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Approved Planet Tanative

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Out Of Character
Intent: To create a home planet for Daalin Garnive, explain why Daalin doesn't trust people and why doesn't he have a ship

Image Credit: https://imgur.com/X5bdvOB (Thank you John Locke)

http://planetmaker.wthr.us/ (for creating the planet)

Canon: N/A

Links: Daalin Garnive
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General Information
Planet Name: Tanative

Demonym: Tanive

System Region: Unknown region.

System features: The sun is all greenish-yellow. Their are 4 planets (2 are uninhabitable and 1 planet is an Asteroid planet)

(Position order from 1-4:
The 1st planet is a Gas planet closer towards the sun.

The 2nd is a dwarf planet that is Uninhabitable due to the amount of Radiation on the planet (no one knows what happen) it's a little farter away from the gas planet.

The 3rd one is Tanative

The 4th planet is a Asteroid planet, many people rumors that the planet may be the key to getting them out because nobody has ever checked out the planet's surface, it's most likely farther away from the Tanative.

Location: (1 hex down on the Najra-va) (the empty hex directly below Najra-va)

Major Imports: None (they steal supplies from other people or from the crash sites)

Major Exports: N/A (unless other PC characters did something to produce)

Unexploited Resources: Electrum.
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Geographic Information
Gravity: Standared

Climate: No rain or clouds.

Primary Terrain: Barren

Atmosphere: Type ll
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Location Information

Capital City: Archangel, the city of domination, is the main trading post to the rest of the colonies and is a dangerous place because of the ongoing Gang War

Located underground of the planet, these buildings are made from junk materials from the crash sites and has 3 bridges as the only entrance to the city.

Planetary Features: When you enter the planet's surface, the first thing your gonna see is ships that were crashed and rocky terrains. There are multiple ships and craters that was left their for unknown reasons, Their are caves that is so dark, you don't even know where your going. There are multiple caves in the area around the crash sites. There's no clouds and you might need a breathing mask because of the atmosphere.

Major Locations:

  • Archangel: The main Capital and the Trade center of all the Tanative, Located at the middle of the cave, the building is made out of junk and three metal bridges are made for the entrance.

  • The shrine of Admiral Sten (the founder of Archangel). Made out of Desh, it's located in the center of Archangel and is the exact replica.

  • Palace of the Silver Dragon: The Palace is where the bounties are collected in exchange for Salvageable materials. Mostly located closer to the Shrine (south of the shrine).

  • Tanative Radio Station: Hosted by a man named "believer". Talks about public news and has music for good old times. The location is unknown.

  • Beacon's last peace: A generator that makes water and clones animals from their DNA to make food. Located at the west side of the Archangel, between the bridge at the right side.

  • Old Mining drills and Refinery machines: these were left abandoned for unknown reasons. They are everywhere except the caves

  • Last light of hope: Where people would meditate and try to think of something to calm them down. Located at the East side of the Archangel, it's at the entrance where you come in through the center.

  • Multiple Gang Hideouts. (like 15). They're mostly at the caves but rarely outside of the caves.
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Population

Native Species: N/A

Immigrated Species: 85% are humans. 15% are aliens (Rodian, Duros, Gran, Gand, and Nautolan)

Population: Medium

Demographics: 15% are aliens (Rodian, Duros, Gran, Gand, and Nautolan) all of them are treated like the gangs or civilians or independent, their is no people who is being racist.

Primary Languages: Galactic Language is mostly gonna be heard alot.

Culture: Civilians mostly stay at their homes or do the job with haste because of the gang, the gang will have two options: Gain power by doing something or disguise themselves to get information on important targets. Their are some people who work independent, but sometimes they backstab someone because they want power to themselves
(their is no law in this planet) anyone is treated equally, but whenever someone with a ship comes in, they pay attention mostly and tries to kill or steal their loot all the time.
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Government and Economy
Government: None

Affliction: Different sections of the caves are run by different groups of gangs, except Archangle which is neutural.

Wealth: Medium, they don't believe in credits, they use materials as currency.

Stability: High

Freedom and Oppositions: They have all the freedom because they have no governments. However, due to the amount of gangs their are and what they do, their is gonna be troubles and lots of betrayals.
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Military and Technology

Military: Inside the caves are gangs filled with outdated blasters (such as the E-11 or the A280) Some gangs have turrets from the ships that crashed here but their Irreparable.
Civilians mainly equipped themselves with a pistol or something. Shield Generators are extremely rare to find in one of the gang's hideouts.

