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Approved Planet Eclipstica - Rebooted and Remastered

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Eclipstica
  • Demonym: Eclipstan
  • Region: Outer Rim
  • System Name: Shadow Realm
  • System Features:

Each planet has it's own moon
  • Maleficara (Planet) A volcanic planet
  • Eyon (Planet) A frozen planet
  • Crucifier (Planet) A planet similar to Eclipstica and comfortably habitual
  • Necro Mincore (Planet) The farthest planet from the sun in the system, many undead things reside here
  • Metatron (Planet) Sometimes considered a "sister planet" to Eclipstica

  • Location: Same hex as Karra next to Hoth
  • Major Imports: Common exports of most other planets, furs, starship fuel, various alcohols, cloth
  • Major Exports: Foods such as fish meat, lizard meat, and fruits, along with Durasteel materials
  • Unexploited Resources: Durasteel can be found in abundance here, along with lumber from trees
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: Standard
  • Climate: Temperate, Arid, Frozen, Rainy/Swampy, Tundra
  • Primary Terrain: Grassland/Mountain, Swamp Lands, Tundra
  • Atmosphere: Type I
LOCATION INFORMATION
  • Capital City: Koloss
  • Planetary Features: Obidia is called the Five Circles, which are five cities connected via paths with each being very different from the other, and Koloss which is the capital but holds only the Shadow Keep, a large black castle
  • Major Locations:

  • Koloss - The Capital, also known as the Shadow Keep, holds the large black castle built into a mountain off the coast. The keep itself is quite large, holding over a 100 rooms for guests, and for those who live there permanently. Before the keep is trail that leads off to Obidia, the next major city on the planet. On both the right and left of this path are landing pads, large enough for a corvette class ship to land on. Going back to the keep, Giant black metal walls protect it, with larger black spiked towers watching the path (two on both left and right).
  • Obidia - The Five Circles, a local name for Obidia, is five large cities each walled in a circle, and connected by short paths. Each is governed by a Duke.
    There is Crezten the city of metal, and stone here all the smithing was done. Every single construct, armor, weapons and whatever else was made here. Duke Reilan lived here, and was a smith himself. This city was the first to be built due to the need of resources. This was probably the most none corrupted area of the Five Circles.
    Terra the city of vices, here many things would have been found to entertain someone, from gambling, lust, drinking, and killing another being. This was Sin City, this was a place not even the king was ever seen at due to all the nickname given by the builders. This was probaly the most corrupted place in Obidia, and was governed by Duke Zeko. The royals of Obidia spent much of their time here, wasting money, and being slobs.
    Gren the city of farming, all the food was produced here, though fruits seemed to be the major farming here. It was safe to say that many of the people here ate a lot of vegetables, and fruits. This was governed by Duchess Siri'ola who was a personal friend of the king. This was a peaceful place, and the king would visit often to see the Duchess, and enjoy the peace. This was also the first place to be destroyed during the Darkest Hours War.
    Yelisa was the city of royalty (This is where all royal blood lines come from.) When the people began to expand, Gaiden had to choose others for royal blood, most were his military, advisers, and other close friends he made here. No builder was ever of royal blood. This place was build with the best metals that could be found on he planet, and no house was a singe story. Yelisa was known to be ruled by many people, the first being Duke Geoff. The was to be Duchess Olka, but the city usurped her near the end of the inhabitants' lives.
    Devias the city of this is where all the builders lived, this area was a slum, and poorly built. This was the largest of all cities for there were more builders than any other civilian. The citys were all in circles with large black walls, but Devias. Many builders died here not being needed anymore in the eyes of the royals. The king didnt come here in fear that many builders wanted him dead. This was true for this was the beginning place for many uprisings.
  • The Scarlands - A place of all desert, and acidic water pools. The large cracks, and canyon are seeping with dark side energy. Going near one is a sure way to walk the path of darkness. This place is a wasteland, there is nothing here but bones, and death. This place is filled with the whispers of the all those who died in the Darkest Hours War.
  • The Black Gate - A lot like Obidia, but it rains here constantly, and only one city was here, and it was named Fallen Region. Here all exiles were commanded to reside, or else face death. This place has almost no way for one to live a comfortable life has it appears the soil is poor. The walls were built with wood, and two Black Spikes (Guard towers) were placed to watch the people in exile. It was said that many dangerous, and large creatures lived here under, and preyed on the Exiles. Now this place is largely where the military of Eclipstica resides with many garrisons dotted everywhere.
  • The White Gates - A large wall cuts the rest of the areas from the north, in the middle of this wall is a gate which allows one passage to the snowy north. As far as can be told, nothing of importance is here.


