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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION


GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Ulfin
  • Demonym: Novenians
  • Region:Wild Space
  • System Name: Cavia


    System Features:

    Suns

  • One Blue Star called Blunova
  • One Red Star called Renova



    Moons

  • One Green Moon called Midori
  • One Black Moon called Yami
  • One White Moon called Hachi
  • Location:The three moons of Ulfin - Akari, Yami and Hachi Rotate around the planet in a triangular manner following the circular orbit.

    The planet of Ulfin travel around it’s two suns in an infinity shaped orbit by going through the Orbit of Renova For the First 5 Months before it moves to the Blunova’s Orbit for the next 5 months. A year is 10 months in Ulfin and every Month has 4 Weeks consisting of 5 Days per week.





  • Major Imports: [ What the planet frequently buys from other planets. Common materials and ores should just be listed (Ex. Durasteel ore), while anything special or rare should be linked.



  • Major Exports: Iron, Gold, Silver, Nyix, Platinum, Cortosis, Doonium, and Dolovite. Quadanium Steel, Beskar, Nyix-alloy, and solid forms of carbonite and the wood of the Brylark tree, which is as strong as metal.


  • Unexploited Resources:

  • Kyber Crystals - Because they learned its destructive power and decided not to mine them and instead let it stay put as mountains of shining Kyber Crystals.

  • Phrik - It is a rare and robust alloy that is used for lightsaber resistant weaponry and also for the construction of lightsabers.

  • Aurodium was a type of metallic yellow-colored metal rarer than gold. The aurodium standard for currency was used by the Galactic Republic long before the Clone Wars.

GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
    • Gravity: A normal person can jump up to 3ft in the air and land softly.

    • Climate: Temperate but the climate keeps changing due to the suns. During the Renova seasons it is generally summer and fall time and during the Blunova it is rainy and wintery seasons.

    • Primary Terrain: It was a mix of terrains with Grassland, Mountains, Oceans, Tundras, & Forest before the war but after the war most of the terrains were destroyed as many of the mountains were bulldozered down. Now the government is trying to regain the old terrains using artificial methods.

    • Atmosphere: This land had a grand change in atmosphere due to war. This was a Type I atmosphere before the war and turned into a Type II during the start of the war gradually growing worse to a Type IV by the end of the war and now after a lot of efforts the planet is slowly healing back and is now a Type III atmosphere with improving efforts from the government and the environmentalists to turn it back to a Type I in years to come.

LOCATION INFORMATION


    • On the galactic map - Ulfin Location
    • Capital City: Nobera

    • Planetary Features: The initial features before the war was mostly wild, rural and sub urban areas. After the war many built floating urban platforms and inter-connected cities.


    • Major Locations:


      Meridian Falls - 200 feet tall waterfalls that is also 200 Feet Wide.

      Jek District- Large hot spring district with a booming business.

      Varidon Hills - kilometres wide hills where races happen.

      UNFA (Ulfian Novanian Federation Arena) - Robot fighting arena where people bring their combat bots and one of the biggest betting arena.

    • Force Nexus (Optional): Yes

      Intent: (Real): A Force Nexus would open a lot of opportunity for the story to develop for my characters and I feel that it would bring more flavor to the land's history and can play an major role in what happened in the story


      Intent (In story): It was once thought to be a point of great healing before the war. During the war the place of the Force nexus was searched so that the sith or the jedi could make a temple there.It was denied by the government and the place was defended.



      Nexus Name: Mount Kuan Wan

    • Nexus Alignment: Neutral.

    • Size: Large (2 Kilometres wide and 8,000 Feet tall mountain with a large tall mineral cave inside.)

    • Strength: Strong

    • Accessibility: Inaccessible due to the cave not being opened artificially. The cave has only small holes that can only be crawled in by small creatures.

    • Effects:

      before war - healing effects, positive vibrations, increased natural growth around it. Peace evoking.

      After war - faint Healing effects, mixed vibrations, decreased natural growth around it,less peace evoking.

    POPULATION

    • Native Species: Ulfians, an ethnicity of humans that are currently at the verge of extinction

    • Immigrated Species: During and before the war a lot of species immigrated to the land in search of a new life.After the war, the immigration stopped as the area was turned into a toxic wasteland. The government also stopped the immigration by law.

