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Approved NPC Mythosaur Squadron

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Name Mythosaur Squadron
Intent: To create an elite unit for RP enhancement
Affiliation: Katbiyre Rekr
Availability: Unique
Quality: B
Type: Infantry
Strength: 50
Description:
An elite unit, hand picked by Katbiyre from CDA's security forces, because of their specific skill-sets, so that he could have backup whenever he needed. After selection, they went through a rigorous 6-month training regime and were tested physically and mentally, through obstacle courses(complete with razor sharp barbed wire), simulators, weapon training, and standing before firing squads to see how they react(They would not be notified that this was a drill). Trained in martial arts such as Echani, k'atari, and Rek'Dul, they rely heavily on each other. Although they are far less formidable alone. All of them have at least rudimentary piloting experience with Echoy'la fighters. With the best pilots among them also fly as Sundari squadron out of the Concordia One. Some of them were selected because of their piloting skills, other were selected because of their proficiency with weapons or their technological knowhow. They aren't the best tactical leaders, meaning they can lead but not really plan. Nor are they the best at anything other than their specialty, meaning that the ones who trained for stealth operations are only just above the normal recruit in piloting or efficency in open warfare.

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Ok, I think you need to go into more depth throughout the sub.
Add some more details, maybe talk more about her history, and her personality.
Also, as a force sensitive padwan, you'll need to describe her experience and history with the force.

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Great, but the sub still needs a bit more description for a B-quality squadron. For example, you could describe how they trained, or what singled them out from the other troops. How strong are they in martial combat, and what is their battle experience?

Also, for clarification, maybe explain the unit type, as generally squadrons are air-only.

[member="Katbirye Ordo"]
 
Could you also please change "Loyalties", to "Affiliation", and move it so it is below Intent.

A B-quality unit needs to have a strong description, so I would recommend adding as much to that as possible.
 
The description is a lot better now, but since you have increased the strength of the unit, it will require Dev.

You will need a 10-post Dev thread, for this unit.
If you don't want to do the thread you could either make them C-grade, or reduce the numbers down again.

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That's fine, could you just the "affiliation" section so that it is between "intent" and "availability". 50 is still quite a lot, but an extra few sentences, and a minor weakness should cover it.
 
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