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Approved Planet Rehl Prime

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Name: Rehl Prime

Region: Unknown Regions
System: Rehl
Suns: 1 Rehl, Yellow Standard sun
Orbital Position: Habitable Zone
Moons: 3 Natural

System Features: 3 Gas Giants, one Asteroid belt
Coordinates: 2, 24
Rotational Period: 36 Earth Hours
Orbital Period: 400 Days

Class: Terrestrial
Diameter: 12,756km
Atmosphere: Type 1 Earth like Atmosphere
Climate: Temperate
Gravity: Standard
Primary Terrain: Forests, plains, urban areas, tundra.

Native Species: Humans
Immigrated Species: None
Primary Languages: Galactic Standard Basic
Government: Independent Countries
Population: 7.1 billion
Demonym: Depends on the Country they are from. Planetwide they are Rehlians

Major Imports: None

Major Exports: None


Affiliation: Independent

Major Locations:



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The Scar - The Scar used to be a plains and a small town, but now has turned into a battlefield. The on going war between the two factions of the Centrals, and the Accord have left the area now called the Scar a scarred battlefield of trenches and ruins. The area continues to be a hard point for fighting with new craters and fire starting up.

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Culture: The planet is a prehyperspace civilization, which is embroiled in a World War of sorts. Culture has come to show this with Xenophobes on both sides, and a high level of patroitism, bringing men ages 18-36 to war. The Galo-Nerian Empire is a mixture of smaller nations much to like how the Austro-Hungarian Empire was. They are the one that are the farthest behind in tech, thinking the classical old ways should be continued and supported. Their Allies the Remic Empire however are the more brutal, tech driven forces for the Centals. The Remics where the first to employ chemical warfare, their large submersible fleets, and have found better tech for their air forces. The Remics also have found crude armor to stop bullets to a degree. To the Remics everything is in the honor of the Emperor for them you fight and die for him, anything he says they do without question.

On the otherside of the continent with the Accord, they have found that empires aren't the way of the future but of the past. the Brin Commonwealth is made up of the ruling Brinish and all their former colonies, with this massive force they have the largest population on the planet, they also tend to be the most "honorable" as honor to each other and their enemies is drilled into children's heads at a very young age. They also pride themselves with the biggest surface navy on the planet, and were the last of the four to start using chemical weapons. Their allies the Fermic Republic however are less "civilized" as they are fighting on their homeland mostly and would do anything to protect it, they have been known to throw mass waves of soldiers at the enemy to overpower them and force them to submit. The Fermics while patrons of the arts and philosophy, have resorted to scorched earth policies if they are forced to retreat from any area. The Fermics though calling themselves a republic is more like a meritocracy, you gain the right to vote, get married, and have kids by military service. This has led them to resort to using armor for their troops, as well as ways to increase fertility rates for their women to combat the loss of life in the war.


Technology: Pre Hyperspace Civilization, think about Earth's World War One era

History: Rehl was found due to sensor scans of the area of a passing First Order vessle. Though no one is sure how it was settled, Rehl has humans as a native inhabatent. The Natives however are a pre hyperspace civilization, and have gotten themselves into a massive World War. The four countries that make up the planet have allied with others and formed two factions. The Centrals, who are the Galo-Nerian Empire, and the Remic Empire. Their opposition is the Accord Alliance, which is the Fermic Republic, and the Brin Commonwealth. Both the Accord and the Central Empires, have been fighting for years, though not progressing in tech too much they have perfected their means of recruitment, so their populations are killing entire generations. This makes the war almost endless as neither has any down side to fighting and neither have a tired civilian populace. Though the planet was unknown at the time of the Gulag plague, to the people of Rehl, they called it the Whispering Death. It was a dark time for the population, as many were killed. Though with a change of living conditions for the population helpe solve it for them. Around the time of the Netherworld event for the rest of the Galaxy, was about when the War on Rehl started, no records of this can be found as once the war started a lot of historical records were destroyed, though missing people do turn up from time to time. The Alliances formed out of the disappearances of people, as no one on the planet can explain it. Thus sparking the "World War."

