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Been a while - Feedback on Abyss

I guess by now people know that I like some outside opinions/perspective on Abyss as a character and on me as a writer every once in a while, so feel free to tell me everything, the good, the bad and everything in between. Don't know what else to say, at least besides: yo, thank you for writing an answer to this.

Also to be helpful for once have some links to a few of my personal favourites of my recent threads:

The Blackout - Bar Thread with Thraxis
Disassembly Line - Training Quest with Abyss current Apprentice
Critical Colloquy - Duel with Abyss master
The Hand that Mocked them - Abyss and allies trying to reclaim Malachor from TRE
ʜᴄ sᴠɴᴛ ᴅʀᴀᴄᴏɴᴇs
Shortsighted fool that has no grasp as to what TRUE greatness is! *cybernetic wheezing*

Jokes aside, I feel [member="Darth Abyss"] is a very good representation of what a Sith Lord should aspire to be — unique, with a defined powerbase and well-developed powers, yet not overbearingly overpowered nor unpleasantly smug.

If I had to suggest a change, I feel like there's been too little tension (in the threads I've seen) between his character and his new form. He still plays cards and fraternizes with criminals; these are actions expected of an ordinary Sith Lord, but not a spiritual being. If you want that bibe, it's fine, but I simply feel such a dramatic shift in nature of being would lead to more fundamental changes in brhavior.

Can't wait to write more with you!
I think i might have had a character in one of your threads - once. But i do frequently see your work, and enjoy the read. Your character is a bit common too me, but in a world where ten million words have been written about something, diverging is a bit difficult. Maybe I havent really seen the full backstory, but to me it feels like Abyss is just Abyss because of boredom, really.

Either way, you as a writer are enjoyable and I look forward to mayhap writing with you again.

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