Approved Location Laranis I

[Visanj T'shkali]

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
Intent: To submit a planet for future submissions and role-playing.
​Image Credit: [X] (Image Credit: Lynette Cook/NASA)
Canon: N/A
Links:

• Laranis System
• Laranis II
• Laranis III
• Laranis System Protectorate

SETTING INFORMATION
Astronomical Location Name: Laranis I
Classification: Barren Planetoid
Location: Laranis System
Rotational Period: 19 Standard Hours
Orbital Period: 223 Standard Days
Size: Small
Affiliation: Laranis System Protectorate
Population: Uninhabited
Demographics: N/A
Accessibility: A known part of the Laranis System, Laranis I is devoid of any atmosphere, life, or known resources. It’s a known but almost never visited place.
Description: Desolate and barren, the rocky lifeless planetoid is hot and possessed of a dense gravity field, making it both undesirable and difficult to easily visit. Often referred to by Laranisian locals as ‘The Rock’, it serves little purpose and has little bearing on life in the system.

POINTS OF INTEREST: N/A - The planetoid is largely unexplored and virtually never visited, and beyond a few rock formations it is an entirely unremarkable surface. To describe any portion of Laranis I as being 'of interest' is well, flattery at worst, lying at best.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION:
The small planet of Laranis I is entirely devoid of life, owing to its rocky, desolate terrain, extreme heat, lack of atmosphere, and intense gravity. Rarely visited and largely ignored, it remains a part of the Laranis System Protectorate, but serves no purpose to that system – or anyone, frankly – and remains generally unexplored.

 

[Veino Garn]

Looks good for a basic, uninhabited world! Thanks for clarifying the image source here too.

[member="John Locke"]

 

[John Locke]

[member="Veino Garn"] | [member="Visanj T'shkali"]

This is a very empty submission, especially for a planet submission. Especially given the functionality of any planet to be put onto the map, I'm afraid that we're going to need more detail added to this submission before we can approve it.

Unexploited Resources: None Known

In this case, does this mean that there are no resources, or none that you want to reveal at this time? If there are any resources, they need to be linked here.

In addition, the submission is very bare, and as you have mentioned there doesn't appear to be any kind of habitation, resources or history behind the planet as it currently stands. It appears tto be little more than a rock in space, and I am finding it hard to see the point of this particular submission as it currently stands.

Please let me know what you want to do with the submission.

 

[Visanj T'shkali]

[member="John Locke"]

Would you be so kind as to slide this over to pre-Codex? It would likely do better as an 'astronomical object' in a location sub, given the essential and utter useless rock in space it's meant to be, LOL.

Thank you, Sir.

 

[John Locke]

[member="Visanj T'shkali"]

Now moved to pre-codex as requested

 

[John Locke]

Good Evening [member="Visanj T'shkali"]

As per the pre-codex rules, which can be found here, submissions may remain in the pre-codex for a month before they are archived. This submission, however, has exceeded that time limit.

Could you please update us on the status of this submission? Will you be working on it and making it ready for live judging soon, or would you prefer that we archive the submission until you have more time to work on it?

 

[Visanj T'shkali]

[member="John Locke"]

How's this? I reworked it into a location sub - astronomical object.

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Visanj T'shkali"] Hey there! This submissions definetly works much better as an astronomical object rather than a planet. Let's just take care of a few small things and then we can get this approved!

Links:

• Laranis System

This link does not work.

Affiliation: Laranis System Protectorate

I know you've linked to the Laranis System Protectorate in your links section, but I would suggest linking it here as well for ease of reading/clicking.

POINTS OF INTEREST: N/A

I strongly encourage you to add at least some points of interest. These don't have to be RP hothouse; for example, mentioning a crater somewhere on this rock could count as one, or a place where the gravity is a wee bit wonky, or anything like that.


And that's it! Please tag me back once these edits are done (or in case you've decided not to do the second and third ones, as these are not mandatory) and then we can get this approved

 

[Visanj T'shkali]

[member="Scherezade deWinter"]

Links fixed, and a slightly expanded description of why this utterly useless rock is entirely without appeal has been made.

Hope this works for you!

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Visanj T'shkali"] Yup, this works. Thank you very much Approved!