  • Force Nexus: The Scarlands - Darksided
    Intent: To provide a place for characters to explore their dark side natures more, and to become centers of storylines. To give a visual understanding of the carnage that took place here many hundreds of years ago.
    Nexus Name: Scars
  • Nexus Alignment: Dark
  • Size: Medium
  • Strength: Weak to Moderate, this is explained by how deep one goes as the nexus resides underneath the surface just enough to seep out the cracks and canyons all around, and the further to the center of this area one goes, the closer to the center of the nexus they reach.
  • Accessibility: Actually, it's quite accessible, and while anyone can visit, the nature of the beasts that reside there stop most from venturing into the Scarlands. From the air one can see it just fine, and from space, its the only dull khaki color on the planet.
  • Effects: Echoes of the battle that took place here (basic darkside abilities can be learned this way), a deeper, and stronger connection to the darkside can be achieved here, one could also turn a weaker minded Jedi, Lightsided, or Neutral Force User here to the Darkside.

POPULATION

  • Immigrated Species: Humans, Various Near Humans, Mandalorians, Exiled members of society, and many more.
  • Population: Moderate
  • Demographics: While there is no real demographic upkeep here, its clear the population is majority Human and Near Human
  • Primary Languages: Galactic Basic
  • Culture: Daily life was full of working all day, and sleeping at night with few days off. The King had many people working many jobs, but had them working constantly. So this gave them all the ability to make income, but hardly any time to enjoy it. The King hardly came out of his keep, only to stop crisis, and wars. The government was set up so that only the King's sons could rule, declaring he owned the planet, and all its people. Essentially they were all humans, and the force was used, but it wasnt called the force, it was called the Dark Sign. Many people of the kingdom could use it, and exactly how they find out how to use it seems to deal with the Rakata. Days were spent in the sunny times, and seasons existing. There was happiess, and sadness. Royal families wanted to take over, but were easily stopped by the Kings army, and put back in their place. Apart from that life was normal for anyone under rule of a King. Anyone capable of using the force was forced into the King's army, unless they were noble of blood. This, however, is no longer the case. The modern inhabitants live in a much more peaceful lifestyle, coming to Eclipstica knowing it welcomes many refugees and exiles. The daily goings on the planet are no different than Coruscant or Mandalore, with the exception that people stay away from the Scarlands, and citizens may not enter the Black Gate without permission.
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: Monarchy Clan system
  • Affiliation: [member="Romeo "]Sin has most say over the planet with [member="Aedan Miles"] having a say in things sometimes, and [member="Solan Charr"] having a prince status through Romeo. Faction wise: The Shadow Dynasty and the Crimson Covenant with the Academy of Bogan.
  • Wealth: Medium, with the exports and imports the planet has, the planet can be considered living comfortably for an Outer Rim planet.
  • Stability: High, while the occasional local bar fight may happen, most people live if not peacefully, tolerably with one another here, and while new comers are watched, they are always welcomed.
  • Freedom & Oppression: While Romeo is considered the king of the planet, his rule is more so for major decisions for the planet, the people of Eclipstica are no directly ruled by Romeo, nor does he wish to be that sort of ruler. All are welcome to go and come as they please, they just have to follow common sense of laws. An example of how this works, would be that while Romeo can just as easily deal with local crimes, the law enforcement deals with it more directly with the dukes/duchess being the judge of the guilty, but should it the crime be something much large than local than Romeo would more likely step in. Aedan Miles acts something like a vice king, should Romeo not be there at the time to make decisions, Aedan can make those decisions with the same power. With Romeo there, Aedan acts as an adviser of sorts, sitting next to Romeo on his council of advisers. Solan would be the last voice of power in this line of example.
  • Laws of Common Sense - Murdering is Prohibited (unless acted upon in self defense), Stealing is Prohibited, Driving/Flying while under the influence is Prohibited, Drugs such as Glitterstim, and Spice is Prohibited, and many many simple laws that are implemented on just common sense and are probably just as common throughout the galaxy.
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: The planet can easily overcome a civil war, or defend itself from a blockade, it's not going to be able to go toe to toe with a more major planet however. Think self sustaining for the most part. It can take care of its own self well, but it's running into any major wars without some major back up.
  • Technology: Galactic Standard
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Historical information is limited to this planet, as most of it's history was not written, instead much of it had to be pieced together through the battle at the Scarlands. What could be found was placed in chronological order as best as could be.

