Credit Wizard
Every one has their ups and downs and I don't think the handful of bad moments deserve to be what we judge others by.
1. Do I OOC come across as someone open and friendly, someone you feel comfortable approaching for a conversation on threads and/or ideas?Every one has their ups and downs and I don't think the handful of bad moments deserve to be what we judge others by.
Yes, actually.
I enjoy talking with you, and I feel more comfortable doing so now than I did at first. Initially, I really liked what we were writing together, but I was not always sure if my annoying little gremlin energy of Braze was too much, or if I was bothering you OOC.
That said, I genuinely enjoy the realistic, humanizing qualities you bring to your characters. That alone has made you feel much easier to approach for ideas, concepts, and thread discussions. You also write a wide range of characters with different goals and motivations, which makes it easier for me to bring story hooks to you, because there is usually some angle where our ideas can mesh well.
I appreciate that you make room for different kinds of stories and character dynamics.
2. Do my characters come across as believable people? Do they feel rounded out, thought out or can they sometimes feel one dimensional or inconsistent?
Yes, I do think your characters come across as believable people.
What stands out to me is that they usually feel like they have inner lives outside of whatever thread they are currently in. They have personal wants, flaws, soft spots, habits, and reasons for why they act the way they do. That helps them feel more human, rather than like they only exist to fill a role in a scene.
I also appreciate that your characters do not all feel like the same person wearing different names. They have different goals, different methods, and different emotional textures. Some are easier to approach than others, but that feels more like characterization than inconsistency.
If anything, I think some of that depth may not always be obvious right away, especially if someone is only seeing them in one specific context. But once I have more time with them, they tend to feel more rounded out and thought through.
One thing I will say is that sometimes I feel like your characters are not always played long enough for me to get a strong sense of them beyond the initial contact.
For example, I really liked your Devaronian with the half-jack droid concept. That character caught my interest pretty quickly, and I thought the idea had a lot of potential. It felt unusual, memorable, and like there was room for some really interesting story there.
I know that happens sometimes, though. We all start concepts, test them out, and then realize they may not feel quite right, or that something else is pulling our attention more. So I do not mean that as a harsh criticism.
Still, he was a character I would have liked to see more of. I was not sure yet what his long-term goals were, or whether you had fully developed what he wanted, but the concept itself made me curious. I think there was a lot of room for him to grow into something memorable if he had more time on the board.
3. Is my writing style easy to read? Is it easy to work on posts in response to what I am writing or do you find replying to me a struggle? If it is a struggle, why?
For the most part, yes, I do find your writing easy to read and easy to respond to.
There have been a few moments where I had to pause and really think through my reply, like with our fight involving Mythem, but I do not see that as a bad thing. It was not difficult because your writing was unclear; it was difficult because the scene actually made me stop and consider what my character would genuinely do. I like this, a LOT.
That fight gave me more to think about than just
"how does Braze avoid this attack?" I had to consider his injury, his positioning, the damage being done to the temple, whether he should keep pressing her or give ground, and how much risk he was willing to take while still trying to protect the place around him. That made the exchange feel more engaging to me and offered me realistic scene specific consequences to actions.
I also liked that Mythem did not feel like she was only there to swing a lightsaber. She adapted to what Braze was doing, used the environment, pressed her advantage, and then made choices that reflected her own pride, frustration, and survival instincts. That gave the fight more texture than a simple back-and-forth duel!
I would like to see more from that character as well, and I am curious to see how she develops further down the line. I am not sure yet if you had specific goals or motivations planned for her, or if there was a larger IC path you wanted her to follow, but I thought she was a strong concept.
I also think it was a good foray into some PvP. It felt refreshing for me, and I appreciated the OOC feedback about what was going on. I think that communication helped the story overall and made the exchange easier to work with.
4. What are things you enjoy about my characters and about the way I write posts?
I really enjoy when your characters feel like they have
real personalities.
Not everyone is going to be pleasant all the time, and I appreciate that you do not shy away from letting a character be mean, cranky, snappish, or difficult when the setting and their mood call for it. They are not always written like they are trying to make everyone like them, and I think that adds a lot of
realistic depth to the story.
It also helps
immerse me in the exchange, because you usually show how a character is feeling through their behavior, reactions, and choices rather than simply telling me outright. That makes them feel way more grounded and believable.
I know I play an annoying little pest of a character,
very intentionally, and I know that can easily rub people the wrong way. I also understand that may be a big reason why I sometimes do not get repeat roleplay after initial encounters. But I
do think those kinds of characters can make for better stories when they are handled well.
That is something I think you do really well. You make rougher, sharper, more difficult characters feel interesting without making them feel flat. I feel like I should take notes from you on how to make those sandpapery-type characters more endearing or engaging to other writers / readers.
My end goal is always to have a good collaborative experience while also telling a story I can look back on years from now and still enjoy rereading.
I get that quality from your characters and your writing, and I
really love it.
5. What are things you aren't enjoying about my characters and about the way that I write?
Honestly, I am struggling a little to find something I genuinely do not enjoy, because even the things that are not personally my usual taste still feel well-executed.
I do have a bit of a love-hate relationship with
Vohm-Raet
visually. His design hits that uncanny valley nerve in my brain where part of me wants to cringe and recoil from the aesthetic, but I do not mean that as a bad thing. I think that is intentional, or at least it works really well for him.
At the same time, I love that your character art is so well put together. The art itself tells a story, and I am admittedly jealous of that knack. I wish I knew how to capture that same quality without feeling like my own characters always slide toward one-dimensional pretty men. I think the prop usage helps with this.
Even though some of your characters are unconventional-looking, or do not fit what I personally tend to find visually appealing, I still like them a lot.
Vohm-Raet
especially became endearing very early on. His gentle nature, believable sentiments, and backstory help explain why he is such a soft-hearted giant , and I think that contrast works really well. His terrifying imagery set against that cinnamon-roll personality makes him more interesting and stronger overall.
So if I had to name something I am not enjoying, it is less about the characters themselves and more that I sometimes do not get enough time with them. I would honestly like to have more follow-up threads after initial meetings, because some of these concepts feel like they have more room to breathe and grow.
What I do
not enjoy is that I do not get enough time to write with some of your characters.
I need more of the good stuff. =P
6. Is there something you see you could see more of from me?
More follow up threads for continued story and continuity and development of your cool concept characters.
7. Overall, what are your impressions on me and what do you wish to see either more of or less of from me in the future?
Overall, my impression of you is that you are a creative, approachable writer who brings a lot of personality into the room.
I think what stands out most is that your characters feel like they are allowed to be people, not just polished avatars meant to be liked. They can be strange, difficult, guarded, awkward, sharp, or unexpectedly gentle, and that makes them feel more alive to me. I appreciate that you seem willing to write characters with texture, even when that texture is not always conventionally appealing or immediately easy.
I also appreciate that you are easy to talk to OOC, especially when a thread needs a little communication to keep things moving smoothly. That makes writing with you feel more collaborative and less like I am guessing in the dark.
In the future, I think I would mostly like to see more continuation. More follow-up threads, more character development over time, and more chances to see where some of your concepts go after the first meeting. You have a lot of ideas that catch my interest, and I think some of them would really shine with more time to breathe.
So I do not really have much I want to see less of, aside from maybe fewer interesting characters vanishing before I get to write with them more. Mostly, I would like to see more of your characters settling into longer arcs, because I think that is where your writing has the most room to show what it can do.
