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[Isobel Serraris]

I was hesitating on doing this at 250 posts, but haha, that hesitation is part of the reason why I must ask!

Part of me wonders whether my writing and my character are interesting enough or fun enough to keep the way it is!

The thing I see myself doing is using a lot of internal monologue and that may not be too appealing to every writer — which is fine too ! I just wish to see some opinions )

p.s. very aware of the run-on sentences, but they are very normal in my work field lolll

 

[Arris Windrun]

I really enjoyed the scene we wrote together with Arris and Iso - I like her a lot as a character!

For feedback? I think your assessment of internal monologue and run-on sentences is an honest one. At times, I had to dissect your posts just to be absolutely confident that I knew what was going on.

This is a personal take, but I really believe roleplaying =/= writing. Roleplaying is the activity, and writing is the medium, and I think (based on the one interaction!), at times, you've prioritised the writing portion in your posts over the RP portion. I feel that it is important for posts to be very clear and direct in how they are moving the scene, so that the roleplay is smooth and enjoyable.

Flowery stuff, internal monologues, writing your character's voice/POV? It's great! Important even. But I thought it took up a significant portion of your posts.

That said, I am eager to see more of her and write another thread with you again! I absolutely love the romanticism of her aesthetic and behaviors. It really makes me feel like I am interacting with a mystical person.

 

[Varin Mortifer]

You definitely have the RP down I think your writing really helps settle a mood, realy conveys what is going on through her head and flows well as responses to other posts. Personally, I do not mind internal monologue, it really helps me understand the character, as for run on sentences I cant honestly say I have had a big issue with them but thats just me

 

[Darth Prazutis]

I echo what Arris Windrun said definitely. Your a great writer, I've enjoyed reading your stuff. Sometimes it takes a little more to dissect exactly whats going on in the scene.

 

[Isobel Serraris]

I guess that sort of begs the question, can you be a good writer if people cannot conclude what is happening. Thank you three for giving me feedback, but this means I will need some time to well… think