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Approved Tech Buonaparte

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create a Unique Revolver
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PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: Maranon
  • Affiliation: Maranon Maranon
  • Market Status: Closed
  • Model: N/A
  • Modularity: Yes (Can accept ammo variants chambered in the same caliber and scopes and gunstocks
  • Production: Unique
  • Material: Meteoric Iron (Alchemized)
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: Alchemized Revolver
  • Size: Small
  • Weight: Light
  • Ammunition Type: 9mm Revolver Slug Rounds
  • Ammunition Capacity: Very Low | 8 shots
  • Effective Range: Long
  • Rate of Fire: Very Low
  • Damage Output: Extreme
  • Recoil: Low
SPECIAL FEATURES
  • Alchemized Revolver that enchants every bullet it fires to be incredibly poisonous to Dark Beings (Dark Side Users, Sithspawn) other than herself--it is incapable of harming her. Capable of Poisoning other organisms in general
  • Enchanted so Maranon can easily control every bullet fired with Telekinesis, allowing sharp, pinpoint changes in direction
  • Alchemization renders it near indestructible, even to Lightsabers
  • Able to penetrate nearly all Alchemized Materials with it's enchanted bullets and do immense damage even to very tough Organic tissue
  • Enchantment prevents it from being ripped out of the hand with Telekinesis
STRENGTHS
  • Pierce: Enchanted to do fantastic damage to Alchemized armors, possibly ripping through even the strongest Organic tissue
  • Toxicity: The bullets are enchanted to be highly poisonous to most organics, causing, stupor, fatigue, and vomiting if they are not strong enough to resist it's highly potent effects. This effect doubles in strength if hitting Dark beings such as Dark Force Users and Sith Spawn
  • Strength of Ages: Nearly indestructible, even to standard Lightsabers, which would have to be held against it for months 24 hours a day before visible damage would even start to show.
  • Range: Unusually high range for a Revolver--over 400 meters
  • Go with the flow: Enchanted to allow Maranon to easily control every bullet fired with telekinesis, enabling bullets to make very sharp turns that would normally be impossible without losing speed of impact, allowing Maranon to shoot around corners
  • Anti Disarm: Enchanted to be extremely difficult to disarm with telekinesis
  • Recoil: Low recoil
  • Modular: Can accept different ammo types in the same caliber (Incendiary, Cryonic, Electric, and Acid rounds) and scopes as well as gunstocks, turning it into a type of carbine
  • Loyalty to the Queen: Enchanted to be incapable of harming Maranon, it's first owner.
WEAKNESSES
  • Force Voids: Won't function in Force Voids
  • Fire Rate: Very Low
  • Ammo Count: Also very low
  • Conventional: While great for piercing alchemy materials, it takes a few more bullets to punch through normal materials. It also does not ignore energy shields like most slugthowers.
  • Slow Reload: Does not accept speed loader mechanisms...each chamber must be reloaded by hand
  • Poisons only normal bullets: While it can take alternative ammo, it won't add the poison effect it does to normal bullets
DESCRIPTION

Take heed, Children of Mand'Alor , for those who practice Sorcery do indeed carry the lethal instruments of mortals on occasion, twisted by unholy art to profane purpose. And among the most terrible is the unholy firearm Buonaparte, forged from a Fallen Star, it's grip fashioned from the bone of its maker. It was Buonaparte that visited woe upon The Mandalorian Seer He-That-Saw-Red, wielded by one of the heathens of the Jedi Order after He-That-Saw-Red claimed the head of the Great Jedi of The North. With a fiery crimson blade seized from a Heathen, He-That-Saw-Red foresaw his own death, and did everything he could to prevent it, but the Jedi was crafty, and the power of Buonaparte too great, even for the Iron of our people. The great Seer fell, but not before telling the Jedi of their own eventual fall to the Dark Side in his last vision.

--translated from a Clay Tablet written in Mandalorian Commando Verse

Buonaparte's true origins are unknown IC. What is universally agreed upon is that this revolver was forged from meteor iron...every legend agrees on this one fact alone.

Kerimi Avalon, Maranon's mortal identity, was the first to craft and wield this firearm after beginning her study of magic in secret. After her fall to the Dark Side, this was one of many treasures of hers The Jedi confiscated after her heresy was uncovered. Maranon eventually stole it back and it remained in her private collection for years until her first murder. The Revolver has passed through countless hands since, yet remains as immaculate as the day it was forged. Maranon spent countless millions tracking the ancient firearm down to return it to her private collection--it is telling that of all the ancient relics she tracked down after her resurrection, this was the very first relic she sought.
 
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Multiple issues.

  • Manufacturer: Unknown (Master Gunsmith)
Not an accepted manufacturer. Just say it is made by yourself or assisted in it, unknown does not work.

  • Material: Meteoric Steel (Alchemized)
Link this as I have no...well any real idea what Meteoric Steel is.

  • Alchemized Revolver that enchants every bullet it fires to be incredibly poisonous to Dark Beings other than herself--it is incapable of harming her. Capable of Poisoning other organisms in general
May need to explain what Dark Beings are. I honestly have no idea, link them if you can.

  • Low recoil.
  • Unusually high range for a revolver
  • Extreme Accuracy
  • Can accept different ammo types
Those are not special features, those are strengths. Please remove or change them over, don't really need to list that.

  • Able to penetrate all conventional, even Alchemized Materials with it's enchanted bullets.
  • Pierce: Enchanted to do fantastic damage to both conventional and Alchemized armors, possibly ripping through even the strongest Organic tissue
No, I am not allowing that. Reword it, it is not an anti-all weapon.

  • Range: Unusually high range for a Revolver--over 700 meters
  • Effective Range: Long Range
That is extreme range while you have Long Range (That needs to be fixed if keeping), that is not going to fly at 2,100 feet. That is longer than most sniper rifles in the military we have currently today and in Star Wars, that almost rivals I believe the Nightstinger. Reduce the range strength or change the range to Extreme, figure out what you want to reduce from there.

  • Ammo Count: Also very lo
May want to finish the word Low.


Take your time and check it over again after you finish the edits. I also warn that people can say they dodge the bullet, even if enchanted to keep going forever or simply say it does not work.

Let me know when you finish the edits and please take your time.
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