-During the Infinite Empire, there was a Force Hound named Gaiden. Gaiden was used has an experiment, and they later through him into the planet called Eclipstica where he was ordered to begin building a Empire here. The Rakata later on with the war with the Jedaii, forgot about Gaidens mission, believing he had probably died along with the other slaves they left with him to build the empire.
-He Succeeded, and when realizing they werent coming back, became the King of the empire, dubbing it the Shadow Empire, for they were just a shadow of what they came from.
-Gaiden marries his lover Arieen, and his children are thus born.
-Gaidens reign as King is full of joy, and he shows his children the ways of the force. He also builds the Shadow Council, declaring them all of royal blood, and orders the slaves to build them estates.
-Gaiden dies, and his oldest son, Murick becomes King.
-Murick is nearly assassinated by a servant girl, he opts its time to marry.
-Murick marries his wife Sella, and their children are born.
-Murick is almost assassinated again, this time by a guard. Murick kills the man, hangs his body in public for all to see.
-Murick thus begins to reign like a tyrant with his brothers, Uriel, and Ferrin plot to stop him. The Shadow Council is also plotting their own rebellion.
-The Shadow Council want a new blood line to rule, and begin to secretly build a army.
-While Uriel ans Ferrin are plot, the council get their army of builders to attack the keep.
-Shadow Council fails in their plots, and are sent to the lands know as The Scars as exiles, some refuse and are killed.
-Ferrin succeeds in stopping Murick, and his older brother Uriel reigns as King. Uriel also builds the Black Guard to protect him with Ferrin head of the guard.
-Uriel marries Steph, and his children are born.
-Uriel is a loved king, his rule is flourished, and is considered a prime example of Gaiden.
-Uriel is must bring down a rebellion in the builders, and is successful.
-Ferris dies in a uprising with the Exiles attempting to come back. Uriel then takes his friend, Izekel to command the Black Guards. Exiles are pushed back.
-Uriel dies, and his son Dez takes over, and marries his wife Gerial.
-Dez reshapes the kingdom to his liking, becoming another Murick. He soon builds the Five Circles, and is thus given the people a distraction from his plans to expand the kingdom.
-Dez brings the Exiles out of The Scars to serve as his Shadow Council.
-Dez has two sons, and a daughter.
-His eldest son, Murick II over throws his father, and reigns as King, sending both his dad, and the Shadow Council back to their places in exile.
-Murick II marries an unknown woman, and gets a bastard son named Sigil.
A small up rising comes up, it is destroyed against the builders again.
-Murick II dubs his new guards as Fiends, training them all to be killers.
-A small war between Exiles, and Royals comes to the light, and Murick II kills all the Exiles.
-Murick II begins to further his knowledge of the Dark Side, and starts experimenting on the ways of Drain Life.
-Murrick II is succumbed by the dark side wholly, and is beginning as another tyrant, known as Murick The Devourer.
-His son Sigil begins a rebellion that is nearly successful, this starts the Darkest Hours War, and Murick II begins to corrode the planet with his darkness the stronger he gets in it.
-Murick II builds up his power to drain life. He kills his son in a dramatic fight, thus ending the war.
-Murick II Continues to reign as king, draining life of his people in his own castle to keep himself alive for a longer period of time, this is where the castle gets its corruption.
-Murick is overcomed with darkness, and much like Nihilis, drains life from every life form on the planet, and engulfs himself in the process. Everyone on the planet dies, and thus ends the reign of the bloodline of Gaiden.
-A small freighter finds its way to the planet, it crashes onto it, and everyone dies, but not before the planets whereabouts are sent out in a multi message to many different people.
-Romeo Grabs a hold of one of these messages, in his search for the truth Romeo decides to rule this planet himself, and continue the legacy of the Shadow Empire.
-Romeo Sin, and the Hazard Beauty find the planet, Romeo finally dubs himself King of the Shadow Dynasty renaming the government, beginning a new era on the planet.
 
[member="Romeo Sin"]

It's always great to see a piece of Chaos' player-made lore being updated and maintained to reflect the development over time, so I appreciate the work that you've put into updating this.

Romeo Sin said:
  • Region: Outer Rim
As per the template, please link Outer Rim Territories here.

Romeo Sin said:
  • System Features:
Each planet has it's own moon
  • Maleficara
  • Eyon
  • Crucifier
  • Necro Mincore
  • Metatron
I appreciate that you included the link to Metatron here, but otherwise this is just a list of names. I would suggest fleshing this aspect of the submission out some more, particularly as your concept has several years of development.

Are there any details as to what kind of planets these are? Are all of them planets (that is, you say that each planet has a moon, so are any of these moons)? What is the astronomical structure of this star system? Are all of the named objects inside of the habitation zone? Are there any asteroid fields or other areas/objects of note?

