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NPC Review Fleet Admiral Vorin Zonill

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a Fleet Admiral capable of commanding the Mahporeem Imperial Navy.
  • Image Credit: Artstation Link, image created by Brian Matyas.
  • Role: In addition to his role of Fleet Admiral, Vorin Zonill is also in command of the MIN Collateral Star, the largest and most heavily armed vessel in the entire Mahporeem fleet.
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: Wookieepedia.
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: Late 40s to Early 50s.
  • Force Sensitivity: Non-Force User.
  • Species: Human.
  • Appearance: Fleet Admiral Vorin Zonill is a fair skinned, human male native of the planet Mahporeem. He stands at 1.82 meters tall, with short brown hair, and is completely clean shaven. He is of average build and possesses no distinct marks or tattoos anywhere on his face or body. Vorin takes great pride in maintaining his appearance, and goes to great lengths to ensure that he is as presentable as possible, regardless of current circumstances.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Fleet Admiral Vorin Zonill.
  • Loyalties:
  • Wealth: Being a high ranking military officer, Fleet Admiral Vorin Zonill is quite wealthy, or is about as wealthy as one can be on a planet like Mahporeem.
  • Notable Possessions:
  • Skills:
    • Piloting.
    • Naval Warfare.
    • Command and Leadership.
    • Small Arms Usage.
  • Languages:
  • Personality: Vorin has been described as being a serious, no nonsense type of person. He despises mediocracy and pushes both himself and his crew to be as exceptional as possible, often to the chagrin of those who work under him. That being said, Zonill is also loyal and honest, and is said to be especially incorruptible to any form of bribery or blackmail. Though he can be harsh at times, those who truly know him are happy to serve under his leadership, appreciating the drive and passion that he puts into his position.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice:
  • Combat Function: Being a Fleet Admiral, Vorin Zonill is no stranger to ship to ship combat, often overseeing massive naval engagements against a variety of different enemies. That being said, most of the danger that Vorin finds himself in comes from enemy starfighters and capital ships. Vorin rarely, if ever, fights infantry or ground forces due to the nature of his role, though he is always accompanied by a personal guard of Storm Commandos or Chrome Guardians. Vorin does know how to use a blaster, as it was part of his officer training, but is not especially skilled in that sort of fighting.
  • Force Abilities (Force Users Only): N/A
Strengths:
  • Skilled naval tactician.
  • Adaptable in battle.
  • Unswervingly loyal to Mahporeem.
  • Incorruptible.
  • Driven and motivated to succeed.
Weaknesses:
  • Relatively young and inexperienced.
  • Poor personal combat skills.
  • Intolerant of mediocrity.
  • Can be difficult to work under.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Vorin Zonill was born on the planet Mahporeem to a wealthy military family. He enrolled in the Imperial Naval Academy at a young age, and quickly developed a reputation as a earnest, no nonsense type of soldier. Upon graduation, Zonill was assigned to the MIN Judicator, where he would see extensive combat against pirates, smugglers and even the occasional space leviathan.

Zonill's success in combating these threats, combined with his refusal to accept bribes or engage in any form of corruption, quickly secured him a number of promotions. By the time that Mahporeem officially joined the Imperial Confederation, Zonill had already achieved the rank of Admiral.

Yet, Zonill would truly be tested for first time with Mahporeem's invasion of Minntoonie, the first major invasion that Mahporeem had attempted in hundreds of years. Commanding a sizable task force of ships, Zonill set off to subjugate the planet once and for all.

Upon arriving in the sector, Zonill was attacked by swarms of starfighters and long range ion cannons. Despite the threat to his fleet, Zonill was able to defeat his foes and support Imperial Confederation Admiral Squesha in the capture of a dangerous Imperial traitor, securing a naval victory over the enemies of the Imperial Confederation.

With his mettle in battle proven, Zonill was promoted to Fleet Admiral and given command over the entire Mahporeem Imperial Navy, along with the command of the MIN Collateral Star. With the might of the entire navy behind him, Zonill has now set his sights on the Thandon Star Cluster, where he seeks to do battle with a most dangerous foe: the Sith!
 
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Mastema

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Ronhar Tane Ronhar Tane A Fleet Admiral surrounded by good tech and people. Certainly poised to strike out and make a difference.

Just one clarification to request about the weakness "Relatively young and inexperienced" which seems to run counter to his efforts on the naval battlefield and elevation to Fleet Admiral over forty-years of age.
 
Ronhar Tane Ronhar Tane A Fleet Admiral surrounded by good tech and people. Certainly poised to strike out and make a difference.

Just one clarification to request about the weakness "Relatively young and inexperienced" which seems to run counter to his efforts on the naval battlefield and elevation to Fleet Admiral over forty-years of age.
Hey! Thanks for commenting! I put that down because he’s relatively young person for the position of fleet admiral. Case in point: IRL, the youngest U.S Fleet Admiral was 49 years old. I know he’s not that young, but for a fleet admiral I feel like that’s fairly young.

He does also have a lot of experience fighting pirates, smugglers and space monsters but not a lot of experience fighting other major factions or fleets cause of Mahporeem’s isolation. That’s why I put that down for his weakness.

Of course, I’m open to any feedback and suggestions you might have!
 
Mastema Mastema | Ronhar Tane Ronhar Tane

Just one thing that jumps out to me here, the flagship is almost 5,000m long, but the largest ship that can be affiliated with an individual is 500m. While the ship can be affiliated with the minor faction, they can't be associated with any individual be that PC or NPC per the table below.

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If you can correct this and tag me back we'll be good to go.
 
Mastema Mastema | Ronhar Tane Ronhar Tane

Just one thing that jumps out to me here, the flagship is almost 5,000m long, but the largest ship that can be affiliated with an individual is 500m. While the ship can be affiliated with the minor faction, they can't be associated with any individual be that PC or NPC per the table below.

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If you can correct this and tag me back we'll be good to go.
Hey! I have removed his command of the flagship from his profile. That being said, I am allowed to have him captain the ship during battle?

Edit: Oh, and if I need to remove that from his weapon's of choice I'll do so as well.
 

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