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Approved Planet Nibelungen

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Emberlene's Daughter, The Jedi Generalist
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a plot device me and Corvus started planning a long while ago and now with some others have managed to finish with the help fo Sorel Crieff
  • Image Credit: Chaos map by staff cropped and edited by me for closest point the world is located
  • Canon: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: N/A
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Nibelungen
  • Demonym: Nibe Jedi
  • Region: Outer Rim
  • System Name: Nidhog
  • System Features:
    • Trinary Star System called The Ashla System
    • 5 Sisters: What the worlds within the system have been called by the one who colonized it. The worlds have been slowly terraformed and colonized with their moons to fulfill the requirements of the order and give them a massive system to grow into. (worlds to be subbed later). Named after the five force priestesses of that had appeared to grandmasters. The three largest of the worlds are gas giants with dozens of moons while the fifth is made for non force users who are born of the jedi.
    • Moons: Five moons orbiting the planet naturally with defensive and early warning stations designed to protect the world. The moons themselves have been colonized and made to mirror the planet they orbit. Large and covered in a massive surface spanning planet temple that houses different divisions within the order itself. The massive temples are able to function much like the world below with its own self sustaining design to break down and recycle everything.
    • Hyperspatial breakwater: A nebula anomaly around the system, similar to the stygian caldera impeding navigation and making it harder to get to the system.
  • Location: Between Tund, Lowich
  • Major Imports: N/A
  • Major Exports: Crystals, High Technology
  • Unexploited Resources: Force Crystals
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: 1.5 Standard
  • Climate: Temperate and calm for being a major city, the surface of the temple i able to show the seasons but it is controlled the deeper down it goes until it reaches the surface of the planet.
  • Primary Terrain: Ecumenopolis Fortress world Temple
  • Atmosphere: Type I
LOCATION INFORMATION
  • Capital City: Ashla
  • Planetary Features: A massive planet wide temple structure filled with chambers for each jedi, training rooms, mess hallss and lower near the surface biospheres with some of the original flora and fauna of the world in primordial jungles.
  • Major Locations:
    • Grand Council Chamber: A large chamber on Nibelengen that is designed to provide the jedi high council members from each member world and moon a seat within their own senate and the systems within the government are designed that if need be the grandmaster of the order could run the entire system and order.
    • The Grand Temple: Massive in scale and scope, the temple spreads across the entire planet and is fashioned like Coruscant with hundreds of levels of rooms and gardens for meditations. Training areass as well as mess halls and storage. The lowest levels closest to the surface of the planet house the power generators and geothermal taps.
  • Force Nexus:
    • Intent: To fill in the effects a planet full of jedi would do over time.
    • Nexus Name: Norn
    • Nexus Alignment: Light
    • Size: Planetary
    • Strength: Strong
    • Accessibility: Created on the planets and moons from the large concentration of jedi. The nexus is massive and can be felt like a clean wash when one enters the system.
    • Effects: A light sensation of revitalization and inspiration for lightside force users.
POPULATION
  • Native Species: N/A
  • Immigrated Species:
  • Population: Heavy:
  • Demographics: Nibe Jedi:
  • Primary Languages: Galactic Basic
  • Culture:
    • The culture that has developed on the worlds is a small evolution of the jedi order. Developing within isolation as a society the jedi have grown to become their own culture with rules and law that fits to make the world a better place. There are penalties and each temple controls their members with those who cannot feel the force or have failed finding positions in other sections of the order. They have remained steadfast to it evolving into a stricter more refined and pure as they see it version of the jedi that handles the darkside when it appears with swift decision and force. The grandmaster of the jedi order appointed by both opinion within the grand council and bloodline. His authority is absolute and rarely challenged but if the grandmaster dies and there is no heir or the heir is to young to lead lacking the experience and wisdom the duty falls to the grand council to lead and either appoint a new grandmaster chosen from them or teach the heir.
    • The Golden Path: A pathway that was taken in the early expansion and explosion era of the galaxy. Leaving coordinates and trails across the galaxy that were discovered by Matsu Ike and Corvus Raaf. From ancient prison on Belsavis to a golden city in the ice worlds of the Rishi Maze to the outer sections of the galaxy. With her daughter and padawan working on things the jedi found a holocron from an older expedition. All of it leading the way towards the system that would give the jedi something to see.
    • The Five Sisters: The names of the planets themselves, named after a vision one of the ancient grandmasters had where he was visited by five robed being who taught him a secret. As he was one of the original leaders of the exploration party and in charge of naming the system the worlds they were terraforming became the five sisters representing them as three major gas giants and two mid size planets that would house the temples eventually on their moons for the order.
    • Jedi: Without saying it is one of the biggest aspects of the system and its worlds... all are trained as jedi with non force users and those who try and use the darkside being sent to the fifth world at the edge of the system to live or survive... darksiders are if they can't be redeemed more then likely to be killed to protect the others from such influences and it is intensely drilled into the younglings and padawans the dangers of the darkside and not controlling their emotions.
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: Jedi Autocracy
  • Affiliation: Jedi Order
  • Wealth: High: Exporting gemstones and fuel that has been harvested from the worlds, the system itself largely pays for its privacy and isolation keeping itself from trade routes and major hyperlanes and using transports to go from their system to a major system.
  • Stability: High: Being founded by the jedi order and controlled by the grandmaster of the order
  • Freedom & Oppression: Highly controlled, the worlds operate as massive jedi temples with strict procedures and mandates in place. Training and physical activity in the mornings, meditation in the afternoon and at night socializing. Freedom comes from being able to court and form houses within the order as it is encouraged to have the strongest bloodlines in the force and the jedi.
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: Older model vessels from the age of exploration with not much need. The jedi arre able to act as their own military force and defend themselves if need be but most who stumble upon the remote and hidden system are explorers without hostile intent.
  • Technology: A mixture of old Republic technology with highly advanced recycling and production equipment. The planet recycling all of its waste to convert and make it into materials they can reuse again and again.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
In ancient times the worlds were barren and covered in rocks, nothing was on the surface and something happened that shattered two of the worlds deeper in system creating a massive debris field around the sun that could be seen making the zones beyond it have different light sources and specks. The direction towards the world itself laid out for the jedi by the jedi as they expanded out to places of force energy throughout the galaxy leaving behind coordinates and locations along the golden pathway.