Romeo Sin said:
  • Location: Same hex as Karra next to Hoth
Please link Karra and Hoth here.

Romeo Sin said:
  • Major Imports: Common exports of most other planets of example: Kesh
As per the template, common materials and ores should be listed here (Ex. Durasteel ore), so please edit this to be a more descriptive account of what you intend by 'common exports'.

Romeo Sin said:
  • Climate: Temperate, Arid, Frozen, Rainy/Swampy, Tundra
  • Primary Terrain: Grassland/Mountain
Given the description of the climate, I would recommend adding swamp lands and tunda to the terrain.

Romeo Sin said:
Force Nexus (Optional): The Scarlands - Darksided
You can remove the words (Optional) here.

Romeo Sin said:
  • Culture: Daily life was full of working all day, and sleeping at night with few days off. The King had many people working many jobs, but had them working constantly. So this gave them all the ability to make income, but hardly any time to enjoy it. The King hardly came out of his keep, only to stop crisis, and wars. The government was set up so that only the King's sons could rule, declaring he owned the planet, and all its people. Essentially they were all humans, and the force was used, but it wasnt called the force, it was called the Dark Sign. Many people of the kingdom could use it, and exactly how they find out how to use it seems to deal with the Rakata. Days were spent in the sunny times, and seasons existing. There was happiess, and sadness. Royal families wanted to take over, but were easily stopped by the Kings army, and put back in their place. Apart from that life was normal for anyone under rule of a King. Anyone capable of using the force was forced into the King's army, unless they were noble of blood. This, however, is no longer the case. The modern inhabitants live in a much more peaceful lifestyle, coming to Eclipstica knowing it welcomes many refugees and exiles. The daily goings on the planet are no different than Coruscant or Mandalor, with the exception that people stay away from the Scarlands, and citizens may not enter the Black Gate without permission.
Please link Rakata and Coruscant here. Also, if referring to the planet, the proper spelling is Mandalore (please link as well).

Romeo Sin said:
  • Government: Monarchy Clan system
  • Affiliation: [member="Romeo "]Sin has most say over the planet with [member="Aedan Miles"] having a say in things sometimes, and [member="Solan Charr"] having a prince status through Romeo. Faction wise: The Shadow Dynasty and the Crimson Covenant with the Academy of Bogan
  • Freedom & Oppression: While Romeo is considered the king of the planet, his rule is more so for major decisions for the planet, the people of Eclipstica are no directly ruled by Romeo, nor does he wish to be that sort of ruler. All are welcome to go and come as they please, they just have to follow common sense of laws.
Given that this is a monarchy, I would suggest clarifying Aedan Miles' role, as it seems ambiguous. You mention that he has 'a say in things sometimes.' Is that a regional authority, such as a governor? More of a local authority (such as a mayor or sheriff)? Also, if Romeo only makes major decisions, how is local government executed? Through the dukes/dutchesses of the Five Cities? Through some other vassal or feudal means?

Also, what does law enforcement look like on the planet? You mention that people have to follow 'common sense of laws,' but what are the penalties for violations of those laws? And who enforces the laws?

Romeo Sin said:
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

-During the Infinite Empire, there was a Force Hound named Gaiden. Gaiden was used has an experiment, and they later through him into the planet called Eclipstica where he was ordered to begin building a Empire here. The Rakata later on with the war with the Jedaii, forgot about Gaidens mission, believing he had probably died along with the other slaves they left with him to build the empire.
Please link Force Hound and Je'daii here.

Those are my comments, I look forward to your thoughts in reply. Please let me know if you have any questions, otherwise please tag me when you have had an opportunity to complete your edits.
 
[member="Zardu Hasselfrau"] Firstly, thanks for the compliment! It did take sometime to convert it to the new template, but well worth it!


Secondly, I made all edits as asked.

I listed the planets AS planets which a very brief description of what they are like (some of these will be subbed to give a better detail I just dont have the concept fully developed yet)

All links have been posted

I listed in better detail what would be major imports, Eclipstica is nearly fully self sustained on it's own so it doesnt need much outside it's system

I went into better detail on how Romeo, Aedan, Solan, and the dukes/duchess work as far as ruling and carrying out decisions.

If you need more detail, I can do that, as far as the laws...I mean....I could TRY to post more laws for examples, but I dont really have law lore made.
 
[member="Zardu Hasselfrau"] | [member="Romeo Sin"]

Awesome work on this the both of you. The planet looks really good and I love all the work that has gone into it over time.

Just one note, since this planet is meant to replace the old submission I will be archiving that when I approve this.

And on that note.

APPROVED
 
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