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Planet Review Sablethorne Prime

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: To create a planet to be used in RP's and homeworld for future characters

• Image Credit: Here. Artist: Shinyman

• Canon: N/A

• Permissions: N/A / Self

• Links: Centurion Commander.


PLANET:

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Planet Name: Sablethorne Prime

Demonym: Sablethornian

Region: Outer Rim Territories

System Name: Aegis System

System Features: Sablethorne Prime is orbited by a single moon, known as Frostfall, which contributes to the planet's unique climate. The system itself is relatively stable, with no significant spatial anomalies.

Location: Sablethorne Prime is situated in the Outer Rim Territories, known for its icy landscapes and harsh conditions. It occupies a strategic position in the Aegis system.

Major Imports:
1. Medical Supplies
2. Military Equipment (Mainly Blasters and thermal detonators)

Major Exports:
1. Durasteel Alloys
2. Armored Vehicles (From Hellstorm Armaments)

Unexploited Resources: Sablethorne Prime has vast untapped reserves of durasteel ore and Kyber Crystals. The planet's rugged terrain makes it challenging to access these resources.

GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION:

Gravity: Standard

Climate: Arctic and mountainous, with perpetual snowfall and freezing temperatures.

Primary Terrain: Icy mountain ranges, deep valleys, and expansive glaciers.

Atmosphere: Type I

LOCATION INFORMATION

Capital City: Umbra Citadel

Planetary Features: The planet features sprawling subterranean caverns, rumored to hide ancient secrets. The surface is marked by imposing fortifications and the ominous Umbra Citadel, the heart of the Hellstorm Corps' operations.

Major Locations:

1. Umbra Citadel: The central stronghold and headquarters of the Hellstorm Corps, concealed within the icy mountains. It serves as the seat of power and a symbol of the Corps' dominance.

2. Frostfall Glacier: A vast, frozen expanse where the Hellstorm Corps conducts specialized training exercises and tests its soldiers in extreme conditions.

3. Shadow Veil Caverns: A network of mysterious and uncharted caves believed to house valuable resources and ancient artifacts.

4. Durasteel Mines: Located in the mountainous regions, these mines extract valuable durasteel resources critical for Hellstorm Armaments' production.

POPULATION:

Native Species: None

Population: Moderate

Demographics: Diverse, with a majority being former prisoners seeking redemption through service in the Hellstorm Corps.

Primary Languages: Galactic Basic, with military jargon prevalent among Corps members.

Culture:The culture on Sablethorne Prime revolves around military discipline, resilience, and a shared commitment to the Hellstorm Corps' mission. The harsh environment has shaped a society that values strength, adaptability, and loyalty.

GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY:

Government: Military Dictatorship

Affiliation: Inderpendet

Wealth: Moderate

Stability: High

Freedom & Oppression:
Strict military control with an emphasis on discipline and loyalty. The population is restricted but enjoys stability under the rule of the Hellstorm Corps.

MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY

Military:
The military forces on Sablethorne Prime are comprised of conscripted criminals, serving as a unique form of death penalty. These individuals undergo intensive training and are transformed into soldiers within the Hellstorm Corps, contributing to the planet's formidable military capabilities.

Technology:
Cutting-edge technology, with a focus on military applications. Hellstorm Armaments drives technological advancements in armored vehicles and weaponry.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION:

Origins as a Prison World:

Sablethorne Prime began its existence as an uninhabited, frigid planet nestled within the desolate reaches of the Outer Rim Territories. Its harsh climate and treacherous terrain made it an ideal candidate for a remote prison world. As galactic authorities sought a secure location to house the galaxy's most dangerous criminals, Sablethorne Prime was chosen for its isolation and unforgiving environment.

The first structures erected on the planet were austere, functional prisons, designed to withstand the brutal elements and contain the galaxy's most notorious individuals. Over time, Sablethorne Prime gained a dark reputation, becoming synonymous with exile and despair.

Transformation under the Hellstorm Corps:

The turning point for Sablethorne Prime occurred with the rise of a mysterious and charismatic figure known only as the Centurion Commander. Originally a high-ranking warden responsible for maintaining order within the prison, the Centurion Commander recognized the untapped potential within the formidable individuals incarcerated on the desolate planet.

Seizing an opportunity to create a formidable military force, the Centurion Commander initiated covert operations to recruit prisoners into a new entity: the Hellstorm Corps. Those who displayed exceptional skills, unwavering loyalty, and a desire for redemption were offered a chance to serve in the Corps, a path that promised a life beyond perpetual incarceration.

As the Hellstorm Corps expanded, the dynamic of Sablethorne Prime shifted. Former wardens became high-ranking officers, their expertise in security and control now channeled into military strategy. The prisoners, once shackled and confined, were transformed into disciplined soldiers, their pasts repurposed as a driving force for loyalty to the Corps.

The Rise of the Hellstorm Citadel:

The Hellstorm Corps, under the leadership of the Centurion Commander, established the Umbra Citadel as the beating heart of their operations. This ominous structure served as the central stronghold, a symbol of the Corps' dominance over Sablethorne Prime. The Citadel became a hub for training, strategic planning, and the embodiment of the Corps' unwavering commitment to the planet.
 
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Overall I feel this is a great start, but that it also needs a little more work. I can definitely see where you are going with this though, and I am excited to see what becomes of this.

Let's get into the things I think you need to work on:

Location: Could you please let us know what Hex on the map you are looking at. If possible provide a screenshot of where you are wanting to place this.

Major Imports and Major Exports:
  • This world is described with perpetual snowfall and freezing temperatures. The impression I get from this planet is that it is mostly frozen which makes me wonder were food comes from. Are they able to grow it or does it need to be imported?
  • Military Equipment shows up as in import, but then vehicles shows up as an export. I am not sure how both can be true. Essentially the issue is here that if the technology they have is cutting edge where is the supply for the vehicles coming from if the equipment is all being imported? This can be reconciled here, or by expanding this in the technology section of the submission.
Atmosphere: Please hyperlink Type 1 using this link: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Atmosphere/Legends

Demographics: Diversity is amazing, and while exact percentages are optional please include some of the more notable species on the planet and link to their wookieepedia articles.

Culture: Please expand on the culture of the planet. Include things like customs. What do the citizens do for entertainment? Is there a high value placed on honor? What does a typical family look like? What about education for children etc? The more you can include here the easier it will be for other writers to know how to interact with this planet best in Roleplay.

Stability: You have listed it as high, please explain why.

Freedom and Oppression: Can you explain a bit more what the strict control looks like. You mention in this section they are restricted. What are some of those restrictions.

I think with these edits this submission will be a great addition!
 

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