys want to keep there that fine but given the seer size it with different bureaus and division with those bureaus I think we cold a stand on much the Republic has done with SIS which if familiar with that we would be the OS version

 

[Boethiah]

Possessions refer to technology, starships, weapons, locations, etc. Not other NPC/PCs -- I suppose unless one's a slave or pet that might be a different case.

Still need to fix up the possessions field.

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

What's the status of this submission?

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

This submission will be archived in 48 hours unless a status update is given.

 

[Boethiah]

[member="Colrenn Renth"]

Due to inactivity within this submission I am having it marked for archival. You may PM an administrator or RPJ to bring it out when you're ready to come back to it.

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