Cogadh Chitin

[Laertia Io]

• Intent: To sub a Unique Medium Armor

• Image Source: https://www.deviantart.com/zeushk/art/Clavicus-Vile-434595347
• Canon Link: N/A
• Permissions: N/A
• Primary Source: Medium Armor

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: Laertia Io
• Affiliation: DECEASED Erskine Barran
• Market Status: Closed
• Model: N/A
• Modularity: Yes (Weapon mounts on wrists)
• Production: Unique
• Material: Armorweave, Phrik (Alchemized), Special Electronics

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Powered Battle Armor
• Weight: Average
• Resistances:
  • Energy: High
  • Kinetic: High
  • Lightsabers: High
  • Acid: Very Low
  • Sonic: Very Low
  • Lightning: High
  • Gravitic: Very Low
  • Vibro: High (Conditional)
  • Cryo: High
  • Flame: High
  • Dark Side: Extreme
  • Paddle Beams: Very Low
  • Ion: Very Low
  • Magnetics: Very Low
  • Vacuum: Very High
  • Undersea Pressure: Very High
  • Biological: High

SPECIAL FEATURES

Powered Assault Suit that increases wearer's strength, speed, and reflexes by a factor of three


Suit geared to protect from wide range of conventional threats, including sustained travel in space or underwater, with an internal, 42 hour condensed oxygen supply

Built in recharging electric Rocket Pack, allowing for 42 minutes of flight time before it needs 21 to recharge

Gauntlets have mounts for wrist weapons

Built in climbing claws in gloves and magnetized boots

Enchanted to walk on water

Enchanted to slow descent of falls to survivable levels

Extreme resistance to the Dark Side

Combat Hud in clouding pistol, rifle, and sword targeting software, with binocular, thermal, X Ray, and Nightvision

STRENGTHS

Ferrigno: Enchanted to increase the wearers, strength, speed and reflexes by a factor of seven

Sorcerer's Bane: Enchanted to be extremely resistant to the Dark Side

Long Fall Bonus: Enchanted to slow the wearer's descent while falling to survivable levels

Modularity: Wrist mounts can take Multiple types of Wrist Weaponry

Healing: A Prototype Advanced Life Support System heals all but the most absolutely mortal of injuries in a span of 35 minutes or less

Conventional Threats: Can protect from both blasters and bullets, Lightsabers, Vibroweapons, Temperature Extremes, and Military grade diseases and poison

Go anywhere: It's high pressure and vacuum resistance enable it to be used as an armored space suit or diving suit with a 42 hour oxygen supply. Also has a built in electric rocket pack with 42 minutes of flight time, needing 21 to recharge

Vision: Full binocular, x ray, thermal, and night vision, with built in pistol, rifle, and sword targeting software, which may help slightly improve offense and defense in melee

WEAKNESSES

Ion: Ion disables most of its systems except it's oxygen and vision modes for up to seven minutes

Acid: Military grade acid weapons eat through it rapidly unless a counter agent is immediately applied

Force Voids: It's enchanted features won't function in Force Voids

Gaps: The joint areas are vulnerable to vibroblades

Sound: Does very little to avery sonic damage, which cracks the armor wear hit

Magnetics: Magnetic weapons and highly magnetized surfaces scramble most of its Electronics except the oxygen supply, for 14 Minutes

Paddle Beams: Paddle beams short out it's life support system for 35 minutes, and heavily stun the wearer

DESCRIPTION

This war chitin is a private effort by Laertia to honor Erskine Barran, the only NIO commander she has any respect for. Enchanted and given multiple high tech upgrades, this armor is designed to resist even the worst Dark Side attack, as well as threats from more conventional sources. It's design is inspired by the armor worn by Ancient Galidraan Warriors during the Gulag Era, who fought Dark Side users.

 

[Listib Hibin]

There is so much to unpack so I am making this simple from here on out for every submission moving forward so please read this.

Each submission of yours needs to eliminate all double spacing that does not involve proper separation as, for example, Strength to Weakness. It takes to long to read each one of these and causes a minor headache each time.

You need to also start considering how powerful each submission you are making versus how others make their own. Not all of them but this submission is a good example in a moment. Check over others that are similar and play with it from there.

If you do not have a submission for prototype anything, then do not include it. This has been a trend and generally it involves two weeks to a month for a submission to even pass through.

While this submission is not horrible on it, you have lists, literal lists of weaknesses and strengths that honestly in some sections, just needs to be put into the Special Features section. Size them down so people can read and understand what you are bringing to the table.

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Now I am going to do my actual review. Issues are the following:

Powered Assault Suit that increases wearer's strength, speed, and reflexes by a factor of seven
Ferrigno: Enchanted to increase the wearers, strength, speed and reflexes by a factor of seven

Cannot do a factor of seven here. That is saying you want them to lift the AT-AT nearby, not happening. You are not also going the speed of a speederbike or the reflexs of a marvel character. Your maximum factor should be at a three for strength while speed and reflexs should be at a two at the maximum.

Prototype Advanced Life Support System, capable of healing from all but the most severe wounds in a span of 35 minutes
Healing: A Prototype Advanced Life Support System heals all but the most absolutely mortal of injuries in a span of 35 minutes or less

Link to the submission that applies to this. If it does not exist, I recommend making it before the deadline in two days or just wait in limbo till next month.

Gaps: The joint areas are vulnerable to vibroblades

Not how that works, if there is a gap, it should just be more vulnerable, straight to the point. If you wish to keep this, just change it to being more vulnerable to attack.

 

[Listib Hibin]

Hey, just a friendly reminder we are back online. Let me know when you do some changes.
Laertia Io

 

[Listib Hibin]

I have given this long enough wait.

Archiving due to inactivity.
Laertia Io