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The Helska Production Factory

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

SETTING INFORMATION
  • Structure Name: The Helska Production Factory
  • Classification: Production Factory
  • Location: Helska IV
  • Affiliation: Ra'a'mah Numare | Kei Raxis ([member="Ra'a'mah"] & [member="Kei Raxis"])
  • Accessibility: Sticking out, the Helska Production Factory is a large factory on an otherwise uninhabited world. However, this means that tracking down this factory is actually pretty difficult all things considered. Why is it difficult? It's difficult because it in the middle of the frozen planet and therefore it's unlikely that there will be locals who will point you in the general directon of the factory. You have to actively be looking for the factory to be hunting it down.
  • Security: The entire environment of the planet acts as security, one frozen ice planet providing severe cold to stop people accidently wondering up on the factory. Other than that, the internal defenses are basic. There are a few hired security guards but nothing major.
  • Description: At a glance, The Helska Production Factory looks like any other factory. Constructed out of a mixture of ice, brick and stone, the factory itself doesn't look very interesting. Inside however, it is a fully automated production facility full of noise and moving machinary to produce Death Troopers constantly without stopping.

POINTS OF INTEREST

The Main Entrance:

The Main Entrance is much like a regular reception on a factory. There is a desk set up with different scanning technology including basic finger printing and eye scanning. This means that only people who are meant to have access to the factory are allowed access. This however means that one well placed EMP shot will allow any random person access to the factory, so to prevent any unwanted visitors two security guards are posted in the room at all times to prevent any random visitors having access to the internal factory.

The First Floor:

The first floor is where all of the melting and shaping occurs. This means that there are massive columns full of heat and molten metal taking up the majority of the floor. There are a number of pipes running around the walls and celing to pump molten metal to shapers and cooling racks so that metalic droid parts can be formed and solidified. Should anything go wrong in this area, the entire production of droids will be unable to continue until the error is fixed.

The Central Stairwell:

The main stairwell and elevator within the building, The Cnetral Stairwell allows access to everything but the top floor. Movement through the factory requires access to The Central Stairwell and elevator system. This means that any damage to this area will prevent staff moving to another floor.

The Second Floor:

The parts made from below are moved to the second floor. Upon the second floor, the parts are all welded together and any final shaping is carried out by hand across a row of workbenches. This floor produces droids that are made but not functioning as they have no electronics. There is a large hole in the corner of this floor that leads back down to the heating columns of floor one. This is so any misshapen or broken droids can be reused by being melted down for the materials within them.

The Third Floor:

The third floor is where all the electronics are added. This are all built, programmed and added by machine, however every droid is tested by a sentient being to make sure that they are functioning correctly and able to follow orders correctly. This is also the floor with an emergency stop button should anything go wrong on any of the production floors. This is also the floor in which the elevator and stairwell cut off. In the very corner of this floor there is a seperate elevator that is guarded at all times.

The Forth Floor:

Accessable via the elevator in the corner, this floor is where every office is located. Also upon this floor are the main sever rooms and service rooms. Within these rooms, any technology is handed with care by trained technology. The service room is also the main control room for all the machinary on every floor. This means that all monitering within the factory is based out of one room. Upon this floor is the access to the basement storage area via another elevator in another corner.

Ra'a'mah's Office:

The office of the factory owner, Ra'a'mah has access to every readout and report. She has complete control over the factory and it's processes as well as access to all reports on production and importing of raw material. This office has direct links to the office of the factory foreman as well as the basement and in turn the hanger corridor. This office is rarely used, but always left alone for if Ra'a'mah wishes to return and carry out any work upon the factory itself.

The Basement:

The elusive basement, purely used for storage. However, the basement is also where access to the imports hanger and the civilian hanger is located. Via two long tunnels, access to the hangers (located about a mile away) is allowed.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Aquired during the days of the Dominion and rebuilt by Ra'a'mah, the factory has one function and that is to produce Phase II Dark Troopers at all times. However, Ra'amah has no offical tie to the building. Due to her standing within a number of large groups, Ra'a'mah had the building built under the name of the foreman. She did however design and order the building of the factory. Designed to be nothing special, the factory looks simple and basic from the outside, however the inside reveals the secret.

Producing Phase II Dark Troopers, the factory serves to produce Ra'a'mah an elite army. Within the factory, there are two hundred people at all times. This includes production staff, security and higher ups including investors (House Raxis representatives). Many of these sleep and live within the factory and work on shifts to ensure that production is carried at out at all hours with very few issues and stops. Any stop in production is reported at all times.
 
Hey there I'll be overseeing this submission.

  • Please separate your links into different lines for readability purposes.
  • Add mention of the scanning technology to the Security field.
  • You state that the Factory is automated, yet mention in separate instances that there is a physical crew finish the final shaping by hand and that the final tests are carried out by people. While the latter can be overlooked, having people on the production line as part of the creation process would render this semi-automated.

Now to get into my real issue with this submission: the product itself.

Which company is overseeing the construction of these droids? There is no mention of the manufacturer at all, just two PCs with ties to the facility.

On top of that how were they able to acquire the blueprints for their construction? Phase II Dark Troopers are the property of the Imperial Department of Military Research which I feel I could be correct in thinking neither yourself nor Ra own or have a stake in IC - though feel free to correct me if I am wrong.

Even if you do have legitimate access to the production of these droids, then there's also the matter of their armour; the way you have written this ("to produce Death Troopers constantly without stopping") makes it seem as though they are mass produced, yet the armour of the Dark Troopers was made from phrik. Even ignoring the Factory's policy on RM materials and their production levels, being that these are canon droids and not something you're putting through the Factory, the notion of now being able to mass produce a droid with phrik plating without having access to those resources is ludicrous. These aren't old models you've refurbished, they're newly produced versions of an old model.

As a result of the above, I'm going to have to suggest that you change the model of droid which is being produced. You can put your own variant through the Factory, in which case this submission will be archived or moved to the Pre-Codex for you to work on, or you can choose a different canon model which isn't reliant on a RM.

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