Then the jedi came, in ancient colonization ships that were able to reach the system from unknown regions keeping them in stasis pods for the trip. Once they found their way in system they did not have much deploying terraforming equipment to one of the worlds they could find and returning to sleep until the first world was able to be colonized. The teams set out and began to work on the others wanting to use them for their resources as needed and to construct what would become addition civilizations in case of problems.

Several problems arose early on in their works, the jedi were in need of more then they could normally get, livestock, food, shelter on the worlds was required and as they advanced in the temples and their works they changed the orders policies within. They served for life, there was no retirement, there was no backing out unless you were unable to use the force or failed terribly by falling to the darkside. Slowly the grandmaster himself became the absolute authority over several thousand years.

The council system still existed, with the temples they were constructing and the jedi they had there needed to be a series of leaders who could carry out the will of the grandmaster for the order on those worlds. Each with their own council of leaders for the main halls and setup to maintain a level of control. With time it became refined as they discovered that debris and remains from older ships were there, newer ships in the galaxy finding their way through and being destroyed as the remains were collected by the jedi.

They eventually turned all of it into something useful constructing temples across the simple and building them up, the non force users and padawans who failed settling and making their own world where they could grow and interact with the order finding new positions. The grandmaster leading them through the times as the force shifts in the galaxy could be felt until several ships broke through the storm. Approaching them and delivering the gulag plague to the worlds themselves as it spread infection throughout.

The populations of the worlds were devastated while they were coming in, working to try and cure them but failing. Eventually they managed to quarantine most in the healers temple and slowly the plague passed leaving them to repopulate and try to discover what was happening. There was not much recordings left in the ship but the jedi worked to handle it, rebuilding, repopulating, renewing their faith in the force until they had a sizable population once again that saw its way out of the darkness.

Then more time continued to pass and they found new things to be curious about, new dangers seemed to be felt in the force by the grand council and the grandmaster himself while the jedi dug in their heels and found purchase in the lightside of the force. Weathering the storm that was the netherworld when the grandmaster disappeared leaving his son behind. A younger man but one who wanted to see the jedi prosper and tried to launch new ships to break through and end their isolation.

There seemed to be something though, eventually ships came through with beacons to guide a pathway and forge ahead. Ships that were as they saw able to take the damaged ships, asteroids and what they could find and repair themselves as needed to restore everything within the system to protect itself. They met new jedi explorers who had found the path that was laid out long ago and led them here to this system and the order. Revealing all of the horros and wonders to them as news that the order had continued in many forms.

The news was only slightly shocking to the grandmaster of the Nibe Jedi, in its current years they had sent scouts out every few centuries to tell them and try to find information. Even going so far as to investigate when in the outer rim worlds the starlight beacon emerged offering aid to those who needed it and the jedi. Under their commander though the jedi largely continued to remain isolated as different governments came within the area but avoided bothering them.

