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[Isobel Serraris]

I was hesitating on doing this at 250 posts, but haha, that hesitation is part of the reason why I must ask!

Part of me wonders whether my writing and my character are interesting enough or fun enough to keep the way it is!

The thing I see myself doing is using a lot of internal monologue and that may not be too appealing to every writer — which is fine too ! I just wish to see some opinions )

p.s. very aware of the run-on sentences, but they are very normal in my work field lolll

 

[Arris Windrun]

I really enjoyed the scene we wrote together with Arris and Iso - I like her a lot as a character!

For feedback? I think your assessment of internal monologue and run-on sentences is an honest one. At times, I had to dissect your posts just to be absolutely confident that I knew what was going on.

This is a personal take, but I really believe roleplaying =/= writing. Roleplaying is the activity, and writing is the medium, and I think (based on the one interaction!), at times, you've prioritised the writing portion in your posts over the RP portion. I feel that it is important for posts to be very clear and direct in how they are moving the scene, so that the roleplay is smooth and enjoyable.

Flowery stuff, internal monologues, writing your character's voice/POV? It's great! Important even. But I thought it took up a significant portion of your posts.

That said, I am eager to see more of her and write another thread with you again! I absolutely love the romanticism of her aesthetic and behaviors. It really makes me feel like I am interacting with a mystical person.

 

[Varin Mortifer]

You definitely have the RP down I think your writing really helps settle a mood, realy conveys what is going on through her head and flows well as responses to other posts. Personally, I do not mind internal monologue, it really helps me understand the character, as for run on sentences I cant honestly say I have had a big issue with them but thats just me

 

[Darth Prazutis]

I echo what Arris Windrun said definitely. Your a great writer, I've enjoyed reading your stuff. Sometimes it takes a little more to dissect exactly whats going on in the scene.

 

[Isobel Serraris]

I guess that sort of begs the question, can you be a good writer if people cannot conclude what is happening. Thank you three for giving me feedback, but this means I will need some time to well… think

 

[Lysander von Ascania]

I've always been a fan of your prose. I'm probably a little biased because of our fantasy roots, but I enjoy the run-ons, imagery, introspection etc. It gives Izzy a very distinct voice.

Not every style is going to be everyone's cup of tea and that's okay. One of your strengths imo is how sincere it feels. The technical side of things can always be refined over time if you want to. That's just part of the process.

I'd hate to see a little self doubt get in the way of something you enjoy. As long as you're having fun with it and not forcing yourself through it, I think you're on the right track. Always in your corner, friend. ^^

 

[Darth Prazutis]

Isobel Serraris

No ones perfect, and writing is like a muscle it gets stronger with time. You are truly a great writer, I enjoy seeing how distinct she is. Don’t be discouraged!

 

[The Arkanian]

Isobel Serraris I really enjoy your writing style. It has a flair for the epic homeric.

 

[Meya Liefi]

I very much enjoy reading your posts, even though we've never written together and this might make me come across as a weirdo. One thing I find refreshing here is being able to jump between threads and experience vastly different writing styles.

Sometimes I have to slow down and reread parts of your posts, but I don't mind that at all. If anything, it encourages me to pay a little more attention, and I always come away appreciating the obvious care you put into your writing.

 

[Kitter Bitters]

I haven’t rokellayed with you a ton but I think you are a nice person and you always talk to me in chat so you seem like a positive influence.

I also like the background for your character. It’s a good read.

 

[Isobel Serraris]

Thank you all for the feedback, I can totally see where all of you are coming from and it’s definitely something to work with !!

Especially in action-scenes I can totally work with this feedback:

I feel that it is important for posts to be very clear and direct in how they are moving the scene, so that the roleplay is smooth and enjoyable.

But that said, it is indeed part of my prose (and Iso’s mystic vibes) to be a bit more flowery. That said, finding a balance between the two might be achievable…

As for the other comments below, this was totes my intent with writing her. Part of me is still getting used to writing her again <3 so bear with me that it is a little high on internal reasoning—she is heavily in conflict (visions, force alignments and more) so it does have a IC reason

Personally, I do not mind internal monologue, it really helps me understand the character

And these two

I'm probably a little biased because of our fantasy roots, but I enjoy the run-ons, imagery, introspection etc. It gives Izzy a very distinct voice.

(Thanks nerd)

It has a flair for the epic homeric.

It’s definitely to blame on the fact that I mostly wrote medieval-esque fantasy before (primarily politically-based characters, King’s advisors and such), so archaic (if not unusual) words are a part of my vocab and (internal) monologues are a frequent occurrence!

And the comments about dissecting my posts and rereading it ;-; part of me is honoured and also I am sorry LOL. Will try to improve.

Again thank you all and I look forward to write with all of you (again) <33