Technology: Galactic Standard
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Historical Information

Not much is known about how the gang wars started or how the ships even got here. All we do know is that a convoy landed here 50 years ago after picking up the unidentified signal coming from the planet surface. When they arrived at the planet surface, they were shocked at the amount of ships that crashed and craters being large enough to crack the planet. After 3 weeks of investigating they found something, an old mining drill dates back to about 400 years ago still being operated and no structural damage. They investigated the old mining drill and tried to find out what just happen. While the investigation happen, a group of Marines was able to find the caves.

The Civilians (who participated in the convoy) moved out towards the caves to investigate something. After many months, they found out that these caves have rich resources and they found something else, a material called Electrum was their. The civilians wanted to make a mining site and a trade route. Admiral Sten then created a mining site and created Archangel. Then something happen, after Archangel was 50% done the convoy's ships exploded. Many civilians were shocked about this and tries to make contact to others in space, but then a riot happen and the military was wiped out. Nobody knew who started a riot or why they wanted to get rid of them?

The remaining civilians were then forced to build Archangel, then some left to create a new military force. But they were short lived. Now the Gangs started appearing out of nowhere and they are conquering lands after lands.
The civilians has no government and have to make sure they survive or suffer the same fate like the rest.
 
[member="Daalin Garnive"]

The planet creation forum is only for completed submissions, I have moved the thread to the precodex while you write it. When you're ready for the submission to be judged please contact a member of Codex Staff and we will move the submission back to the planet forum.

Also, so you are aware, the final submission must be all on the website, and not include any google docs.
 
[member="Daalin Garnive"] | [member="Gilamar Skirata"]

Hi, I'll be doing the secondary approval for this planet submission and I have to say, for a first planet submission this is really good. I'm impressed.

However there are just a few things I want to go through with you before we can approve this submission.

Firstly the title, if you could please edit it to just show the planet name to mantain conformity across all subs in case somoene needs to go looking for it or it ends up on the map one day.

For hte image credit, in addition to the imgur link, could you please also provide a link to the website you used to make the planet, or mention it sowe know that this is your work and the tool that you used.



Daalin Garnive said:
System Region: Unknown region.

We require the region to be linked as in the template, fo in your case that would be the Unkown Region, for which I have provided the link url below.

https://starwars.fandom.com/wiki/Unknown_Regions/Legends



Daalin Garnive said:
Location: (1 hex down on the Najra-va)
Just to clarify, do you mean the empty hex directly below Najra-va? It's important that we get this clear in case you decide to out your planet on the map.



Daalin Garnive said:
Major Locations: Archangel
The small description you provided for the capital city should actually be here, as the template asks that

  • Major Locations: [ What are the major locations on your world? Include an explanation on each. ]
Which you have failed to do for Archangel. Furthermore you don't describe where the locations are, or what they look like. Please could you at least clarify their location, so that anyone else who chooses to RP on the planet has a point of reference for the submission.



Daalin Garnive said:
Demographics: (their is no law in this planet) anyone is treated equally, but whenever someone with a ship comes in, they pay attention mostly and tries to kill or steal their loot all the time.

What you are describing here is the planet's culture, not hte demographics, I have included the template description of the Demographics below.

  • Demographics: [ Please describe the population assortment found on this planet. Is it primarily human inhabitants with only a small percentage of aliens? Or perhaps the other way around? Is this a place open to all kinds of races or is there a strong theme of racism and xenophobia? Specific race percentages are welcome but not required. ]
You have actually touched on this in the previous sections, however if you could please move this text down to the culture section, and repeat hte percentages from immigrated species here along with some details about how welcomeing/open the peopel are.



Daalin Garnive said:
Affliction: N/A
This is a small thing, but this should be Affiliation.

While this might seem like a lot, it's mostly a few small thigns that need to be updated to fall inline with the template. Please tag me back when you've made these adjustments so we can move on to approval.
 
[member="Daalin Garnive"]

All those changes look really good, thank you for making them. I just have one point that I could use clarification on.



Daalin Garnive said:
Demographics: 15% are aliens (Rodian, Duros, Gran, Gand, and Nautolan) all of them are treated as normal.

Could you confirm what you mean by normal?
 
[member="Daalin Garnive"]

Awesome.

Thank you so much for making those edits and enjoy your new planet! I look forward to seeing what else you come up with in the future.

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