Critique my Character(s)

[Alexandra Feanor]

What the title says, tell me what you think about Alexandra Cinthra, my writing ability, where i am perfect and where i can improve, all of it. Even if its a hit on her back story, strengths and weaknesses, or past role play experience. This also goes for the following characters.

• Alexandra Cinthra
• [member="Ellain Hadrin"]
• [member="Solan Charr"]
• [member="Yusan Fenn"]

Thats about it, so ya, let loose the gates of hell on my abilities to RP the chars and the chars themselves.

 

[Darth Vaildra]

Kark, complete and utter kark, I award you no points and may God have mercy on your soul.

Seriously though, you are probably the most fun person I have ever RPd with.

 

[Soeht]

I miss Yusan. When will he return to me?

 

[Alexandra Feanor]

[member="Darth Junra"]

When someone returns his girlfriend and children

 

[Neriah Aurore]

Kidnaps [member="Alexandra Lianne Feanor"] ... She's my master but I will protect her forever!! (Yep that's a great charrie the others idk)

 

[Alexandra Feanor]

[member="Neriah Aurore"]

Hey there, no kidnapping your master, don't forget she is pregnant with a Sith Lord's child... ([member="Darth Tsolan"])

 

[Neriah Aurore]

You don't have the force bond~ He will never find you! [member="Alexandra Lianne Feanor"]

 

[Vulpesen]

Ashlan bond, much harder to hide. I will find her, then I will destroy you.

[member="Neriah Aurore"]


Love your characters. Especially Alexandra.

 

[Asara Venter]

What's with the abundance of people with glowing eyes and peroxide white hair? Did everyone grow up atop a radioactive dump or something?

 

[Preliat Mantis]

why they all gotta be white haired people

 

[Vulpesen]

I'm a new species and I had a bottle of Suurru knows what cracked on my head.

[member="Asara Venter"]

 

[Zac Grayson]

[member="Darth Tsolan"]
With that avi picture I have never been able to fully take you seriously.

 

[Zac Grayson]

[member="Alexandra Lianne Feanor"]

when did your character. Alexandra, learn Jar'Kai? I saw you teaching it, yet I have not seen you use it

 

[Eddie]

*ahem* Solan you did good with, idk about the others.

 

[Alexandra Feanor]

[member="Darth Ares"]

It was literally used by Alexandra in the very first thread lol, it is literally the first thing i had her learn and has been used by her since her time in the Sith Empire as old.

 

[Alexandra Feanor]

[member="Asara Venter"]

A: Im Echani... unless you meant Tsolan, hes just weird.

 

[Vulpesen]

[member="Alexandra Lianne Feanor"] needs to have better taste in guys. I mean seriously, woman has problems with bestiality... terrible writing on that one. *refuses to drip sarcasm and instead pours it*

 

[Alexandra Feanor]

[member="Darth Tsolan"]

Noted, Hey [member="Romeo Sin"], you still free?

 

[Vulpesen]

.... *sound of a heart shattering into microscopic bits*