Approved Lore First Fleet | Craig's Fleet

[Ben Craig]

Zak Dymo

Ready good sir.

 

[Srina Talon]

Ben Craig

This looks pretty good. All your permissions check out - Just a little thing.

1.) Permissions & Links: What is this Have Gun will Travel for under permissions? It's a company page, however, it doesn't seem to have any permissions on it? It also seems like some of your permissions are in the wrong place? Please double-check those.

Let me know when you're ready and I'll take another pass.

 

[Ben Craig]

Srina Talon

done

 

[Ben Craig]

Srina Talon

Sorry for last minute updates, but i reformed the Composition and added a few additions in composition.

 

[Srina Talon]

Ben Craig

I'll review it again shortly.

 

[Srina Talon]

Ben Craig

Your links check out, however, I would advise that you use this extremely fleet wisely. Adding hard numbers in this fashion is both a benefit and a detriment.

Fleet and Army submissions are for fluff and flavor. They are not a hard-line numbers game, but a place to collect and organize. Size is a relative field, not an indicator of who would win in a head to head confrontation. Be sensible and reasonable or edits will be required.

I will pass this through but do not forget the Codex Rule above.

[Approved]

 

[Srina Talon]

Sub Name: First Fleet
Link: https://www.starwarsrp.net/threads/first-fleet-craigs-fleet.137500/
Reason to move to pre-codex: Affiliation Change

Sub Name: 34th Detachment
Link: https://www.starwarsrp.net/threads/34th-detachment.140746/
Reason to move to Pre-codex: Some minor edits

Don't forget to tag a member of Codex Staff when you're ready & include a list of changes. Thank you!

 

[Ben Craig]

Allyson Locke

done

 

[Fevris Derzelas]

Hello, I will be reviewing your submission.

Everything looks good to me here so I will approve this. However, I would like to point out that Eriadu Manufacturing Shipyards is not featured in N&Z Umbrella Corporation's subsidiaries, in extension as a subsidary of Nargath Holdings. The blanket permission for the parent corporation still gives you permission to use its submissions, but this information should be readily available in N&Z Umbrella Corporation's company submission.

I will also suggest, as previous judges have done, to keep in mind the following:

Fleet and Army submissions are for fluff and flavor. They are not a hard-line numbers game, but a place to collect and organize. Size is a relative field, not an indicator of who would win in a head to head confrontation. Be sensible and reasonable or edits will be required.

APPROVED.
Ben Craig