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[Hester Shedo]

Hey friends,

I've just begun on the forum so I thought i'd drop by here and check out the brilliant way the community helps each other out! I'd really really welcome any constructive critique on my narrative style-I'm never sure!

Faction - Day one...

Day One Inevitable was a word laden with expectation. It was a heavy, deliberate word that would weigh heavily on anyone person that was confronted with it. She had been told her ascension to the highest office in the system was ‘inevitable’ since she had been a teenage girl. She did not...

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Hester is a character I've fallen for madly and am going to enjoy watching her scheme and create for as long as you'll let me!

 

[Cypher Rage]

Hester Shedo

AWESOME! I really love reading your posts, the energy in every one of them is fantastic.

 

[Jsc]

Hester Shedo

I skimmed it.

+++ Diverse wording. Amazing articulation. Excellent energy and pacing.
+ Colored text. Good punctuation.
~ Formatting.
- Unintended word repetitions in a following sentence.
- - - None.

Overall: 10/10 - An great experience