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Approved Tech Be'senaarbeviin, Bessie fer short

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS: SLUGTHROWER
  • Classification: Slugthrower
  • Size: Average
  • Weight: Extremely Heavy
  • Ammunition Type: Anythin' in 12 Gauge bud.
  • Ammunition Capacity: High - 50 Shells
  • Effective Range: Personal
  • Rate of Fire: Very High
  • Stopping Power: Extreme
  • Recoil: High


SPECIAL FEATURES
  • Quad-Barrel design, four times the fun y'all.
  • Pump Action, designed to overwhelm an enemy.
  • Easy to disassemble for quick maintenance.
  • Modular Scope Railing allows for a variety of magnification options.
STRENGTHS
  • Scattershot Slugthrower: The Be'senaarbeviin is designed with one purpose only. Destroy whatever is directly in front of it. It do that pretty good, Ah'd say.
  • Ammo Types be Damned: Bessie is designed to take pretty much any shotgun ammo you can fit in her.
  • Four Barrels, my god: Bessie was expertly machined to fire off all four barrels in unison. If you need more stopping power than that, you probably need a bigger gun.
  • Slam Fire: Bessie was designed after Farkle's daddy's old slugthrower, with a feature that allows you to hold the trigger, and so long as you got ammo in the magazine, you can pump the action and keep shootin'.
  • Butt Stock Club: Given it's construction, Bessie can also double as a massive club should you get into a scrap. She's built Claiborne Tough.
WEAKNESSES
  • Long Ranges: This is a shotgun. Don't try and use it as a sniper rifle. You're good to clear trenches, not pop heads.
  • I GOT A JAM!: Given that the gun is cycling four shells at once with every pump, it's no wonder that it's prone to jams.
  • Ammo Hose: Despite it's sizable magazine (not shown in picture), you're still firing four shells every pull of the trigger. That can go by fast.
  • Catastrophic Failure: This gun was built in the backrooms of Clan Claiborne's capital ship. You better bet it's prone to falling apart if you don't take good care of it.
DESCRIPTION

Designed by Farkleberry Forest at the request of Clan Claiborne, The Be'senaarbeviin (Missle Lance in Basic), or Bessie as the boys call it, was designed as the proverbial Boomstick of the clan. Designed pretty much to be idiot proof, Bessie was built to withstand the rigors of Claiborne combat, designed to be used both as a firearm, and as a melee weapon. Designed with an action that allows for all four barrels to be loaded at once, even if that means you're going through ammo like water. Once you're out, it does make a great stick to smash you enemies with.
 
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Ravenfire

King of Pumpkins
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Farkleberry Forest Farkleberry Forest

Hi there, I will be your judge for this submission.

So a couple things, starting with effective range, low isn't a rating in this field but it seems like your going for personal in that. So if you could change that, that would be great.

Your also way over the balance of 0, so to break it down

Limited -2 -2
Average 0 -2
Very Heavy -2 -4
High +1 -3
Personal -1 -4
Very High +2 -2
Extreme +3 +1
Low +1 +2

Thus your 2 points over the balance, you will need to lower so ratings in order to make the balance of 0.
 

Ravenfire

King of Pumpkins
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Farkleberry Forest Farkleberry Forest

Okay, so quick thing just before I continue this reviewing process in the rest of this post. Please please don't ping judges multiple times in a thread. We are volunteers and will get back to you as soon as we possibly can. So next time if you spot you did something wrong before a judge gets back to it then just fix it without saying anything beyond your first post until a judge has responded alright? The only time I would ping a judge again is if its been a couple weeks and they haven't gotten back to you just as a reminder, cause we are also human and some times forget.

Now with that out of the way.

Everything on this looks great.

Approved.
 
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