    • Population: The land was crowded with about a billion and half before the war and during the war it grew into heavily populated planet as many came to exploit the land with an increase of upto 3 billion people and by the end of the war it was reduced to sparse as massive genocides happened killing about 2 and a half billion in the process and heavy population decline happened as only about half a billion was left alive. Now after a few years the population is starting to reach above sparse but still not moderate with a population just below a billion.

    • Demographics: human and aliens co habited the land from centuries ago. Humans are the native inhabitants but Aliens were also treated fairly. There are proofs of racism and xenophobia and the government is strongly against such acts of indiscrimination. Primary habitants are humans. During the war both humans and aliens allied with the colonizing sith lords and was part of many nefarious deals. After the war there is a drift between humans and aliens and the princess personally wants it to be gone and reunite. The population mostly consists of Mammalian sentient species like Humans and Wookies and Reptilian sentient species like Trandoshan and Chistori primarily. While Plant sentient species like Neti and Zelosians immigrated into the planet during and before the war. The land is home to non sentient beings like Horax & Pecoppi parrot too.

    • Primary Languages:Galactic Basic Standard,Shyriiwook, Xaczik,Thykarann,Dosh,Chistori,Neti,Zelosian language.

    • Culture: There has been a huge cultural shift compared to the times before the war. The war has resulted in the extinction of a few cultures among the inhabitants as well as resulted in the change of a rural culture to a more urban culture. THe daily life of people have turned into more modern one rather than traditional life of the past. The behaviour of the people have also changed as many have endured war and its traumas.Daily life is slowly becoming better for the people as the remnants of war and its consequences have still not left the land. There are many sports and cultural events that have been government supported and many sports, arts.There is also entertainment events involving artificial intelligence like circuses with projection animals rather than using real animals.Religion is a dead topic in this planet, but worship and other things are not prohibited in the land and is promoted by the government.Due to the living conditions the inhabitants had to quickly work their way up to an advanced society.
    GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY

    • Government: The government of Ulfin was a monarchy before the war and during the war Monarchy was brought down by the Sith Colonisation and after the war new reforms were done Under the Allied Ulfin Rebellion Army (AURA)and now Ulfin is an Democratic Socialism flavoured Stratocracy ruled by a Dictatorial Leader.The miliary is under the monarch but the monarch supports the ideas of democracy and socialism in the planet.

    • Affiliation: Novak Empire is the monarch ruling the land after the centuries old war between the clans of Ulfin. Novak won the war and was crowned the supreme ruler of the planet with other nations given their fair share of rulership under the Novak Empire till the beginning of the war with the sith. During the war the planet was affiliated with the Sith Empire and after they were defeated by the Allied Ulfin Rebellion Army (AURA). AURA took over the planet’s rulership.

    • Wealth:

      Before The War - Wealthy
      During The War - Poor
      After The War (currently) - Medium

      Before the war with the Sith, the land was highly wealthy and during the war a lot of the wealth was taken by the Colonial Sith and its allies. After the war, The land is still rich but not as much as before and now it has a booming market for exporting materials.


    • Stability:

    • Before The War - High
      During The War - Low
      After The War (currently) - Medium



    • The land was a peaceful stable and peaceful rural/Sub urban planet before the war and during the war it had major issues causing unrest.The peaceful planet was turned into a planet of chaos and now after the war the government is trying to make the planet peaceful and its citizens back to the old law-abiding citizens. It was very safe for travellers before the war and now it is less dangerous for travellers compared to the time during the war as crimes were at an all time high during the war and now the crimes have reduced since the new government and it is relatively safe for someone to visit as an outsider although there is heavy paperwork required for entering the planet now.

    • Freedom & Oppression: The people are fairly treated and there is no oppression in the land and any attempt to oppress any community or group of people will be met with heavy punishment by the government. But there is also an oppressive side to the government as crimes and criminals are oppressed by the government.
    MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY

    • Military: it was once a completely demilitarized planet that had to form a military for their resistance against the colonizing Sith empire. During the war it was a fortress world complete with heavy defenses from both sides and a space-faring world with a substantial navy was also formed. There was a hive of scum and villainy with no discernible defense structure other than what it's inhabitants have to offer by the end of the war and once the war ended the land was forced into was low tech with the people here still in the bronze age. It changed after years of hardship by the government and now it is again a heavily defensive Military with somewhat adavanced equipments and robotic soldiers and officers, but materials of heavy destruction such as those that power the death star is not used as the people have endured the effects of such equipments and does not wish to harm others like they were harmed.