The Nibe jedi though and some of the silver jedi did meet and talk Jyoti Nooran Jyoti Nooran and Matsu Ike Matsu Ike being among the few and while the Nibe jedi offered support the silver jedi avoided contacting them before disappearing from the region and moving to a new sector fo the galaxy. The Nibe jedi returned to their lives and continued to train for the day when the billions of their numbers could be used to reinforce the order as the grandmaster offered plenty to Matsu and by extension her friend Romi Jade Romi Jade and Coren Starchaser Coren Starchaser should their need for support come.
 
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I find it incredibly hard to believe that a planet can be both a ecumenopolis and be super isolated, impossible to reach, and be surrounded by an asteroid field. It's going to either be one or the other it realistically cannot be both.
 
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[member="Darth Prazutis"] edited out the exterior asteroid field but I am hoping I can keep the interior one where the planets were destroyed before the worlds were terraformed. Also changed the location to somewhere closer but still not breaking the planet location rule (no hexes with three or more worlds.
 
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Asteroid Field: A debris field created from something long ago, the remains an eight planet seems to be there and it is closer to the suns orbiting around and protecting the first sister from the sun.


Hyperspace disturbance: A section around the system that was broken through in small locations leading into the Massive Energy Storm. Hyperspace travel into the system and out of it requires strong navigational skills.
I can't allow this to remain. There's a reason planets such as those in the deep core are remote and rarely traveled and there's no major booming city planets like this. It's either one or the other because having both an extremely hard to get to planet and a booming eucmenopolis fortress world is highly unrealistic.
 
Native Species: <Species that have always lived there>
Immigrated Species: <Immigrant species with significant populations>
Primary Languages: <Galactic Standard Basic is the movies' English, all others are can be seen on Wookieepedia>
Government: <Federal Republic would describe a government such as the United States. Other general terms can be used>
Population: <For reference, Earth's population is 7.1 billion and Coruscant's is 1 trillion. Demographics welcomed here>
Demonym: <What a resident of this planet would be called. Residents of Coruscant are called Coruscanti>
Major Imports: <What the planet frequently buys from other planets>
The population line is missing from your submission. Please add this in.

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[member="Matsu Ike"]

I thought that might be the way you were going to go. I cannot accept 1 trillion as a population, reasons being for a very similar submission having been denied that number outright previously. The precedent is set.

As well the size of this planet is a bit of an issue at over thrice the size of earth.

Taken from the previous judgement on the other submission, remarks made by [member="Valiens Nantaris"]

  • Population is impossibly high. Since Coruscant has been the centre of the galaxy for thousands of years and has a population of 1 trillion, ... I suggest 10-20 billion.
  • ... The largest [terrestrial] planet discovered in our galaxy (which is larger than any mentioned in the EU) is about 1.5 the size of earth, not eight times. The simple fact is mass and gravity. Beyond a certain point planets become gas giants. ... I suggest 13,000km.

  • Earth is plenty big enough. Simply make it have more than 30% land and you have unlimited area. If you've ever walked from Siberia to Spain you'll appreciate how big just one landmass on this planet is. I don't see any reason to go 20,000...just because. That's almost the size of Neptune.


  • I'd rather not have the population outdo (or even match) Coruscant. Especially with plagues and the limited contact of the planet, the natural resources could not survive a population so large. 20 billion is the absolute max I will allow.
 
Emberlene's Daughter, The Jedi Generalist
[member="Lorelei Darke"] edited the size and the population down and is there anyway the population limit could be added onto the template. (much like beskar not being allowed as a material)
 
It is something I will look into and add to the changes we are looking to make within Codex over the next few weeks.

This is better, thank you for working with me.

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Submission Name: Nibelungen
Link to Submission: Nibelungen
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Update to current standards and fix subs

Submission Name: Jun-la
Link to Submission: Jun-la
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Update to current standards and fix subs

Submission Name: Del-Ya
Link to Submission: Del-Ya
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Update to current standards and fix subs

Submission Name: Ami-Su
Link to Submission: Ami-Su
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Update to current standards and fix subs

Submission Name: Ren-Popo
Link to Submission: Ren-Popo
Reason for Moving to Pre-Codex: Update to current standards and fix subs
Please include a list of changes and don't forget to tag Codex Staff when you're ready, or, you can use the "Ready for Judgement" Pre-Fix.
 
Matsu Ike Matsu Ike

Hey there! Hope you're havin' a good weekend so far. From what I can tell there's only a minor fix to be done then this is ready for secondary approval!


  • Intent: Could you link Corvus Raaf and Sorel Crieff here for player reference?
Other than that everything looks fine. Thanks for updating!
 
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