Notable PCs: N/A

Intent: Intent is to give color to the universe with non hyperspace feering civilizations

Links:

http://pictigar.com/media/1281732220818455019

http://www.jvfrance.com/battlefield-1-map-st-quentin-scar-video-125196/
 
[member="Aran Piett"]

Okay, so here are my thoughts so far.



Aran Piett said:
Diameter: Earth is 12,756
This is not a valid diameter, I need to ask that you provide an actual diameter for the planet.



Aran Piett said:
Demonym: Depends on the Country they are from
While I can see what you mean, the demonym is what people that are not from the planet would use to talk about those who live on its surface. For example, "Have you heard about the Rehlians?"



Aran Piett said:
History: Rehl was found due to sensor scans of the area of a passing First Order vessle. Though no one is sure how it was settled, Rehl has humans as a native inhabatent. The Natives however are a pre hyperspace civilization, and have gotten themselves into a massive World War. The four countries that make up the planet have allied with others and formed two factions. The Centrals, who are the Galo-Nerian Empire, and the Remic Empire. Their opposition is the Accord Alliance, which is the Fermic Republic, and the Brin Commonwealth. Both the Accord and the Central Empires, have been fighting for years, though not progressing in tech too much they have perfected their means of recruitment, so their populations are killing entire generations. This makes the war almost endless as neither has any down side to fighting and neither have a tired civilian populace.
I'd like to have a mention of how the Gulag Plague affected the planet as well as the Netherworld event. While they have certainly been well isolated, I do believe that both events are good to have described in the history.



Aran Piett said:
Notable PCs: N/A
Intent: Intent is to give color to the universe with non hyperspace feering civilizations
While I do understand the appeal of this intent, I don't see much of a reason why you would submit this if there are no player characters attached to it. Are you planning on writing a story on this planet, or is it mainly just map fluff?
 
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[member="Kaili Talith"] I added the Km to the diameter, I guess they could be called Rehlians. As for the Gulag Plague, and Netherworld event, I don't know anything about them as I wasn't here for those. Also for Intent there will be a story line for it with the First Order, also in the process of making a PC for it, which I haven't finished yet
 
[member="Aran Piett"]

Awesome.

In short, the Gulag Plague was a galaxy wide event that wiped out a good part of the galaxy and resulted in many deaths. The summary of it can be found here. As for the Netherworld event it was a series of mass disappearances all across the galaxy in which people were brought into the Netherworld by a mysterious force. The basic idea for that event can be found here.

Knowing that your intent is to have a storyline and PC for the planet is good.

So, all that I really want is for you to expand upon the history a little. Maybe the Gulag Virus/Plague didn't hit your planet because it simply wasn't able to? Maybe they weren't as technologically advanced in those years as they were now? As for the Netherworld event I believe it is just a matter of mentioning that it happened and a small note on how it affected them, but I wouldn't be opposed to a more detailed description.

Either way, I like the submission as a whole. It is a very interesting concept.
 
Aran Piett said:
Around the time of the Netherworld event for the rest of the Galaxy, was about when the War on Rehl started, though Rehl wasn't affected by it due to their technology level, this would be when their massive alliances started their "World War" of sorts.
The Netherworld event still affected most people in the galaxy and wasn't reliant on technology as much as simply being alive. Think of it kind of like the Rupture except that the sinners and saints both went to hell instead of heaven. Other than that it looks good and once this little detail is fixed I'll be able to go ahead and stamp your submission for Trainee Approval. :)
 
This is what I would call a good start to a planet sub, but there simply needs to be more.

Two sentences in the culture will not suffice. I would like you to expand on the culture of the people living on this planet with at least two good paragraphs, preferably more. You've mentioned in the history I believe 4 different major groups of peoples on this planet that are at war with one another?

The four countries that make up the planet have allied with others and formed two factions. The Centrals, who are the Galo-Nerian Empire, and the Remic Empire. Their opposition is the Accord Alliance, which is the Fermic Republic, and the Brin Commonwealth.
I'd like you to give their countries and separate cultures more detail. All this submission tells me right now is that they like war.

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