    • Technology: Technologically advanced Society with better weapons and powerful technologies being developed under the watchful eyes of the government. Technologies include advanced prosthetics to cybernetics. Better quality farming such as genetically enhanced seeds for agriculture,better breeds of pisciculture, Apiculture, and even Horticulture, Floriculture and Silviculture as well is done using technology. Different kinds of weaponry and armory developed by studying the existing technology and improving on it. There is an extensive research on robotics and robots are used for different kind of services from military to domestic help.
    HISTORICAL INFORMATION


    The Planet was discovered by the outsiders at a later period in history. But people especially humans had been living in the planet for centuries before the planet was found by the travellers. The planet had a natural settlement with humans dating back to a the times humans appeared across the galaxy. There are records dating back to the earliest human’s skeleton in the museums that had been preserved and luckily hadn’t been destroyed in the war. The sith colonising happened because of the amount of rare metals and the potential that the sith empire saw in the planet. The sith empire wanted to establish Ulfin as one of their main head planets from where they could work their plan of galaxy domination. But the resistance faced by the sith from the people of Ulfin and the jedi order made things hard for the sith empire to hold their ground in Ulfin. Due to the war the planet of Ulfin has no contact with either the Sith or The Jedi Order. This is because the Jedi Order was more interested in defeating the Sith empire than saving the people of Ulfin. Due to this, The sith order is banished and Jedi Order is heavily criticized for their inactivities in the Ulfin planet.
 
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Muphinz

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So, I can tell you put some effort into this but the submission in its current state is very rough and there are some changes that need to be done:

  • Your image credits need some work. Pinterest & Pixel4k are not credits, we're looking to credit the artists directly as you've done with Mark Mocherad and Luciano Neves. You can use Tineye.com or google image search to try to find the artists.
  • Furthermore in your image credits you need to link the art pieces directly so we can check to make sure that those artists made those pieces. If you can find and link the art on their respective platforms (Deviantart, Artstation, Facebook, anywhere the artist posted the art directly)
  • Demonym should just be Novenian as a Demonym is not the same as the native species. All Ulfins would be Novenian but not all Novenians would be Ulfin if there are aliens / other human ethnicities on the planet.
  • The location portion of the template is not the location of the individual moons and planets but where on the galactic map your world can be found. Please fix this
  • You have the Planetary Features section copied and pasted twice, please remove the duplicate
  • The intent section of the force nexus part is why you want the nexus not anything regarding in universe lore
  • The size of your force nexus can be Small, Medium, or Large. Having clarifying information after that is acceptable but please utilize these measurements.
  • The measurement of power for your force nexus can be Weak, Moderate, or Strong.
  • Clarify in the native species section that Ulfians are an ethnicity of human
  • Planetary wealth can be Poor, Low, Medium, High, or Wealthy. Clarifying information is nice but used after the fact.
  • Planetary stability can be Low, Medium, or High. Clarifying information is nice but used after the fact.
 
  • The image credits Issue has been solved

  • Demonym has been corrected to just be Novenian

  • The Location has been pinpointed but I have a question

    Do I have to remove all the things that I wrote under the location and keep only where the location of the planet is in the galactic map?

  • The Duplicate has been corrected too.

  • The intent section of the force nexus part is why you want the nexus not anything regarding in universe lore (could you explain please? because I have story based reasons for it but I don't know if it is enough reason.)

  • The size of your force nexus has been corrected as Large.

  • The measurement of power for the force nexus has been corrected as Strong.

  • Clarifed in the native species section that Ulfians are an ethnicity of human

  • Planetary wealth has been clarified clearly according to the timeline of the land clarifying the information and the current extra information used after the fact as said

  • Planetary stability has been clarified clearly according to the timeline of the land clarifying the information and the current extra information used after the fact as said
 
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Muphinz

Tineyed Truthwatcher
Astoria Aune Novak Astoria Aune Novak

The intent section for the force nexus is your intent as the writer. What is the intent behind you wanting to add a force nexus to the planet, very similar to the original intent section at the beginning of the template asking what your intent is for submitted the planet.

