Some Critique, if you would.

[Writer]

Alright - I won't lie, I was trying to avoid this - but seeing the influx of critiques and feedback requests, well I'm throwing myself out there. I feel I can do more. I just want honest feedback on what I can do to be better than I was or currently am.

Nothing special - you all know the story. I've chosen actions over words to make up for what has been done, you know, right the wrong kind of deal?

I'm back in the game now and well hopefully I can get something out of this to continue moving forward.

 

[RC 212]

[member="Mira Rekali"]

More character Development. Come to think of it I don't see you around much.

 

[Allyson Locke]

Mira is actually a pretty interesting character, a lot of stuff has happened to her and she finds a way to muscle her way through it. Even when things are looking pretty messy, she stays true to her beliefs and continues on. I am really enjoying seeing her growth from when she started with the Brat Pack. At first I was curious to see if she was going to end up an Aaralyn clone, which tends to happen when you write the mother and then the child. I’ve been guilty of it as well on previous boards. She’s nothing like Aaralyn, minus the grace and determination. Both qualities I don’t blame you for passing on to her.

I would like to see her interact with more people, but I know you’re just getting back from an LOA and that’s the only thing really I can offer as something that needs to change. More interaction with the galaxy abroad would help mold her further into an amazing master one day. I look forward to the people she trains and seeing more of her story unfold.

Writer to Writer: Stop leaving so much! LOL but I understand IRL is a pain in the butt sometimes. I enjoy writing with you and I think everyone else should experience that. Your characters are colorful and full of life. Keep up the good work and have fun!

 

[Vaudin Miir]

[member="Mira Rekali"]

Stop making pretty girls that I can't have. That would help.

 

[Writer]

[member="Mira Rekali"]

Stop making pretty girls that I can't have. That would help.

Sorry, those horns just seem a bit - intimidating. [member="Vaudin Miir"]

 

[Vaudin Miir]

[member="Mira Rekali"]

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