Approved Tech Hekler'Kok PDW-1

[Noah Corek]

(PDW-1 With the stock extended, a extended mag and a muzzle brake)
Intent: To create a small concealable weapon that everyone can use to defend themselves
Development Thread: N/A
Manufacturer: Hekler'Kok Defense Industries
Model: Personal Defense Weapon-1
Affiliation: Independent
Modularity: Yes (Optics, Suppressors, Muzzle Brakes, Flashlights, Laser Sights, etc.)
Production: Mass-Produced
Material: Duraplast Shell with Plasteel Inners
Description: Small, lightweight, portable and suprisingly hard hitting for a weapon its size, these qualities makes this weapon the perfect for the role of a personal defense weapon. While this weapon is great it also has some flaws that make it imperfect. One of those flaws being its small cartridge, while larger than most PDW cartridges, which tend to use pistol cartridges, even though it is much larger and can pierce a centimeters of body armor, it still lacks the stopping and piercing power of rifle cartridges. The smaller size of the gun means that the barrel is shorter, severly limiting its range and muzzle velocity,which could be negated with muzzle brakes and extended barrels,which adds weight to the usually lightweight weapon. This weapon is a short range weapon, it isn't suited for long to medium and only suited for CQC combat, if you get this thing more than 60 meters from your intended target,don't expect to put the entire mag into the target. This weapon is great,being superior to a blaster carbine or pistol in a few ways, one being the fact that it can be extremely more modified compared to blasters. The second factor being the fact that specialized ammunition like High Explosive, Armor-Piercing, Tungsten Rounds, Hollow Points can increase the damage for this weapon.
Classification: Slugthrower
Size: Handheld
Status: Limited
Length: 73.1 Centimeters (Stock Extended with Suppressor), 64.1 Centimeters (Stock Extended), 42.2 Centimeters (Stock Collapsed)
Weight: 1.2 Kilograms
Ammunition Type: 4.6x30mm
Ammunition Capacity: 20, 30 or 40 Rounds Magazines
Effective Range: 60 Meters

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"]

This weapon is great,being superior to a blaster carbine or pistol in a few ways,one being the fact that it can be extremely modified compared to the limited modibilty.

Blasters can be modified too.

unperfect

modibilty

There are a lot of typos in there; could you run it through a spellcheck plz?

Status: Legal

Where and how is a submachine gun street-legal?

One of those flaws being its small cartridge,while larger than most PDW cartridges,which tend to use pistol cartridges,even though it is much larger and can pierce a centimeters of body armor,it still lacks the stopping and piercing power of rifle cartridges.

So its flaw is that it's more powerful than most guns its size but less powerful than larger guns? I hate to say it, but that's not a flaw, that's a manufacturer's humble brag.

Basically, dude, I've seen you take much more care with other subs than with this one; it comes off as a bit off the cuff. Factory's a privilege, not a right.

 

[Noah Corek]

Blasters can be modified too.

How about now?

There are a lot of typos in there; could you run it through a spellcheck plz?

Done.

Where and how is a submachine gun street-legal?

Fixed.

So its flaw is that it's more powerful than most guns its size but less powerful than larger guns? I hate to say it, but that's not a flaw, that's a manufacturer's humble brag.

Shall I change that?

[member="Rasho the Hutt"]

 

[Noah Corek]

Basically, dude, I've seen you take much more care with other subs than with this one; it comes off as a bit off the cuff. Factory's a privilege, not a right.

I admit man,I've been a little off my game and my tech muse is starting to diminish.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"] - We've all been there. This one isn't up to your standards, sadly, and I can tell you're not feeling it. Now, you can go in, fix the typos, flesh out the weapon, toss in an actual limitation or two, and rework the modification line again, or I can archive it until you're feeling inspired. Tech subs shouldn't be a chore - they should start with a great idea, some passion, some drive. Don't worry about expanding your product line; focus on selling what you already have, I'd say.

 

[Noah Corek]

[member="Rasho the Hutt"]
Please god just archive it,I just looked at one of my other submissions and this is extremely crappy.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"] - It's all good bro. We've all been there.

 

[Noah Corek]

[member="Rasho the Hutt"]
All right man,tell me how we're looking now.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"] - There's a ton of places with no space after commas - tidy that up and I'll approve.

 

[Noah Corek]

[member="Rasho the Hutt"]
Done.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"] - Not seeing many edits. Tag me when they're done.

 

[Noah Corek]

[member="Rasho the Hutt"]
OK, I'm 90% sure I fixed those edits you asked for two posts ago.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Noah Corek"] - Approved pending secondary approval.

 

[Thurion Heavenshield]

Approved.