The link you provided in the image credits for Mark Mocherad just takes me to the image, not the actual page on Artstation for the image. This will need to be fixed.

As for the location of the planet, I personally would choose an empty hex in the Unknown Region (top left of the map) as that part of the galaxy wasn't really explored until late in Star Wars' canon history, which would fit your planet very well.
 
Firstly thank you for being calm and patient with me

The intent section for the force nexus has been written and I hope that it is fine to add the intention of the force nexus in the the story too. if it is not I will delete it if needed.

The link I provided in the image credits for Mark Mocherad has been fixed and I hope that the source is good enough to prove that the picture is from his portfolio

As for the location of the planet, I took your personal advice and choose an empty hex in the Unknown Region (top left of the map) as that part of the galaxy wasn't really explored until late in Star Wars' canon history, which did fit my planet very well. but I do have the planet being under colonialism by the Sith in the past,so do tell me if it contradicts it and causes a problem. I hope the link would be enough to know where the planet is planned on.
 
Muphinz Muphinz | Astoria Aune Novak Astoria Aune Novak

Hello!

There are just a few things...

1.) Per the template, please link "Wild Space".
Region:Wild Space
Region: [ Link the region this system resides or describe its location relative to local star systems on the map. You can pick from the following: Deep Core, Core World, Colonies, Inner Rim, Expansion Region, Mid Rim, Outer Rim Territories, Tingel Arm, Wild Space. Unknown Regions. ]


2.) I don't think you understood what the "Location" field is for. Per the template, it's what tells us where your planet is. Not the location for system features like the moons listed. Please move it to the right area.
Location:The three moons of Ulfin - Akari, Yami and Hachi Rotate around the planet in a triangular manner following the circular orbit.
On the galactic map - Ulfin Location
Location: [ This can be a screenshot of the hex from the map with a marker, or you can say that it is located "in X planet's hex" and give a general description of positioning. If you intend to add this planet to the Chaos Map please review the rules thoroughly.]

3.) This was left blank...If there are none, remove the template text and enter "N/A".
Major Imports: [ What the planet frequently buys from other planets. Common materials and ores should just be listed (Ex. Durasteel ore), while anything special or rare should be linked.
Major Imports: [ What the planet frequently buys from other planets. Common materials and ores should just be listed (Ex. Durasteel ore), while anything special or rare should be linked. ]

4.) Items that are not commonly known need to be linked. (Ex. Nyix, Brylark tree)
Major Exports: Iron, Gold, Silver, Nyix, Platinum, Cortosis, Doonium, and Dolovite. Quadanium Steel, Beskar, Nyix-alloy, and solid forms of carbonite and the wood of the Brylark tree, which is as strong as metal.
Major Exports: [ What does the planet produce and bring to the galaxy, note that not all planets have to produce things. They can be barren or have riches yet to be discovered. Common materials and ores should just be listed (Ex. Durasteel ore), while anything special or rare should be linked. ]

5.) Gravity: Please follow the template... Is it twice the standard? Is it less than standard?
Gravity: A normal person can jump up to 3ft in the air and land softly.
Gravity: [ Standard is Earth-like. Use terms such as "Twice Standard" to describe other types of gravity. ]

6.) Please choose from the listed options below, this section is confusing and doesn't really say.
Population: The land was crowded with about a billion and half before the war and during the war it grew into heavily populated planet as many came to exploit the land with an increase of upto 3 billion people and by the end of the war it was reduced to sparse as massive genocides happened killing about 2 and a half billion in the process and heavy population decline happened as only about half a billion was left alive. Now after a few years the population is starting to reach above sparse but still not moderate with a population just below a billion.
Population: [ Choose from: Uninhabited, Insignificant, Sparse, Moderate, Heavy, Crowded ]

7.) I'd suggest breaking up the history and expanding on it so that others can have a clear view of what you're looking for. Planets are meant for the community to enjoy, not just personal projects. Please try and flesh it out more.

8.) You don't HAVE to change it, but the text being all bolded and yellow like this makes it hard to read. I'd suggest just adding color strategically like for the titles and starting fields, or something you really want people to see. As it stands, it bleeds together pretty hard.

9.) Please review the Planet Template and ensure that you're following it. You can add fields, but you can't remove or move any.

Tag me when you're ready for me to look again.
 
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