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[Credit Wizard]

As I consider myself a relatively new person on chaos and not that well known within the community. Being a new writer on forum rps compared to discord rp servers where pagaraphs and interactions are not necessary needed to make a good story but the people within it that make the story so exciting to read. I'd like to personally thank all of those that gave me a chance and allowed me to experience the full rp experience on a forum and to those that are currently writing with any of my characters at the current time of me posting this.

I figured it was time for improvements and for my characters to get feedback so that they can adapt. I'd appreciate any and all comments towards the characters that I am writing. Give me everything and don't beat around the bush. Are they a bad character? or are they one dimensional with nothing going for them. Receiving feedback is the best way for improvement overall and I look forward to any that you can give me at this current time.

Characters that I currently write:

Darth Mordheim
Kronsantous the Everchosen
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[Heath Valhoun]

Having interacted with you ICly and OOCly on multiple occasions, I think you are an excellent writer. As for your characters, I think Monkrove and Cephiro are great. I haven't met or read about Kornsantous and Mordheim...though you obviously take inspiration from Warhammer, which is a plus haha.

One of your strongsuits is inserting humor in your posts without taking away from the story. For example Monkrove ate 25 chicken legs and 4 steaks at the thanksgiving on Mnemosyne...but there wasn't a big deal about it. It was funny, but it took nothing away from the story as Monkrove proceeded to discuss the pirate threat.

I don't know your weaknesses yet, I haven't really observed any so far, so I guess overall I'd say you're doing spectacular at RPing here, and I'm strongly looking forward to continuing to RP with you.